Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello there
I have come to this six-less for which I apologize.
This is a wonderfully written - intelligent and well-structured piece.
I really admire the style here and I can only encourage you.
Great atmosphere, so-much so that the picture is irrelevant: the words are more than enough.
I wish you well with your work - this is a great piece.

Warm regards

phill

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2012

Thank you Phil for another thoughtful review and the good wishes. I will take a rain check on that six--Wendy

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Wendy, congratulations on your contest win and thank you for creating this form :-)
strong alternate-line rhyming and good cadence throughout
I love how the fourth line is the speaker's running commentary on the reverend's wife and her gossipy conversation
Great form and fun satiric humor :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2012

Thanks Brooke, I have been thinking of how best to use it, and it does lend itself to storytelling, using the shortened line for emphasis or contrast. --Wendy

Comment from whizpurr ^-^

Excellent

Hi rose,
Many thanks for sponsoring this excellent contest and for sharing your poem which is a perfect example of what can be done with this interesting form. Your poem was so entertaining and well written. Loved the fun expressed in those short lines at the end of each stanza. Wish I had six shiny stars left to send your way... am out of them, but please know "you rock"! Best wishes and warm regards, W ^-^

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012

Thank you so much Mizz W. I did have fun writing this one and I loved seeing what everyone came up with. Thanks for the would-have six too. It means a lot.

Comment from Joannforsberg

Excellent

She's here, it seems, to "comfort" me.
She prattles on of this and that.
Her sympathy is hardly free.
The nosey bat.

Excellent poem. voting for yours.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012

Thanks so much for the read and review. I find it hard to believe that no one had tripped over this form before, but I am having great fun with it. It is interesting to see it used in so many creative styles. Thanks for the stars too!

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Hilarious! I loved the humor and wit, and thank you so much for sponsoring this fun contest. First line: maybe "rev'rends" as the way I read the poem in that very first line is 9 syllables. Great multi-syllable abab rhymes! Of course, I wish you good luck! Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012

Good morning, thank you for the read and review. You know, I out-loud checked with lots of folks and they said reverend when it comes to the guy or gal is usually pronounced with two even though it truly has three. I always have a dilemma with that. I at first had written "the rector's wife," but changed it to the second reference later in the poem for variety. . I'll have to change it back I guess, or use your foreshortening. Thanks for pointing it out. I shall ponder--after a couple of more cups of coffee.--Wendy

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

THis is exceptional. Letting us in on the thoughts of one of the main characters is brilliant. I really got a kick out the snide remarks at the end of each verse. Perfect rhythm, rhyme and imagery. Wish I had a six for you. Best of luck in the contest. Linda

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012

Thanks so much Linda, have to confess I voted for yours. Your rhymes are delicious and I am so thankful when I come across someone who knows what consistent meter is. Good luck to us both.

Comment from Silverlock

Excellent

Ah, what a clever poem, Rose, with a diabolical kick at the end! LOL
Loved the story you told, great flow and rhyme within the rules of the tetrabreve - Excellent!

Best of Luck, Barb

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012

Thank you for the read and review. I do have a bit of the devious in my soul and it jumps out unexpectedly from time to time. I find that this form works really well for story telling. Just having lots of fun with it.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your use of this new form to tell and story and include judgmental, inner thoughts in italics. Your rhymes and rhythm are quite appealing. Best wishes in the contest and thank you for stretching us! -Joan

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012

Thank you Joan and also for entering the contest. I am enjoying all the different styles that fit this form and reading everyone's work. I was very surprised to find that I was the first to trip over this form--quite by accident as I goofed up my monotetra rules. I have had fun this past week in taking old work and adapting it to this format. Many of them are much improved. I hope you try this again. If you do, please let me know. I am fascinated to see where this leads.--Wendy

reply by Joan E. on 25-Oct-2012

Thank you again for introducing us to this form--I am certain I will try it again with a different rhyme scheme. Best wishes to us both in the voting booth for your intriguing contest. Hugs- Joan

Comment from Sally Carter

Exceptional

I so want to give this a 6, but I confess I didn't quite get the line about you commenting on the epidemic and the reverend's wife's reply about redemption. I'm sure I'm just being dim, so sort me out!
Apart from that one query, it's a gem! I love the setting, the premise, the vicarious delight in the misfortune of others. And of course, those wonderful asides about her shoes and hair. Ain't that just the truth?
Oh my goodness! I think I just got the ending!!! There was I, about to say how poignant it was, but are you suggesting??? If so, it's even more brilliant than I thought. Hell, have a 6, because I am sure I missed the subtlety of the lines I questioned.
A super form, and bravo for coming up with this.
Sally

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012

Dear Sally, Oh yes she did! You got it at last, and subtle I was. I truly appreciate the green one and I love playing with this shortened line. I am so excited to see the different styles it engenders. I found it hard to believe that no one had tripped over this form before, but I'm glad I found it and I have spent the last few days retrofitting several poems to this style and in several it works better than the original. Thank you again for all the stars.

Comment from RYME4U

Exceptional

Excellent. This is the hands down winner. I love the story, the rhyme, the even word flow and the artwork you chose. I like this new style (Tetrebreve) I hope they have it again.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012

Thank you so much for the read and for entering the contest. I am so excited to see the different styles this form engenders. I found it hard to believe that no one had tripped over this form before, but I'm glad I found it and I have spent the last few days retrofitting several poems to this style and it works better than the original. Let me know if you try the form again, contest or not. I am ever curious.

reply by RYME4U on 25-Oct-2012

I have entered a poem in that contest.(Nectar holic)I am surprised, too, that they didn't use it sooner. I have never heard of it before but like writing in that style, too.I am a rhyming poet so it fits perfectly into my writing style.