All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "We, the Peaceful Watchers"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from GroundedAngel
It's a beautiful and peaceful poem. I'm always relunctant to write a review of your poetry. It's so eloquent and I feel like a bumbling idiot trying to express my point of view. I don't know how you manage to follow any of those ' rules ' and STILL remain creative, but you do !
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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It's a beautiful and peaceful poem. I'm always relunctant to write a review of your poetry. It's so eloquent and I feel like a bumbling idiot trying to express my point of view. I don't know how you manage to follow any of those ' rules ' and STILL remain creative, but you do !
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for enjoying my piece GA! Actually that was my first attempt at blank verse, do you believe! If you think about it, it's actually quite simple - five feet in each line, iambic pentameter (da DUM) ... and after fiddling around for awhile, you just start to think in the rhythm! So glad you enjoyed it! :) Sharyn
Comment from Irene D. Garces
The author's note helped me understand why this is so and why this is that. The many restrictions / requirements make it very difficult to make for someone as simple as myself. But of course not at all difficult with a great poet like you.
Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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The author's note helped me understand why this is so and why this is that. The many restrictions / requirements make it very difficult to make for someone as simple as myself. But of course not at all difficult with a great poet like you.
Wonderful job!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Wow, Irene - you're so nice! Thank you very much my dear!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from mshirachot
Absolutely loved your notes!!! So descriptive, and I agree with you wholeheartedly about the "higher" and "exaltation". Sometimes, there are no other words that express our thoughts. Am glad you took a stand! Thanks also for all the explanations to help those of us still learning the ropes.
The poem itself was a water wonderland. My husband will like this one...as he surfed in his younger 'glory' days.
Thanks for sharing. Great job!
Blessings to you,
Marsha
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Absolutely loved your notes!!! So descriptive, and I agree with you wholeheartedly about the "higher" and "exaltation". Sometimes, there are no other words that express our thoughts. Am glad you took a stand! Thanks also for all the explanations to help those of us still learning the ropes.
The poem itself was a water wonderland. My husband will like this one...as he surfed in his younger 'glory' days.
Thanks for sharing. Great job!
Blessings to you,
Marsha
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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My great pleasure Marsha - thank you so much for a delightful review!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from MacJanny
Very nice work here. I enjoyed that very much and look forward to your future submissions. Lots of detail which really plays up with the imagery that floated so nicely through my mind as I read.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Very nice work here. I enjoyed that very much and look forward to your future submissions. Lots of detail which really plays up with the imagery that floated so nicely through my mind as I read.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much MacJanny - I don't think I've heard from you before? I appreciate your reading & critique!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from carlaedi
You always paint such vivid images with your words, it is an incredible gift you've got there! Brilliant work, it's really well written and it evokes a lot of emotion, a certain nostalgia. Love the positivism of it, the ending note of living life with joy, enjoying the moment and being wild and free.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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You always paint such vivid images with your words, it is an incredible gift you've got there! Brilliant work, it's really well written and it evokes a lot of emotion, a certain nostalgia. Love the positivism of it, the ending note of living life with joy, enjoying the moment and being wild and free.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much carla - I do appreciate your lovely stars!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from shy1250
This brought back some of the joy of my youth--now usually only distant memories. I didn't surf, I dirt-biked, but with the same joyous go-for-it attitude you describe so perfectly. I'll join in the vow to live from now to end this way--I had forgotten, and you reminded me. Thank u so much. later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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This brought back some of the joy of my youth--now usually only distant memories. I didn't surf, I dirt-biked, but with the same joyous go-for-it attitude you describe so perfectly. I'll join in the vow to live from now to end this way--I had forgotten, and you reminded me. Thank u so much. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much my dear! Yes, it is something we forget, isn't it? and it doesn't have to be limited to physicality - it's how we live life, I realized, watching my 15 year old son! blessings for your magic 'sixer' - I'm totally honored!
Best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from Kaine Darcwater
I love the way you use so many fantastic words in this poem. You describe the ocean very well. I've never actually seen the ocean in person, always wanted to. Those surfers are a brave lot. Not do they only have to worry about sharks but they can also run into a deadly coral reef. I'd fall off the board every try. LOL ;)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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I love the way you use so many fantastic words in this poem. You describe the ocean very well. I've never actually seen the ocean in person, always wanted to. Those surfers are a brave lot. Not do they only have to worry about sharks but they can also run into a deadly coral reef. I'd fall off the board every try. LOL ;)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Bryan - never seen the ocean!??? Goodness, where do you live? and yes, I'm the type who would end up head first in the sand, probably with both feet sticking out!
Best wishes, and many thanks for reviewing my dear,
Sharyn
Comment from DALLAS01
What an awesome introduction into the world of surfing, for those who are not familiar with its enticements. You have created a colorful portrait of energy and freedom. Your imagery is enhanced by strong verbs that move the poem along in a rhythmic ebb and flow.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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What an awesome introduction into the world of surfing, for those who are not familiar with its enticements. You have created a colorful portrait of energy and freedom. Your imagery is enhanced by strong verbs that move the poem along in a rhythmic ebb and flow.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Dallas, I so appreciate your special '6' and your understanding of my piece. Thank you so much for an intelligent and empathic read my friend! Best wishes, Sharyn
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You're welcome. I really enjoyed it.
Comment from Keri353
Ahhhh, the ocean, what a wonderful place to be. And I don't think anyone can ever win against Mother Nature, lol, good wish though. I join you as the "peaceful watcher and the wishful watcher. This poem is light and fun. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Keri
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Ahhhh, the ocean, what a wonderful place to be. And I don't think anyone can ever win against Mother Nature, lol, good wish though. I join you as the "peaceful watcher and the wishful watcher. This poem is light and fun. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Keri
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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thx Keri!
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha from Hawaii, This doesn't have to be a special form it is beautiful, I'm a lover of the Ocean. Your descriptive words are suburb. I totally enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Aloha Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Aloha from Hawaii, This doesn't have to be a special form it is beautiful, I'm a lover of the Ocean. Your descriptive words are suburb. I totally enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Aloha Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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"Aloha" my dear - where do you live? We're in Maui! :) Sharyn