Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Love's casualty"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from fluffnstuff
another good one. I cab't believe how romantic it is. Yes, it is a bit of a heavy that most men wouldn't understand. Yet it is worded so lovely.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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another good one. I cab't believe how romantic it is. Yes, it is a bit of a heavy that most men wouldn't understand. Yet it is worded so lovely.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
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thanks for the review and the stars.
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i'm in love with ur pen. mail it asap (lol) but seriously too.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Another winner in my books. Love the strong language of your work. It drags you down the page forcing your reader to participate. I like that. Thanks for sharing xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Another winner in my books. Love the strong language of your work. It drags you down the page forcing your reader to participate. I like that. Thanks for sharing xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for taking the time to review my poem and for the stars.
Comment from JeJo
You have correct naani form, with four lines and twenty-two syllables. That which is good can be just as bad, or turn on you just as it can favor you. That is a sad aspect of life, but one that we can cope with, for the benefits of love outweigh the detriments of love misused. I like the end rhymes you added, which give this poem a smooth rhythm. You express the outcome of love that hurts, as "horrific" "monstrous" and "tragic" Excellent word choices throughout. Great work, and good luck in the contest. All the best, JeJo
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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You have correct naani form, with four lines and twenty-two syllables. That which is good can be just as bad, or turn on you just as it can favor you. That is a sad aspect of life, but one that we can cope with, for the benefits of love outweigh the detriments of love misused. I like the end rhymes you added, which give this poem a smooth rhythm. You express the outcome of love that hurts, as "horrific" "monstrous" and "tragic" Excellent word choices throughout. Great work, and good luck in the contest. All the best, JeJo
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thanks
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from words
Ah you describe well the overwhelming grief of abandonment:
Oh love's horrific
wake of devastation
Monstrous and tragic
without provocation
Love the use of "monstrous" and "horrific" ... and so it must have seemed for a three year old
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Ah you describe well the overwhelming grief of abandonment:
Oh love's horrific
wake of devastation
Monstrous and tragic
without provocation
Love the use of "monstrous" and "horrific" ... and so it must have seemed for a three year old
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you
Comment from Triple P
Heartbreaking poem (and even more heartbreaking author's notes) - so sorry to hear about that.
Wonderful use of language - very visual representation of the tragedy that can occur from 'love.'
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Heartbreaking poem (and even more heartbreaking author's notes) - so sorry to hear about that.
Wonderful use of language - very visual representation of the tragedy that can occur from 'love.'
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from humpwhistle
Even before I read the author's notes I felt the tragic sense of of loss. I don't know about you, but I've left a wake I'm not particularly proud of, too. I hope you have recoveed.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Even before I read the author's notes I felt the tragic sense of of loss. I don't know about you, but I've left a wake I'm not particularly proud of, too. I hope you have recoveed.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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thank you and yes I have
Comment from animatqua
Reading the author's notes gave me the specifics on the love that was written about in this poem. I can see many more applications to the causes and the sorrow here.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Reading the author's notes gave me the specifics on the love that was written about in this poem. I can see many more applications to the causes and the sorrow here.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem
Comment from JSway
A work like this can only come from a place of personal pain. I'm so sorry about your mom and your father. Life really does take us through our own private hells. Your emotions are so strong in these phrases, and I appreciate you sharing them with us.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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A work like this can only come from a place of personal pain. I'm so sorry about your mom and your father. Life really does take us through our own private hells. Your emotions are so strong in these phrases, and I appreciate you sharing them with us.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem
Comment from InHisownwrite
A great naani, with a great message....
Love can either build up or destroy......
There are repercussions that can last a lifetime...
monstrous and tragic.....
without provocation....... very thought provoking..
Bryan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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A great naani, with a great message....
Love can either build up or destroy......
There are repercussions that can last a lifetime...
monstrous and tragic.....
without provocation....... very thought provoking..
Bryan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem
Comment from Patricia0129
Wonderful job. My heart goes out to you and your pain. Love can leave terrible scars. They have a tendency to shape us too.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Wonderful job. My heart goes out to you and your pain. Love can leave terrible scars. They have a tendency to shape us too.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem