The Exhibitionist and The Voyeur
One Teases The Other4 total reviews
Comment from rivki1111
Hi, you appear to meet the criteria for the writing prompt, but unfortunately the plot lacks a strong story. I didn't find it enough, and it left me a bit yucky. I think some writers make the mistake of thinking sex sells, and it does, but it still has to be good entertaining reading. Bye for now, Rebekah
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Hi, you appear to meet the criteria for the writing prompt, but unfortunately the plot lacks a strong story. I didn't find it enough, and it left me a bit yucky. I think some writers make the mistake of thinking sex sells, and it does, but it still has to be good entertaining reading. Bye for now, Rebekah
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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I removed the story, based on your review.
Comment from Krugerrand
LOL! Put the word 'fantasy' into a contest and you get all sorts of sex stories. It's been an interesting afternoon reading them all. *wink*
Nice job of using all the words. Many well wishes!
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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LOL! Put the word 'fantasy' into a contest and you get all sorts of sex stories. It's been an interesting afternoon reading them all. *wink*
Nice job of using all the words. Many well wishes!
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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YEs, sex certainly goes hand in hand with fantasies, lol. I'm glad you had an interesting afternood. "wink", lol.- John
Comment from Rain Chapman
Awe, poor guys fun has been foiled, lol. A bit of hot and spicy without getting graphic, nicely done. And good use of the given words. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Awe, poor guys fun has been foiled, lol. A bit of hot and spicy without getting graphic, nicely done. And good use of the given words. Best of luck!
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Thanks, Lorraine. I'm glad you enjoyed my spicy story. I try to keep it away from being graphic. I think it's more exciting that way. Thanks for reading. - Thesis
Comment from cally2
I had to read this a couple of times to get what the wood was about. Sudden changes of thought like that are sometimes confusing to the reader. In 100 words you need to make every word count, so what is the purpose of this story? The erotica, which you do well? Or the character analysis of the peeping tom/dreamer?
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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I had to read this a couple of times to get what the wood was about. Sudden changes of thought like that are sometimes confusing to the reader. In 100 words you need to make every word count, so what is the purpose of this story? The erotica, which you do well? Or the character analysis of the peeping tom/dreamer?
Comment Written 04-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Cally2, Thanks for bringing that to my attention. I've edited the story.