Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Nicnac
Leya has really messed things up. It is a little hard to sympathize with her - when she could have avoided this by not going behind Steven's back to get the documentation. She should have been honest and up front with him. I think he would have understood.
I really like Matt. What a generous and caring man. :)
Great chapter. It reminds me of watching a movie and yelling at the characters on the screen. I was yelling at Steven and Leya. Ha Ha.
One suggestion:
The men can handle that and I have saved over ninety days of leave. (Omit 'and' to make it two sentences. It improves the flow.)
If she's anything like Dani, she'll eventually get to the point. I need to let her talk. <--This cracked me up!
Nic
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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Leya has really messed things up. It is a little hard to sympathize with her - when she could have avoided this by not going behind Steven's back to get the documentation. She should have been honest and up front with him. I think he would have understood.
I really like Matt. What a generous and caring man. :)
Great chapter. It reminds me of watching a movie and yelling at the characters on the screen. I was yelling at Steven and Leya. Ha Ha.
One suggestion:
The men can handle that and I have saved over ninety days of leave. (Omit 'and' to make it two sentences. It improves the flow.)
If she's anything like Dani, she'll eventually get to the point. I need to let her talk. <--This cracked me up!
Nic
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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Boy have I ever missed you. I am glad to hear from you. How are you and your family doing. E-mail me, please?????
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I will! ;)
Comment from empire76
BTW, good transition from love-making to heartache.
- Our only assignment right now is protecting Leya.
since he already used her name in the dialogue before this one, you can simply use she in place of Leya here.
Cheers
Empi
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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BTW, good transition from love-making to heartache.
- Our only assignment right now is protecting Leya.
since he already used her name in the dialogue before this one, you can simply use she in place of Leya here.
Cheers
Empi
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from hyway94
I'm sorry I missed a couple of chapters and now I'm catching up. Most of the time I'm home in two or three days but this time I've been gone for two weeks.I just wanted you to know why I missed two chapters. No mistakes and great word flow.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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I'm sorry I missed a couple of chapters and now I'm catching up. Most of the time I'm home in two or three days but this time I've been gone for two weeks.I just wanted you to know why I missed two chapters. No mistakes and great word flow.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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I am gratefull you like my posts enough to read them, even when the dollar amount is nothing at all. Thank you so much for your support.
Comment from Mengleoh67
Okay good I still have at least one more chapter to read and hopefully this will be resolved so I don't have to go crazy!
Excellent crafting... pace, storyline, interaction and dialogue. I'm not sure I know any men who would put this kind of effort into another guy's relationship but yet it's true to Matt's character development thus far so it works well.
And now I must read on...
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Okay good I still have at least one more chapter to read and hopefully this will be resolved so I don't have to go crazy!
Excellent crafting... pace, storyline, interaction and dialogue. I'm not sure I know any men who would put this kind of effort into another guy's relationship but yet it's true to Matt's character development thus far so it works well.
And now I must read on...
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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I certainly wouldn't want you to go crazy. Thank you for your review.
Comment from prophetess
Excellent chapter. I can relate to the characters, the dialogue is believable and flows well, easy to follow. I will enjoy reading more chapters, and catching up on previous ones. Thank you for sharing your art.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Excellent chapter. I can relate to the characters, the dialogue is believable and flows well, easy to follow. I will enjoy reading more chapters, and catching up on previous ones. Thank you for sharing your art.
Prophetess
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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you're welcome :)
Comment from bhogg
A really good read - I was disappointed to get to the end. This was apparently very well edited, so didn't really notice any areas for improvement. Talk about a strange relationship! I will circle back around and read some of the other chapters.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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A really good read - I was disappointed to get to the end. This was apparently very well edited, so didn't really notice any areas for improvement. Talk about a strange relationship! I will circle back around and read some of the other chapters.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review. Yes, Steven and Leya's relationship is strange.
Comment from Abio
Dear Barbara,
Just to let you know I have done a first reading of this chapter, and decicided to go back to the very begining in order to start reading the whole book.
Still I am strugling in phase 1, trying to understand the scope and meaning of the gigantic series of numbers already presented in the titles:
Chapter 42: Chapter 12; part 1 and Task Force 385....among many others that I am sure I will encounter going back to Chapter 1, Chapter 1; part 1, Task Force 001!!
Just joking!
Congratulations for this story that I am sure will be enjoyable to read.
Saludos from Abio.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Dear Barbara,
Just to let you know I have done a first reading of this chapter, and decicided to go back to the very begining in order to start reading the whole book.
Still I am strugling in phase 1, trying to understand the scope and meaning of the gigantic series of numbers already presented in the titles:
Chapter 42: Chapter 12; part 1 and Task Force 385....among many others that I am sure I will encounter going back to Chapter 1, Chapter 1; part 1, Task Force 001!!
Just joking!
Congratulations for this story that I am sure will be enjoyable to read.
Saludos from Abio.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review. I used to title my chapters, but then someone suggested I don't. I number them so I know where they belong in my manuscript.
Comment from CknGreen
Although this is the first chapter I have read, I truly enjoyed it. I'm sorry that I don't have any criticisms but it was well thought out and expressed.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Although this is the first chapter I have read, I truly enjoyed it. I'm sorry that I don't have any criticisms but it was well thought out and expressed.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from misscookie
wow talk about a powerful wrie, well this one is
I love the movement as I read I sense I know evry charcther
and I with them. I allowed me to feel their pain, worry and sorrow. this is a good write.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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wow talk about a powerful wrie, well this one is
I love the movement as I read I sense I know evry charcther
and I with them. I allowed me to feel their pain, worry and sorrow. this is a good write.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review. I was just told it was a mild romance by another reviewer.
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everyone has yheir own way of reading yor work the main thing is what you were thinking as you wrote it. take care.
Comment from E.P. Thomas
This is an extremely well-written and interesting novel. The plot is moving along nicely, however, I'm not certain whether Leya will ever recover from Matt and Steven. Wow! My compliments on job well done. Looking forward to the next chapter
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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This is an extremely well-written and interesting novel. The plot is moving along nicely, however, I'm not certain whether Leya will ever recover from Matt and Steven. Wow! My compliments on job well done. Looking forward to the next chapter
Comment Written 14-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.