Comment from BlueJamme

Excellent

Now here's something I've not seen before, a story that relies on the picture to make sense! Poor girl to have felt like she'd won a moral victory - only to face complete humiliation!

I do hope it wasn't based on personal experience! ;-)

BlueJamme

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2010

Lol, well, there was certainly a double meaning to revealed. No, it wasn't personal experience, lol. Thanks for the review. - Thesis

Comment from warbler

Excellent

There was a nice double meaning in the last line. First of all, she revealed her affair and then there is the illustration. Fun story!

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2010

Thanks, warbler. I couldn't resist the pun. - Thesis

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

A modern-day story reflecting today's lifestyle.

Do you think the co-workers had a clue and were
tipped off by her "red" shoes? (lol) Well, at
least her panties covered a bit more than the
fashionable ones of the day.

Good luck in the contest.

Regards, LateBloomer

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2010

Thanks for the fun review. I'm glad you enjoyed my humor. By today's standards, she was very modestly dressed. - Thesis

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

You have to watch those intercoms. This is a cute story. The picture you used to illustrate is certainly revealing, just in a different way. Your story has good dialogue. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2010

Hi, Beth. Thanks for reviewing my story. I couldn't resist the double meaning with the picture at the end. - Thesis

Comment from Judith Ann

Excellent

This is funny. How appropriate to. Your ending was also precious, I am still grinning. Your words "unaware of how much was revealed," with it's double meaning was a great ending. -Judy

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2010

Hi, Judy. Thanks for reading my humorous little story. I just couldn't resist the ending, lol. - Thesis

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Oops!

Quite revealing in more ways than one, I think. cute, concise and very entertaining. Wish you well in the contest.

Carol

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010

Thanks, Carol. I couldn't resist.

Comment from bkrighter

Excellent

You did a great job working up to the photo and a closing line that has at least three meanings or is relevant in three ways (maybe more?) Nice work, and good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010

I appreciate your comments, Steve. Thanks for reviewing the story.

Comment from jahees

Excellent

This is awesome. Great art with this story with the double meaning! Very short and to the point...I think you covered the 100-yard dash requirements very well. I enjoyed reading this. Very clever.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010

I'm happy you liked the story. Thanks for a wonderful review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your complementary illustration gives a great double meaning to the ending - nice word play when combined with the picture. You have all the elements of a good story - characters, dialogue, conflict, resolution - all in 100 words. Good luck in the contest. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010

Thank you, Brooke. I had this picture for awhile. I was just waiting for the right short piece to come along.

Comment from FanDan

Excellent

Revealing indeed! Your entry almost got my vote, but it was edged by "A Light Switch." Thank you for a great 100-word dash.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010

Thanks for reading my story.