Comment from Adam Smith

Excellent

This is so lyrical in sound, particularly the second portion. The metaphor might have been lost on me if not for your comments. The picture fit the mood, but not the metaphor as regards love. But in light of your comment, it's clear and I think that the "in tempo" part of a relationship is key. I enjoyed pondering this shorty. Adam

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2009

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

What an interesting metaphor, and a well written poem. It's amazing how much can be said in so few words. The picture is great, too. Karen

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2009

Comment from Daizie

Excellent

This is great! I love the metaphor. The picture of the music notes and the words blend beautifully together. All the best in the contest!

Cheers!
Daizie

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2009

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Excellent

I like the images of music evoked by this poem.
It is a short poem, but it makes sense
The last line talks of singing in harmony. I believe that is the point of the whole poem. kudos

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2009

Comment from wierdgrace

Excellent

This is beautiful my dear one, and I had too tell you, as I was reading all the entrys in this contest, I did have another picked out, but this is sothing, and well written, good luck.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009

Weirdgrace, (you don't seem weird to me! -ha!), So glad you liked this piece. I just felt the desire to write about love with metaphor (and I LOVE music). And the two sure do go together, don't they? Thank you for such a complimentary review. So much appreciated! With warm regards, Sue

Comment from skye

Excellent

I love the wonderful musical quality and the artwork.
Short, sweet, adhering to the rules and regulations very well.
Love the emotions, the joy that oozes out of this.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

These 15 word things do demand economy of language- and your musical imagery works well as one can say sung in harmony and have the meaning of that come across with no more explanation
I love the bridge to cross imagery and its metaphoric implications - I like this.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

hello sixteezkid. i thought this was such a fine entry to this short poem contest. i like your first line - a chorus bridge. good luck!

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

Nice metaphor! I went for the metaphore idea, too. Nicely presented and contest rules followed. Good Luck!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Keep em coming Sixteez! I'm beginning to see a lo of your poema and I like them all. this is a difficult challenge, and I think you did well.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009