Caduceus
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Comment from Deswy2Knives
This latest installment gave me chills. I remember distinctly how it felt when I lost a patient in the back of the ambulance, how I could feel the soul leaving the body as I worked furiously with others to bring him (or her) back. It was especially bad if we were called for a sick child. I hated that the most...losing that battle on someone so young.
You brought me back to the early 1990's when I worked in Orange, NJ, and we lost a little girl who ran out in the street after a ball. Words cannot express how your words hit me.
Jeez, your words are powerful. I need to take a breather now, will read the next chapter in a little while.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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This latest installment gave me chills. I remember distinctly how it felt when I lost a patient in the back of the ambulance, how I could feel the soul leaving the body as I worked furiously with others to bring him (or her) back. It was especially bad if we were called for a sick child. I hated that the most...losing that battle on someone so young.
You brought me back to the early 1990's when I worked in Orange, NJ, and we lost a little girl who ran out in the street after a ball. Words cannot express how your words hit me.
Jeez, your words are powerful. I need to take a breather now, will read the next chapter in a little while.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Deswy--you are my highlight of the day--the week--the month. Your comments inspire me. THANK so much. I hope you'll read and review the entire book. Thank you----Doug--(call me Doc--many people do)
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((smile)) I already call you Doc. And thanks, by the way, at saying I am your highlight...
Yes, you ARE extremely talented. You make your characters come alive, trust me...Carlo reminds me of some of the people I knew in Newark, NJ. Ummmmm...let me explain: I worked street EMS on the third watch, what we used to call, affectionately, the "Knife and Gun Club" because of the shootings and stabbings that occurred between the hours of midnight to 8AM. My shift ran on Monday, Wednesday, Friday and Sundays one week, and the next I'd work Tuesday, Thursday and Saturday..from 6PM until 8AM or later, depending on whether we got the dreaded last minute call or got held over at a homicide or DOA. On several of those nights we'd stop over at an Italian coffee shop, where my one partner's family's "friends" (mafioso) would hang out and play cards late into the night, and they would open the door for us and offer us cappuccino or expresso. It was....different. We were always welcomed because they "respected" us. Carlo reminds me of these guys.
Now, you can do me a favor and read some of my things...it would mean a lot to me to get your opinion. I write basically horror, but do, on occasion, write poetry or...well...other stuff.
Thanks, Doc. Oh, I never asked where exactly you live...I'm in Texas right now, was in California for all of 3 weeks.
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Deswy---I live in Ohio, for the present. Hope to move south in ayr or so.----Doug
Comment from Tessa Kay
I like the way you describe the fathers heartbreak at his daughter's death. Very powerful. the scene before with the birthday, could do with some shortening, I think. As the reader, I knew something was going to happen, and found myself wanting to skip through the details before and during the birthday party. It kind of makes the story sag at this moment, and you don't want that.
-In the throes of an acute mental collapse- author coming through with medical term?
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Tessa
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I like the way you describe the fathers heartbreak at his daughter's death. Very powerful. the scene before with the birthday, could do with some shortening, I think. As the reader, I knew something was going to happen, and found myself wanting to skip through the details before and during the birthday party. It kind of makes the story sag at this moment, and you don't want that.
-In the throes of an acute mental collapse- author coming through with medical term?
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Tessa
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Tessa--Please see comments on chapter 2
Comment from baustian64
I can't stop reading. I hope this is just a story and that you did not have to live through this. I lost my child 15 years ago. This is so tragic. I going to keep reading.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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I can't stop reading. I hope this is just a story and that you did not have to live through this. I lost my child 15 years ago. This is so tragic. I going to keep reading.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Dear Baustian---it's fiction but partly auto biographical. I'm inspired by your comments--hope you'll read more. There will be 45 chapters in all--you may want to go back to beginning---only 2 chapters. Thank you so much----Doug
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Hi Doug, I did go back to the beginning so it will take me a while to catch up.
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Thanks---really hope you'll read entire novel. Love your reviews. Thanks-----------Doug
Comment from lindalcreel
To die on her birthday must have been devastating. It's always hard to deal with death at a time when you're supposed to be celebrating life. At least Cassie could breath now, the pain was gone and she could be a child again. But this time she would know the joys of Heaven. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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To die on her birthday must have been devastating. It's always hard to deal with death at a time when you're supposed to be celebrating life. At least Cassie could breath now, the pain was gone and she could be a child again. But this time she would know the joys of Heaven. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Linda---Thanks again for kind comments,. I'll be looking forward to more---Love--Doug
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Welcome:)
Comment from witness4HIM
You have written the emotions of all in this chapter.
How sad to watch your child die in your arms. I have not experienced it, but I can only imagine the heartache and pain that they felt.
I am sure that this was a most difficult chapter to write and to find the words of such sorrow.
There surely was something medically wrong with this child.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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You have written the emotions of all in this chapter.
How sad to watch your child die in your arms. I have not experienced it, but I can only imagine the heartache and pain that they felt.
I am sure that this was a most difficult chapter to write and to find the words of such sorrow.
There surely was something medically wrong with this child.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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Witness----thanks again for kind words---i'm encouraged---Doug
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
A very powerful, moving, and extremely well written chapter.
You are handling this very sad subject with tremendous dignity.
I can't wait to read more.
John
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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A very powerful, moving, and extremely well written chapter.
You are handling this very sad subject with tremendous dignity.
I can't wait to read more.
John
Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi John-----Wonderful comments----you've made my day! Please see my reply on private messages-----Thanks again----Doug
Comment from babylonia
this is so beautiful. easy to read and follow. i did see one small spag and that one is easy to change. Cassie immediately ran for the stairs with her friends right behind. (drop the apostrophe)
the imagery is excellent. i feel like i am in the room. since she was born then this would be 1952. yeah, medical research would still be years behind from where it would need to be to help her.
keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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this is so beautiful. easy to read and follow. i did see one small spag and that one is easy to change. Cassie immediately ran for the stairs with her friends right behind. (drop the apostrophe)
the imagery is excellent. i feel like i am in the room. since she was born then this would be 1952. yeah, medical research would still be years behind from where it would need to be to help her.
keep up the good work~
Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi babylonia----Thanks again for great comments. Please see reply I wrote to you on private messages---Thanks again----Doug
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you are very welcome!
keep up the good work~
babylonia
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Cardiodoug: How sad for the parents but what a blessing for Cassie that she was granted her birthday wish! The pain in her chest surely stopped with her death. For her, no more pain, no more sorrow, only eternal happiness. Still, I cannot fathom losing my only child. The only spag I noticed is
He was in the throws of an acute mental collapse to He was in the throes of an acute mental collapse
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Cardiodoug: How sad for the parents but what a blessing for Cassie that she was granted her birthday wish! The pain in her chest surely stopped with her death. For her, no more pain, no more sorrow, only eternal happiness. Still, I cannot fathom losing my only child. The only spag I noticed is
He was in the throws of an acute mental collapse to He was in the throes of an acute mental collapse
Comment Written 01-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi mom2-----Thanks for greta review--I corrected spelling on throes. I really appreciate your support. I've been working on this novel on and off for many years. I've always doubted my abilities and the quality of my work and have many long periods away from writing. I've never had any objective feed back until now. You and many other reviewers have given me great support. It will definitely encourage me to complete my manuscript ASAP. There will be approximately 40 chapters. I have only five more to write. Thanks again. I hope you'll find the time to read the entire work.---------Doug
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Cardio,
Ahhhh... Glad Cassandra is comfortable beyond the Veil. Too bad she never got to see the doll house Dad made for her.
Very well written release, my friend. Only 2 small suggestions for your consideration here:
Both "yo-yo" and "white-washed" should be hyphenated.
Thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year,
Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi Cardio,
Ahhhh... Glad Cassandra is comfortable beyond the Veil. Too bad she never got to see the doll house Dad made for her.
Very well written release, my friend. Only 2 small suggestions for your consideration here:
Both "yo-yo" and "white-washed" should be hyphenated.
Thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year,
Jan
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi Jan----Thanks for nice comments. I've correcte the spag you noted. I really appreciate your support. I've been working on this novel on and off for many years. I've always doubted my abilities and the quality of my work and have many long periods away from writing. I've never had any objective feed back until now. You and many other reviewers have given me great support. It will definitely encourage me to complete my manuscript ASAP. There will be approximately 40 chapters. I have only five more to write. Thanks again. I hope you'll find the time to read the entire work.---------Doug
Comment from Janilou
I had goosebumps by the time I reached the end of this chapter. I loved the part about her experience of heaven, God or her new life, but how sad for her parents. It will be interesting to see where you take this story from here.
Nothing to correct. Well done!
Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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I had goosebumps by the time I reached the end of this chapter. I loved the part about her experience of heaven, God or her new life, but how sad for her parents. It will be interesting to see where you take this story from here.
Nothing to correct. Well done!
Jan
Comment Written 31-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
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Hi Jan-----Thank you! I really appreciate your support. I've been working on this novel on and off for many years. I've always doubted my abilities and the quality of my work and have many long periods away from writing. I've never had any objective feed back until now. You and many other reviewers have given me great support. It will definitely encourage me to complete my manuscript ASAP. There will be approximately 40 chapters. I have only five more to write. Thanks again. I hope you'll find the time to read the entire work.---------Doug