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Hold Me Close

romantic 5-7-5

2 total reviews 
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It is good to have a lover to keep us warm at night and I miss that in life, but I have had my fair share of love and I enjoyed your romantic poem, love Dolly x x x x

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2025

Comment from kiwisteveh
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Don't look too cold, do they!?

Nice 5-7-5 with the dash of French adding a little zing to your words. I paused on the enjambement between lines 2 and 3 If you;re going to keep it you should at least let the sentence run by ditching the capital letter at the start of line 3

When you are writing/editing, do you ever tinker with line order? I'm thinking your first line would be a strong final line. You can't simply switch lines 1 and 3, but you could play around with that idea.

Good luck,

Steve

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2025