Rotunda
A very strange diet21 total reviews
Comment from Annmuma
This is one of those posts that make me read it twice --in this case, I took a third review. There is a lot here on many levels and each of them equally interesting and thought provoking. The first brief reading touched me on a very physical level. I've never been slim!!!! Indeed I've always felt large and dreamed of one day being svelte. I'm still sure that day may be in my future! lol. Secondly, I looked at it on a more 'who am I' versus 'what I appear to be.' Finally, I saw a contrast between what is important in life and the dangers of getting lost in appearances rather than fact. Love it. Excellent writing. ann
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is one of those posts that make me read it twice --in this case, I took a third review. There is a lot here on many levels and each of them equally interesting and thought provoking. The first brief reading touched me on a very physical level. I've never been slim!!!! Indeed I've always felt large and dreamed of one day being svelte. I'm still sure that day may be in my future! lol. Secondly, I looked at it on a more 'who am I' versus 'what I appear to be.' Finally, I saw a contrast between what is important in life and the dangers of getting lost in appearances rather than fact. Love it. Excellent writing. ann
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Hi, thank you for this honor you have given six stars Wow! I appreciate your really awesome comments. Two, you really have good insight.That's quite write on actually. I think society makes us women to be what they want us to be and not what we are. Then we can't live up to a fantasy.So I just don't try, I just be myself as I think you do too. Thank you again. I hope you have a wonderful holiday and that you're having a good day too!
Comment from Jim Wile
Ooo. Chilling, Lea! I loved this poem of a woman succumbing to a miracle diet cure, just like she's selling her soul to the devil to make her slim and appealing. But the devil gets his due, and she can't stop losing weight until she's just a steaming bag of bones.
What a perfect match to the picture too. Do you start with the picture and base the poem around it, or do you find a picture that matches your poem? I've found that some of the AI bots can do the latter very well if you give it a good description of what you're after. Many of the pictures I use in my novel chapters are generated by an AI bot.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Ooo. Chilling, Lea! I loved this poem of a woman succumbing to a miracle diet cure, just like she's selling her soul to the devil to make her slim and appealing. But the devil gets his due, and she can't stop losing weight until she's just a steaming bag of bones.
What a perfect match to the picture too. Do you start with the picture and base the poem around it, or do you find a picture that matches your poem? I've found that some of the AI bots can do the latter very well if you give it a good description of what you're after. Many of the pictures I use in my novel chapters are generated by an AI bot.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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I haven't tried an AI bot before. Okay, maybe I will, because that's a fine idea. Jim i'm too happy that we liked it! You always have great things to say.
And offerings of advice and change along the way, which is pretty important to me. Your time you're right and your fine comments are appreciated. I hope you and yours have the most wonderful holiday. And yer night's going grand! Thanks again!
Comment from EeanBlack
This sounds, to me, like a fight with anorexia or bulimia. The image is outstanding. It honestly looks like Death just had one of the longest days ever. Body image is such a weird little obsession. I've always been a physically ugly man. I would hate to allow myself to be ugly on the inside. This is a great post and great food for thought.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This sounds, to me, like a fight with anorexia or bulimia. The image is outstanding. It honestly looks like Death just had one of the longest days ever. Body image is such a weird little obsession. I've always been a physically ugly man. I would hate to allow myself to be ugly on the inside. This is a great post and great food for thought.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Wow, thank you. What a privilege and an honor to receive the six stars from you! I feel very humbled and thankful. Most of all, i'm super glad that you enjoyed it.So this person actually was getting into one of his fad diets like they have going around like the keto, and all that crap. She followed the fad, thinking she could lose weight and look good again. Unfortunately, the weight kept coming off. Turn her into this steaming bones and a cup of tea. But you're on the money for sure! Thank you so very much for this fine review for this really great rating.And you're very interesting commentary! But you enjoyed it and that its food for thought is a win-win. Thanks again having awesome evening!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this poem is portraying what the experience is when losing weight, after believing in a fad diet of some kind. The idea of steaming bones reminds me of death's door, or maybe a very lean chicken soup with bones instead of meat. I guess an extreme dieter would even avoid chewing her nails in case those had calories, too.
Suggestion: change 'svelt' to 'svelte' for spelling.
Also I think this line would sound better with an apostrophe, like this:
Beware of lies' remedy
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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I think this poem is portraying what the experience is when losing weight, after believing in a fad diet of some kind. The idea of steaming bones reminds me of death's door, or maybe a very lean chicken soup with bones instead of meat. I guess an extreme dieter would even avoid chewing her nails in case those had calories, too.
Suggestion: change 'svelt' to 'svelte' for spelling.
Also I think this line would sound better with an apostrophe, like this:
Beware of lies' remedy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Great suggestion thank you so much! And you're not off the mark when you talk about what the poems, what's it about exactly right. You have the best insight and that means you really read it. So i'm honored, and thank you so much for this review for this time.You put into it in your kind comments. Have the most awesome night!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is an excellent poem, Rotunda is now but a bag of bones. I think the pressures in society to be a certain type of body image is so damaging especially to young girls ans boys growing up but in particular the girls. I like the dark humuor here you did a great job, well done.
Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishws
Nicki
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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This is an excellent poem, Rotunda is now but a bag of bones. I think the pressures in society to be a certain type of body image is so damaging especially to young girls ans boys growing up but in particular the girls. I like the dark humuor here you did a great job, well done.
Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishws
Nicki
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you Nicki! Happy you enjoyed this poem! As always, your commenter, wonderful and enjoyable and so insightful, too. You hit the nail on the head! As always, i'm appreciative.How are you reading and reading and offering your comments. All of it, awesome and appreciated by me! I hope your day is smashing!
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You're most welcome, you too have a fabulous day!!! I don't actually get very much time read and review. But when the weather is bad which it is at the moment, I do seem to have more time for me, so there is one bonus in it haha! Take care!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Incredible and deep. It flows from one idea to the other.
The picture is creepy too. you always surprise the reader.
Wherever do you come up with these things?
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Incredible and deep. It flows from one idea to the other.
The picture is creepy too. you always surprise the reader.
Wherever do you come up with these things?
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you again for this awesomeness.I appreciate it very much! Thanks for your time and your kind comments.I hope you have a smashing day!
Comment from 3rd Sight.
Never read a poem like this before, interesting: It has a little dark humor, it's a little confusing - like at the end, with the steaming bones and the cup of tea, it sorta sounds like she was poisoned, the rhyming doesn't sound natural and these 2 things, is the reason for the 3 stars and not 5.Good luck! In the contest.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Never read a poem like this before, interesting: It has a little dark humor, it's a little confusing - like at the end, with the steaming bones and the cup of tea, it sorta sounds like she was poisoned, the rhyming doesn't sound natural and these 2 things, is the reason for the 3 stars and not 5.Good luck! In the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. Good or bad feedback is always necessary. Thank you have an awesome day!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I adore this. And, what a great picture. very well done. I hope you have a great week. By the way. you did not write in your authors notes where that picture came from. If you drew it, many kudos to you. I cannot draw a straight line. Karen
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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I adore this. And, what a great picture. very well done. I hope you have a great week. By the way. you did not write in your authors notes where that picture came from. If you drew it, many kudos to you. I cannot draw a straight line. Karen
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Hi, Karen. Thank you so much for you. Kind comment and your great review and you're awesome rating! My picture is wrong artist. I know his my name is jinx. Thank you for reminding me.I gotta go back, put that in! As always, I thank you for your time too. I appreciate you stopping in for a read. I hope you have a smashing day!
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written and rhymed poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful evening and may you have a good day tomorrow
Merry Christmas. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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This is a very well written and rhymed poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful evening and may you have a good day tomorrow
Merry Christmas. Patricia.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you Patricia! Really happy you enjoyed it! I appreciate your kind words. Always so insightful you are! Always happy to see you here. I thank you again for your time and there great rating. Happy holidays to you and yours.I hope it's an awesome one!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
You grasped the rhyming form well. Awesome presentation, i love the picture. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.
You grasped the rhyming form well. Awesome presentation, i love the picture. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear mental imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Gypsy, thank you so very much for your kind review. I really appreciate it.And i'm glad you enjoyed the poem too! Nice to see you here. Thank you for your time and for your great rating and your awesome words. I hope you haven't great night 👋