Made Lower Than The Angels
75 word flash7 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This was a tiny tidbit. You went from I love the saints, to let's torture and kill people. Quite the leap. How was you visit with your girls? Good I hope. I am tgrying to catch up with my reviewing and you have gone dark. Are you feeling okay? Karen
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This was a tiny tidbit. You went from I love the saints, to let's torture and kill people. Quite the leap. How was you visit with your girls? Good I hope. I am tgrying to catch up with my reviewing and you have gone dark. Are you feeling okay? Karen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
Comment from Michele Harber
Wow! You've packed a lot of story and character development into just 75 words. He was a good boy who imagined himself emulating the saints, fell into the wrong crowd, and enjoyed doing things he knew were wrong, until he committed one act so heinous that his conscience finally kicked in. And now, between conscience, embarrassment, guilt and humiliation, he can't face the saints he once wanted to emulate. That character development is amazing, because you never once actually said any of the words I used to describe how he felt about his actions. I told, while you, as the writer, did exactly what you were supposed to--you showed. Excellent job, and that last line, "Saints, forgive me," is so fitting, in bother a literal and metaphoric sense.
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Wow! You've packed a lot of story and character development into just 75 words. He was a good boy who imagined himself emulating the saints, fell into the wrong crowd, and enjoyed doing things he knew were wrong, until he committed one act so heinous that his conscience finally kicked in. And now, between conscience, embarrassment, guilt and humiliation, he can't face the saints he once wanted to emulate. That character development is amazing, because you never once actually said any of the words I used to describe how he felt about his actions. I told, while you, as the writer, did exactly what you were supposed to--you showed. Excellent job, and that last line, "Saints, forgive me," is so fitting, in bother a literal and metaphoric sense.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've spent a lifetime wondering why most of the men in my family have four names and they so many have an Anthony stuck in there. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
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I've spent a lifetime wondering why most of the men in my family have four names and they so many have an Anthony stuck in there. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
I wish you the very best in the contest and may you have a lovely day and a very good week. I enjoyed your story. God bless you and have a wonderful wonderful week. Patricia.
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I wish you the very best in the contest and may you have a lovely day and a very good week. I enjoyed your story. God bless you and have a wonderful wonderful week. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
What was Saint Anthony patron saint of? Why was he the favored one? I like Saint Francis, I think he was the one with the birds? Jeepers, I can't remember. Being of a Protestant background I can't remember. In Congo the local people pretty much thought all the Muzungu faiths were the same, except Muslims of course.
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What was Saint Anthony patron saint of? Why was he the favored one? I like Saint Francis, I think he was the one with the birds? Jeepers, I can't remember. Being of a Protestant background I can't remember. In Congo the local people pretty much thought all the Muzungu faiths were the same, except Muslims of course.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant story Jim and even those who lost their way in life can be saved when they make changed, I enjoyed your story with a touch of humour here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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A poignant story Jim and even those who lost their way in life can be saved when they make changed, I enjoyed your story with a touch of humour here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you. You can't do much wth 75 words.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an interesting story and used only a few words. You already know I can't do the few words part. LOL Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an interesting story and used only a few words. You already know I can't do the few words part. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you but i feel you can do anything you set your mind to.
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I tend to be wordy. LOL