The Rose I Picked
A Sonnet5 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. They rhyming scheme was very good and you did a wonderful job describing this beautiful rose. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. They rhyming scheme was very good and you did a wonderful job describing this beautiful rose. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from EeanBlack
Oh wow Shirley! That, that really gripped me. Umm, I'm at a loss for the right words. I was out having a bad night with friends so I read your poem. I'm so glad there is a writer like you in this world.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Oh wow Shirley! That, that really gripped me. Umm, I'm at a loss for the right words. I was out having a bad night with friends so I read your poem. I'm so glad there is a writer like you in this world.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Eean :)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another wonderful post from you, Shirley, proving your range of skills. And you always catch me when I have nothing more to give, so a virtual six. Your sonnet is mesmerisingly beautiful and a joy to read. My only tiny query concerns the 3rd line of the first stanza which appears to have 11 syllables. Now I'm no expert on this: 1) I can't count and 2) I never really know when an extra syllable or two can slip through. It certainly doesn't sound unduly bumpy. But you could say submissive instead? Also 'emerald' of course has 3 syllables but I'm sure it's pronounced as 2 so no problem there. But I'll learn from you because there's no doubt this is a strong contender for the contest. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Another wonderful post from you, Shirley, proving your range of skills. And you always catch me when I have nothing more to give, so a virtual six. Your sonnet is mesmerisingly beautiful and a joy to read. My only tiny query concerns the 3rd line of the first stanza which appears to have 11 syllables. Now I'm no expert on this: 1) I can't count and 2) I never really know when an extra syllable or two can slip through. It certainly doesn't sound unduly bumpy. But you could say submissive instead? Also 'emerald' of course has 3 syllables but I'm sure it's pronounced as 2 so no problem there. But I'll learn from you because there's no doubt this is a strong contender for the contest. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I do so appreciate your excellent reviews xx.
Comment from jessizero
I loved your rhymes in this rhyming poem! You did a great job with your personification, as well. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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I loved your rhymes in this rhyming poem! You did a great job with your personification, as well. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Jessi.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoyed the way you describe the rose. Your word choices are wonderful. Especally "majestic gold her hue." The idea of the rose as a queen with her "thorny guards" is perfect! Your closing lines end this so well. Such a lovely poem - well done!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed the way you describe the rose. Your word choices are wonderful. Especally "majestic gold her hue." The idea of the rose as a queen with her "thorny guards" is perfect! Your closing lines end this so well. Such a lovely poem - well done!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Michael.
