His Silence
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Comment from Neonewman
Jacob!!!!
That was wonderfully suspenseful, my friend. Holy cow! Was someone watching her sleep? I think so! Creepy chapter, and I loved it. I was on the edge of my seat, and my adrenaline was way up. I'm on to the next chapter. I wish I didn't have to work for a living, I'd read all day.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Jacob!!!!
That was wonderfully suspenseful, my friend. Holy cow! Was someone watching her sleep? I think so! Creepy chapter, and I loved it. I was on the edge of my seat, and my adrenaline was way up. I'm on to the next chapter. I wish I didn't have to work for a living, I'd read all day.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Steve, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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My pleasure, Jacob. I just finished another chapter and now on to the next. Brilliant work, my friend.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
That would be very creepy thinking someone was watching you as you sleep. All the locked doors are also very weird. Finding someone in kitchen drinking cocoa wouldn't be if it wasn't three o'clock in the morning, unless he says he has trouble sleeping.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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That would be very creepy thinking someone was watching you as you sleep. All the locked doors are also very weird. Finding someone in kitchen drinking cocoa wouldn't be if it wasn't three o'clock in the morning, unless he says he has trouble sleeping.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
wow, how intense is this? Callum is locked away from Danielle, who wakes to discover that someone was watching her as she slept. lots of locked doors! creepy guy is waiting in the immaculately clean kitchen. i hope they get away!
take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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wow, how intense is this? Callum is locked away from Danielle, who wakes to discover that someone was watching her as she slept. lots of locked doors! creepy guy is waiting in the immaculately clean kitchen. i hope they get away!
take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the six stars Rhonda. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
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I'm trying to keep up. It's really good.
Comment from Julie Helms
So no lights and many locked doors in a strange building make for a very creepy build up! The scene has tension.
A little fix needed:
It's just gone three a.m. outside it's still pitch black.
(A semicolon between a.m. and outside, or capitalize outside as a new sentence)
Very suspenseful, well-written chapter!
Julie
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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So no lights and many locked doors in a strange building make for a very creepy build up! The scene has tension.
A little fix needed:
It's just gone three a.m. outside it's still pitch black.
(A semicolon between a.m. and outside, or capitalize outside as a new sentence)
Very suspenseful, well-written chapter!
Julie
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you Julie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, this is a tense one! I like how you've made Danielle so disorientated and scared waking up, a consequence of PTSD perhaps. And the whole stream of consciousness as she tries to locate some sense of security and the familiar. An excellent chapter, Jacob! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Wow, this is a tense one! I like how you've made Danielle so disorientated and scared waking up, a consequence of PTSD perhaps. And the whole stream of consciousness as she tries to locate some sense of security and the familiar. An excellent chapter, Jacob! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you Debbie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
OIiver was in her room, wasn't he? And this is the reason her parents left. Oliver was wanting to make Daniele his wife or something similar. I can't wait to read more. You did a great job writing the suspence.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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OIiver was in her room, wasn't he? And this is the reason her parents left. Oliver was wanting to make Daniele his wife or something similar. I can't wait to read more. You did a great job writing the suspence.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the six stars Barbara. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
This is all pretty scary. I can't imagine what is all the locked doors. She needs to be asking some serious questions like what are these people doing living together in this secluded place for starters. I wouldn't like to be a place with a lot of locked doors and not know why.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is all pretty scary. I can't imagine what is all the locked doors. She needs to be asking some serious questions like what are these people doing living together in this secluded place for starters. I wouldn't like to be a place with a lot of locked doors and not know why.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Begin Again
My head says, OH NO! I don't trust that guy for a second, especially when someone was sitting on her bed, watching her. That's just weird no matter how you look at it. And all the locked doors. What are they hiding and where is Callum? Can I leave now........
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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My head says, OH NO! I don't trust that guy for a second, especially when someone was sitting on her bed, watching her. That's just weird no matter how you look at it. And all the locked doors. What are they hiding and where is Callum? Can I leave now........
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you Carol, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from royowen
How exciting, there was someone that had been sitting on the spare bed in Danielle's room she feels very apprehensive indeed, she goes out to the balconry and goes down to where Oliver is sitting at the table, and ask her to sit with him, beautifully written Jacob, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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How exciting, there was someone that had been sitting on the spare bed in Danielle's room she feels very apprehensive indeed, she goes out to the balconry and goes down to where Oliver is sitting at the table, and ask her to sit with him, beautifully written Jacob, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you Roy, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Most welcome