Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is an excellent start to a novel. You have found an unusual way of diving into the heart of the action, leaving all options open as to the identity of the characters described. kay

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024

Thank you, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Well, I am already speculating as to why this young teenager possibly murdered his parents. Where is the young girl? So many questions. I know I'll get the answers all in due time. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024

Thank you Barbara, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is interesting. Things have to be going pretty bad for a child to murder his parents. I will be facinated to find out why when he is ready to talk.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024

Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you're enjoying it.,

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

What an introduction to your story, Jacob! I like the way you've structured this, firstly with the inevitable shock and trauma of the sister, contrasted with the dispassionate police announcement. An excellent start! Debbie

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024

Thank you Debbie, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.