The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "The Fix - Chapter Twenty-Two"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
A little look back at better times before Susannah disappeared and Joshua and his mom spent coffee time together.
I appreciate the backstory, Jacob. Gives of needed information and also a break from the day to day.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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A little look back at better times before Susannah disappeared and Joshua and his mom spent coffee time together.
I appreciate the backstory, Jacob. Gives of needed information and also a break from the day to day.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you Pam, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Hmm, so Susannah wasn't in touch with Josua for a while before she died. I am so curious what was going on there. I think we've had a couple of hints, with his father Daniel and his sister Rache. I like this story and you're doing a good job writing it.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Hmm, so Susannah wasn't in touch with Josua for a while before she died. I am so curious what was going on there. I think we've had a couple of hints, with his father Daniel and his sister Rache. I like this story and you're doing a good job writing it.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Barbara, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
It does appear that Susannah and Joshua have a good stable relationship. I am wondering why Susannah isn't answering his messages though. Stacey is wanting to have a vacation with them and is willing to spent her money.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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It does appear that Susannah and Joshua have a good stable relationship. I am wondering why Susannah isn't answering his messages though. Stacey is wanting to have a vacation with them and is willing to spent her money.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Beth, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This post is effective in showing Joshua's anxiousness concerning Susannah's whereabouts, but gives no clue as to the reason for this. What does he know that he's not revealing? This is frustrating - at least you keep your readers on the hook. kay
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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This post is effective in showing Joshua's anxiousness concerning Susannah's whereabouts, but gives no clue as to the reason for this. What does he know that he's not revealing? This is frustrating - at least you keep your readers on the hook. kay
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Kay, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I don't know if I've missed it here but am I to assume this date refers to that of her murder? Perhaps it could be clarified? Your story reads fluently. And it's clear that Stacey and Joshua have a good, easy relationship. But I'm not able to say how significant her failure to reply to Joshua is without knowing when this took place.
...it might have been for the eyes of any (lady)
a bit lumpy - who might have (happened to have) been around him. Do we need the bracketed bit?)
Thanks for sharing this excellent story, Jacob. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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I don't know if I've missed it here but am I to assume this date refers to that of her murder? Perhaps it could be clarified? Your story reads fluently. And it's clear that Stacey and Joshua have a good, easy relationship. But I'm not able to say how significant her failure to reply to Joshua is without knowing when this took place.
...it might have been for the eyes of any (lady)
a bit lumpy - who might have (happened to have) been around him. Do we need the bracketed bit?)
Thanks for sharing this excellent story, Jacob. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you Debbie, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. I have tried saying this is a flashback scene before, but others haven't liked that, so at the moment I think I'm just keeping the dates at the top of each chapter.