The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Counting On It"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
19 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Poor Momma, she lost the love of her life and married a horrible man. That explains why the father hates Dewey so much.
I wonder if Huck's father raped Miss Lynn.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Poor Momma, she lost the love of her life and married a horrible man. That explains why the father hates Dewey so much.
I wonder if Huck's father raped Miss Lynn.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Miss Lynn might not be Matthew's target. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
in all honesty, I think this could be a made for TV movie. The way you paint the scenes is so believable. I never would have thought that Huck's mother's secret was her pregnancy. One has to wonder if Dewey's father left of his own accord or if he might be buried somewhere in a remote location. This is great gal. Keep up the good work.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
in all honesty, I think this could be a made for TV movie. The way you paint the scenes is so believable. I never would have thought that Huck's mother's secret was her pregnancy. One has to wonder if Dewey's father left of his own accord or if he might be buried somewhere in a remote location. This is great gal. Keep up the good work.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Just keep in mind, Hucks mother said life is full of secrets. There might be another secret that will come to light soon. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This was a good read. I read it before but forgot to rate you. Keep it coming. Some links to my YouTube videos are coming real soon. Hope you enjoy them.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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This was a good read. I read it before but forgot to rate you. Keep it coming. Some links to my YouTube videos are coming real soon. Hope you enjoy them.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked this. Thanks so much for the six. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have revealed a secret here that may come out later on and cause a riot! I enjoyed your clever dialogue as your story unfolds Gretchen, another fine chapter, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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You have revealed a secret here that may come out later on and cause a riot! I enjoyed your clever dialogue as your story unfolds Gretchen, another fine chapter, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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This secret might be the tip of the iceberg. Thank you so much for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
What a messed up family. If one man hadn't been a coward and left, Dewey might be a normal young man. Life might have been different for all of them. Unfortunately, what ifs never solve problems. Huck has a good but dangerous idea to follow his father. Good writing, no problems found.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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What a messed up family. If one man hadn't been a coward and left, Dewey might be a normal young man. Life might have been different for all of them. Unfortunately, what ifs never solve problems. Huck has a good but dangerous idea to follow his father. Good writing, no problems found.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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According to Matthew, he left. Whether that is true or not, we'll never know. Lol. Thank you for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Ahah, so their daddy is sneaking around at night, up to no good, I can see where your story's a little now Gretchen, I love this story, you always manage to dream up a villain, this time it's Mr. Strait, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Ahah, so their daddy is sneaking around at night, up to no good, I can see where your story's a little now Gretchen, I love this story, you always manage to dream up a villain, this time it's Mr. Strait, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Scary that I can think up these evil people. But I see all kinds of people daily. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
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God gave you the ability Gretchen
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed listening. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Your stories are wonderful your paragraphing your sitting structure and your presentations are always very good.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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This is very well written and I enjoyed listening. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Your stories are wonderful your paragraphing your sitting structure and your presentations are always very good.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Gretchen,
I'm glad I stumbled upon this well/written chapter.
What a terrible secret mamma is carrying.
Also She didn't get to marry the man she really loved.
Note: should the dialogue be; "what did(nt) she marry him?
I also loved the description of fall--the smell of burning leaves, etc. Autumn is my favorite time of year.
Excellent chapter, Gretchen.
Best Wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Gretchen,
I'm glad I stumbled upon this well/written chapter.
What a terrible secret mamma is carrying.
Also She didn't get to marry the man she really loved.
Note: should the dialogue be; "what did(nt) she marry him?
I also loved the description of fall--the smell of burning leaves, etc. Autumn is my favorite time of year.
Excellent chapter, Gretchen.
Best Wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Cindy. I am so glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I knew Matthew was after Miss Lynn. Now Huck feels it's his responsibility to protect her. That's not good, well it is good, but dangerous. I am curious who is Dewey's father and did Matthew kill him??? Love the story.
After we get through with chores, I leave Dewey outside while I fetch some water for us. (Few words, After we finish with chores,)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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I knew Matthew was after Miss Lynn. Now Huck feels it's his responsibility to protect her. That's not good, well it is good, but dangerous. I am curious who is Dewey's father and did Matthew kill him??? Love the story.
After we get through with chores, I leave Dewey outside while I fetch some water for us. (Few words, After we finish with chores,)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate this encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
It is more than interesting to learn that Huck and Dewey are only half brothers, but will Huck be able to keep this secret? Such secrets have a way of slipping out.
The following confused me:
"Who was he? Dewey's father, I mean."
She looks up with eyes tired and solemn. "He was the love of my life."
"Why did you marry him, though?"
I think there is a problem between the use of positives and negatives. kay
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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It is more than interesting to learn that Huck and Dewey are only half brothers, but will Huck be able to keep this secret? Such secrets have a way of slipping out.
The following confused me:
"Who was he? Dewey's father, I mean."
She looks up with eyes tired and solemn. "He was the love of my life."
"Why did you marry him, though?"
I think there is a problem between the use of positives and negatives. kay
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the edits. I will go back and untangle the dialogue. Thanks so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen