Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Poor Ohmie! But his love for May will get him through this. That's the motivation that he needs to do everything possible to be back with her. I think your description of a dragon's lair fits with all the dragon tales I've heard about from C. S. Lewis and from Tolkien.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024

Thank you. I love Tolkien and Lewis, both.
I appreciate your very kind review.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Ohmie sounds as if he is about to drown. Hopefully the dragon isn't under the water too long. But then Ohmie has remarkable luck. He has even discovered he loves Princess May. I am really enjoying this story about my hero, Ohmie.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024

Thank you very much.
I'll try not to hurt Ohmie too badly.
smiley face here

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi, Wayne. I hope you are well

I reviewed this a few minutes ago and fan story lost the review. So here I am again without remembering what I had already said.

So, I'm just going to tell you that I think I saw a return when it should've been returning

I also thought I saw a statement about his age that implied he was old. I knew that was not true but maybe you should just check. I'm sorry if I'm sending you on
a wild goose chase.

So,Ohmie Is by himself in this dilemma. I don't think he drowns because he is the star of the novel

Here, I predict that ohmie and May get married and have a family. But he's already embarrassed her by lying about who he is and her parents may resent that even if she doesn't.

I also predict that he will save her from a dragon, maybe not this dragon

I enjoyed reading your book chapter

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024

Thank you very much. Yes, I'll look for those glitches.
I've lost a few reviews after a lot had gone into them. It's really aggravating.
Thanks again.

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

Can't wait to see how Ohmie gets out of this. He DOES get out, doesn't he? This reminded me slightly of "The 7th Voyage of Sinbad" when Sinbad fights a dragon guarding the Cyclops' Treasure. And when Ohmie gets out, will he meet greater peril?

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024

'When' he gets out????????? (smiley face here)
Thank you for your very kind review.

reply by jim vecchio on 17-Jul-2024

Wish I had saved more stars.

Comment from Harry Craft

Excellent

I had to rate this excellent because of the imagination involved in writing this story. This is an amazing imagination and I wish I could think like this! I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024

Thank you for your very inspiring review!

reply by Harry Craft on 17-Jul-2024

Thank you sir! You have a great imagination and that creates great writers!

Comment from Lindsey Russell

Excellent

I just love this story. It is so imaginative and the descriptions of objects and places so vivid that I can picture them easily. Well done. Happy writing.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024

Thank you very much for your very nice review.