The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Miss Lynn"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
18 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Another excellent chapter you bring to life with your well chosen words. I like the way you write poor white folks diologe.
Poor Dewey and Huck.... they have a horrible father who is going to end up dead one of these days.... at least I hope. But there's a saying in my country, "Mala yerba nunca muere." (Bad weeds never die)
Well done, I'm enjoying your book.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Another excellent chapter you bring to life with your well chosen words. I like the way you write poor white folks diologe.
Poor Dewey and Huck.... they have a horrible father who is going to end up dead one of these days.... at least I hope. But there's a saying in my country, "Mala yerba nunca muere." (Bad weeds never die)
Well done, I'm enjoying your book.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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When one weed dies, another replaces it. Unfortunate but true. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This is first I remember hearing about a pit with sharpened sticks. Is the a trap Dewey has prepared for his father. I don't think Tuck is going to get involved in keeping it from happening. I wonder if we find out what Matthew is up to when he goes out at night.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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This is first I remember hearing about a pit with sharpened sticks. Is the a trap Dewey has prepared for his father. I don't think Tuck is going to get involved in keeping it from happening. I wonder if we find out what Matthew is up to when he goes out at night.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Dewey confided in Huck one night a chapter or two back about digging the hole. We will soon enough find out what Matthew is doing. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
Sweet simple Dewy would soon change .the resentment and hated can change anyone ..The story is getting interesting ..I keep hoping the father will trip and fall ...
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Sweet simple Dewy would soon change .the resentment and hated can change anyone ..The story is getting interesting ..I keep hoping the father will trip and fall ...
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. I don't think you are alone in that wish. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
it appears that Dewey is changing right before our eyes. A person can only take so much before the dam breaks. Either they retreat into themselves or they lash out. It seems like Dewey is reaching the end of his rope. I love the way you set the scenes gal. I feel like I'm watching a good movie. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
it appears that Dewey is changing right before our eyes. A person can only take so much before the dam breaks. Either they retreat into themselves or they lash out. It seems like Dewey is reaching the end of his rope. I love the way you set the scenes gal. I feel like I'm watching a good movie. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Tom. That's very nice to hear. I wrote this story about three years ago, after a four year hiatus. I'm glad you are sticking with it and me. Much appreciated. Thank you so much for the six. Gretchen
Comment from Samantha Wymer
This is very interesting to read. A lot of plot twist and surprises. Are you going to continue this? I would love to read what happens with Miss Lynn and Huck. You get a six star for this writing, you deserve it. The way you described the dream Huck was having is very vivid. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This is very interesting to read. A lot of plot twist and surprises. Are you going to continue this? I would love to read what happens with Miss Lynn and Huck. You get a six star for this writing, you deserve it. The way you described the dream Huck was having is very vivid. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Samantha. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Yes, I will be continuing on with this. I really appreciate this very encouraging review and the extra star. Gretchen
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You're very welcome. I can't wait to read the next part.
Comment from royowen
I think the way Dewey feels he isn't an orphan, I get angry just reading about Him, realising there are too many men like him around like, they shouldn't reproduce themselves, beautifully written Gretchen, is Our Huck dreaming? It certainly does happen, there are some without prejudice to blind them. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I think the way Dewey feels he isn't an orphan, I get angry just reading about Him, realising there are too many men like him around like, they shouldn't reproduce themselves, beautifully written Gretchen, is Our Huck dreaming? It certainly does happen, there are some without prejudice to blind them. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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He was indeed dreaming, the way young boys do sometimes. He is drawn to her kindness since he doesn't have a lot of that in his life. Thank you so much. Gretchen
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Dewey can only take so much and he's going to break. I am betting Matthew is up to causing trouble it the black community, especially Ms. Lynn. I can't believe he isn't. Great story.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Dewey can only take so much and he's going to break. I am betting Matthew is up to causing trouble it the black community, especially Ms. Lynn. I can't believe he isn't. Great story.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Hes definitely causing trouble. Just about everywhere he goes. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Dewey isn't quite so simple as his parents think. I can see him one day standing up to his father, and then it could go two ways, he kills his dad, or his dad kills him. Whichever happens, it's not going to be nice. I'm still left wondering what dad did with that gun yesterday morning. I hope Miss Lynn is alright! Another gread chapter, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Dewey isn't quite so simple as his parents think. I can see him one day standing up to his father, and then it could go two ways, he kills his dad, or his dad kills him. Whichever happens, it's not going to be nice. I'm still left wondering what dad did with that gun yesterday morning. I hope Miss Lynn is alright! Another gread chapter, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Those boys have to stand up to him. He deserves to be taken down by them. Thank you so much for this awesome review. And the stellar rating. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
Tension is building. What could Daddy have been up to last night, and what has him so riled now. Dewey's resentment is festering, and Huck is doing his best to keep peace with Daddy, even though he may be at an age now to fight him off. I have a feeling this won't last when Daddy takes an overt stand against Huck's seeing Miss Lynn. Nice writing, Gretchen.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Tension is building. What could Daddy have been up to last night, and what has him so riled now. Dewey's resentment is festering, and Huck is doing his best to keep peace with Daddy, even though he may be at an age now to fight him off. I have a feeling this won't last when Daddy takes an overt stand against Huck's seeing Miss Lynn. Nice writing, Gretchen.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Jim. Daddy will definitely take a stand. I appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I swear I already reviewed this one ! Well written, and I see much change coming into Huck's life. Dewey's and his life smacks of "Of mice and men". Is that where you got your prompt? I am trying to write a science fiction story for the contest. I feel like among 10 writers, I will be in 11th place. I will go back and keep up the good fight. Karen
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I swear I already reviewed this one ! Well written, and I see much change coming into Huck's life. Dewey's and his life smacks of "Of mice and men". Is that where you got your prompt? I am trying to write a science fiction story for the contest. I feel like among 10 writers, I will be in 11th place. I will go back and keep up the good fight. Karen
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Just do your best. I feel like contests bring out the worst parts of our personality. Just write a story you yourself would enjoy reading. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
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Oh, I can be as competitive as anyone. But the voting is fickle. Some times what I think is spun gold gets only one vote, and sometimes what took me a minute or two to write with no edits, runs away with a prize. I write because I must. My sanity requires I do so. :-)