Ol' Silver and Red
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Ol' Silver and Red, ch 3"Medeival Ohmie and the dragon Ol' Silver and Red
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The cast is all here - Ohmie, Blado, and May:-)
He could pick up a horse? I guess you can add Hercules to his list of names.
Ohmie held on and now finds himself in the dragon's den; will the dragon accept him and will they work together since Ohmie bested him? You don't want to slay dragons, you want to tame them:-)
My only suggestion is that you have a list of names, like Ohmie AKA Prince Waynard, etc. instead of using all the names in your story. It might be confusing to a new reader.
Thanks for the fantasy, Wayne.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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The cast is all here - Ohmie, Blado, and May:-)
He could pick up a horse? I guess you can add Hercules to his list of names.
Ohmie held on and now finds himself in the dragon's den; will the dragon accept him and will they work together since Ohmie bested him? You don't want to slay dragons, you want to tame them:-)
My only suggestion is that you have a list of names, like Ohmie AKA Prince Waynard, etc. instead of using all the names in your story. It might be confusing to a new reader.
Thanks for the fantasy, Wayne.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your very nice review.
I think maybe the list of names in Author's Notes was a bit too wordy to be clear.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter as nearly everyone shows up to try to save Ohmie, also known as Waynard the tutor to a young prince Shauconnery and new friend to Princess May. Although they may think he was stolen by a dragon, Ohmie is actually trying to train the dragon as a stead, steed I suspect.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This is an interesting chapter as nearly everyone shows up to try to save Ohmie, also known as Waynard the tutor to a young prince Shauconnery and new friend to Princess May. Although they may think he was stolen by a dragon, Ohmie is actually trying to train the dragon as a stead, steed I suspect.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from lyenochka
Mount Nebo? Where Moses is said to have been buried?
I'm happy to see our spunky heroine, Princess May get into the rescue party. Of course, Blado had to help
You mentioned the flight rising picture but I didn't see my dragon, Banny here. Hope you could upload the picture okay.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Mount Nebo? Where Moses is said to have been buried?
I'm happy to see our spunky heroine, Princess May get into the rescue party. Of course, Blado had to help
You mentioned the flight rising picture but I didn't see my dragon, Banny here. Hope you could upload the picture okay.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I thought I did upload yours.
Mt Nebo State Park is a favorite hiking spot for me and my wife just across the Arkansas River from us.
I found it! He's up there now. Thank you!
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Cool! I see it now!
Comment from Lindsey Russell
I like stories with a dragon in them. Good job with it too. Thank you for sharing this with all of us and good luck with your writing endeavors!!!! Best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I like stories with a dragon in them. Good job with it too. Thank you for sharing this with all of us and good luck with your writing endeavors!!!! Best wishes!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent although a strange story. I've never tried writing this kind of fantasy fiction but it much not be easy. Keeping all the wild names in mind might be enough to do me in. I'm beginning to get into the story and I'll try to hang in there if I don't get too far behind again.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This is excellent although a strange story. I've never tried writing this kind of fantasy fiction but it much not be easy. Keeping all the wild names in mind might be enough to do me in. I'm beginning to get into the story and I'll try to hang in there if I don't get too far behind again.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you.
I tried to keep the names either relevant, familiar, or comical (Ohmie, May, Blado, and then Shauconnery as in Sean Connery)
I appreciate your very nice review. And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from jim vecchio
What a point to leave us at! I suspect Ohmie will make out okay, though. Your tale is progressing well. Wonder what your vivid imagination will come up with next. I suspect in the end Ohmie and May will be together.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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What a point to leave us at! I suspect Ohmie will make out okay, though. Your tale is progressing well. Wonder what your vivid imagination will come up with next. I suspect in the end Ohmie and May will be together.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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smiley face here
Yes, I don't think anyone could keep Ohmie and May apart, not even a mean dragon.
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Make sure Spielberg keeps the dragon in the script!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is captivating. You bring this world of dragons and adventure to life so well. Your story easily kept me interested and excited to to follow Ohmie's journey. Your attention to detail in describing both the physical challenges and emotional stakes really adds to the story. What an enjoyable read. Looking forward to reading more of your exciting story!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Your writing is captivating. You bring this world of dragons and adventure to life so well. Your story easily kept me interested and excited to to follow Ohmie's journey. Your attention to detail in describing both the physical challenges and emotional stakes really adds to the story. What an enjoyable read. Looking forward to reading more of your exciting story!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your inspiring review!