So Much Better
The hunter is the hunted.13 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You have twist in middle instead of the end. Creative. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and what to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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You have twist in middle instead of the end. Creative. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and what to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Chi Phan
Wow, what a twist! I love how you tied everything together so neatly. I was caught by the surprising turn when my mind was still on what the guy wanted to do!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Wow, what a twist! I love how you tied everything together so neatly. I was caught by the surprising turn when my mind was still on what the guy wanted to do!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Wendy G
Goodness, a full horror story in 75 words. Super repetition of THAT line. How quickly the tables were turned, and the initial apprehension was replaced by a worse reality. Best wishes for your excellent entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Goodness, a full horror story in 75 words. Super repetition of THAT line. How quickly the tables were turned, and the initial apprehension was replaced by a worse reality. Best wishes for your excellent entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you much!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
What a tragic irony, with a little tongue-in-cheek humor and clearly a gallows chuckle. I like how you twist it around so the reader barely knows what's going on. Well done
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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What a tragic irony, with a little tongue-in-cheek humor and clearly a gallows chuckle. I like how you twist it around so the reader barely knows what's going on. Well done
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you much!
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***Sigh***
Comment from pome lover
Good Grief! That was a surprise!
You are an accomplished writer, probably published, I would guess.
That repeated phrase at beginning and end is perfect.
I will have to say that your enjoyment in writing horror stories, then mentioning that theology plays a part in how you craft your characters was a bit mystifying.:)
Katharine
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Good Grief! That was a surprise!
You are an accomplished writer, probably published, I would guess.
That repeated phrase at beginning and end is perfect.
I will have to say that your enjoyment in writing horror stories, then mentioning that theology plays a part in how you craft your characters was a bit mystifying.:)
Katharine
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
Comment from Begin Again
It's sort of like "Never judge a book by it's cover" or maybe "Turnabout is fair play. Which ever, it was a terrific flash fiction and I wish you luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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It's sort of like "Never judge a book by it's cover" or maybe "Turnabout is fair play. Which ever, it was a terrific flash fiction and I wish you luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much! I've always loved reading about twists in stories. It's fun to write them.
Comment from LJbutterfly
True flash fiction includes a surprising ending, and leaves the reader with lingering after thoughts. This is true flash fiction. The third sentence of the introductory statement and the final sentence pair perfectly. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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True flash fiction includes a surprising ending, and leaves the reader with lingering after thoughts. This is true flash fiction. The third sentence of the introductory statement and the final sentence pair perfectly. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your kind review!
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five word flash fiction story, So Much Better, has the proper word count and finds the worm has turned in the alleyway and the worm is now a throatless pile beneath the maneater.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This seventy-five word flash fiction story, So Much Better, has the proper word count and finds the worm has turned in the alleyway and the worm is now a throatless pile beneath the maneater.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, sir!
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Thank you, sir!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhhhh dear!! You have brought flash fiction to a new horizon, for sure, with this one. Guess that date wasn't nearly as drunk as he'd imagined! And, hey! What's sauce for the goose is sauce for the gander, right? If he likes 'em to scream, why shouldn't she?
Very memorable read, and I bet we'll be seeing this one in the Winner's Circle of the 75 Words Flash Fiction contest! Good luck. xo
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Ohhhhhh dear!! You have brought flash fiction to a new horizon, for sure, with this one. Guess that date wasn't nearly as drunk as he'd imagined! And, hey! What's sauce for the goose is sauce for the gander, right? If he likes 'em to scream, why shouldn't she?
Very memorable read, and I bet we'll be seeing this one in the Winner's Circle of the 75 Words Flash Fiction contest! Good luck. xo
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Haha! Thank you so much!
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You're welcome!!
Comment from jessizero
This was a great piece of seventy-five word flash fiction! I love how you began and ended with the same thought flipped on its head. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This was a great piece of seventy-five word flash fiction! I love how you began and ended with the same thought flipped on its head. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much!