Blue Sky Ruin
A free verse26 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
My goodness that sounds fierce, do you live in the plains? I haven't seen much bad weather up close myself. We had some hurricanes, but I only saw the aftermath, not the storms. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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My goodness that sounds fierce, do you live in the plains? I haven't seen much bad weather up close myself. We had some hurricanes, but I only saw the aftermath, not the storms. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Karen, thank you so much. I'm in Connecticut, so I haven't seen much severe weather- but a tornado did touch down a few years ago in my town and neighboring towns. It was wild.
Comment from tfawcus
Storms in nature and storms in life - so much in common - so destructive. I like the way you compare the browning of the fallen tree with the browning of your skin.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Storms in nature and storms in life - so much in common - so destructive. I like the way you compare the browning of the fallen tree with the browning of your skin.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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So very true. Thank you so much!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
What a lovely free verse poem. Your words are so well chosen and your imagery delightful. I love the personification of the bullying wind and the danger it causes.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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What a lovely free verse poem. Your words are so well chosen and your imagery delightful. I love the personification of the bullying wind and the danger it causes.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Verna, I'm honored by your kind words. Thank you! Xo
Comment from Barry Penfold
Yes, the wild storm and the devastation pass to leave a clean - up for all those gardeners out there. Lovely image and well -chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Yes, the wild storm and the devastation pass to leave a clean - up for all those gardeners out there. Lovely image and well -chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Steve Foreman
Yeah, I love trees, and when I am familiar with one that goes, by nature or chainsaw, a part of me goes with it.
This is a heartfelt and well constructed poem, Jessica.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Yeah, I love trees, and when I am familiar with one that goes, by nature or chainsaw, a part of me goes with it.
This is a heartfelt and well constructed poem, Jessica.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Steve! Truly appreciated! Xo
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You are welcome!
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Welcome, Jessica.
Comment from Begin Again
You descriptive words and emotions put the reader right there by your side as the storm battered and ripped your world apart. You know exactly how to say what needs to strike the reader with so few words. A master at poetry. Couldn't we replant the poor little red maple?
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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You descriptive words and emotions put the reader right there by your side as the storm battered and ripped your world apart. You know exactly how to say what needs to strike the reader with so few words. A master at poetry. Couldn't we replant the poor little red maple?
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Carol, that means the world! Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Colorado Owl
Your words make it easy for the reader to imagine the storm. I particularly like "...fury fizzles to a breeze...". I hae a strong urge to set that red maple upright and replant it. It deserves another chance! Thank you.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Your words make it easy for the reader to imagine the storm. I particularly like "...fury fizzles to a breeze...". I hae a strong urge to set that red maple upright and replant it. It deserves another chance! Thank you.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from estory
I really liked this; I think you had so much emotion in the voice here, we really felt your sense of loss and even pain in losing that tree. The free verse was expertly handled, the rhythms kind of moved in the shadow of the clouds of that storm, we could feel the bursts of wind and rain, and the little shafts of sunlight in between. The images of the leaves swirling around you, the whirlwind swirling, the dust rising with it, really put us in the middle of it. estory
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I really liked this; I think you had so much emotion in the voice here, we really felt your sense of loss and even pain in losing that tree. The free verse was expertly handled, the rhythms kind of moved in the shadow of the clouds of that storm, we could feel the bursts of wind and rain, and the little shafts of sunlight in between. The images of the leaves swirling around you, the whirlwind swirling, the dust rising with it, really put us in the middle of it. estory
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I am thrilled to hear you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much, estory!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Rene Tyo
Jessica
This is great! What an evocative poem. With great clarity you have portrayed what storms and weather can do, but also the aftermath and picking up the pieces. I find this as wonderful metaphor for the storms and relationships we deal with in life. Whether this was your intent or not isn't important to me. The fact that you created this question and feelings in my mind as I read it, is. Great poetry should allow a reader to interpret and feel the emotions conveyed, in my opinion. This poem is a wonderful example of that. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Jessica
This is great! What an evocative poem. With great clarity you have portrayed what storms and weather can do, but also the aftermath and picking up the pieces. I find this as wonderful metaphor for the storms and relationships we deal with in life. Whether this was your intent or not isn't important to me. The fact that you created this question and feelings in my mind as I read it, is. Great poetry should allow a reader to interpret and feel the emotions conveyed, in my opinion. This poem is a wonderful example of that. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Rene, your insightful comments have truly made my day.
Though inspired by the actual fall of my favorite red maple tree, this piece is also meant to serve as a metaphor for the aftermath of a significant loss. Like storms, some losses may leave one to endure lasting effects, while others seemingly move on.
Thank you for your wonderful review!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Ricky1024
Interesting Concepts , when it comes to the trials and trivialities of you being sissy , travel through the pathway of life.
The cruelty of the elements from the winds in the sun beating down upon us.
Well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Thanks for sharing Jessica and have a pleasant day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Interesting Concepts , when it comes to the trials and trivialities of you being sissy , travel through the pathway of life.
The cruelty of the elements from the winds in the sun beating down upon us.
Well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Thanks for sharing Jessica and have a pleasant day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much! Truly appreciated. :)
Xoxo