Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

It was mainly one scene, but we learned a lot from it. The idea of music unraveling the power is ingenious. Hope to see this played out more in future installments.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it :)

reply by jim vecchio on 26-Jun-2024

You're doing great!

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

An interesting story of sparring with each other and learning about the powers they possess. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024

Thank you for your kind review and for reading my chapter! Have a great day! Erika

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your writing does a great job of sharing the tension. The post-apocalyptic medieval setting is so interesting. The black mist and its effects on humanity create a tense atmosphere. The characters are well written. I thought the discussion with Demi added to her development and showed us her personal struggles.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024

Thank you for your kind review! I'm glad you found it interesting