2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Your Rebellious Ways".
9 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Writing as a man is easy. " Get naked, earn money, take care of my every need." Thanks for the review.
Still moving, it is a pain in the butt, back and everything else. The picture is lovely, the poem is romantic. Karen
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Writing as a man is easy. " Get naked, earn money, take care of my every need." Thanks for the review.
Still moving, it is a pain in the butt, back and everything else. The picture is lovely, the poem is romantic. Karen
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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I am resting. Still much ahead.
:-)
Comment from shelley kaye
not sure any guy would talk like that... but it's a nice dreamy image to fantasize lol
cool pic and colours and a smooth flow of words throughtout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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not sure any guy would talk like that... but it's a nice dreamy image to fantasize lol
cool pic and colours and a smooth flow of words throughtout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this passionate poem. I'm always concerned when physical descriptions are given, because it makes me wonder if it's really love or lust. There is so much more to a relationship that how somebody looks. Just me. I know. Your poem is beautiful as is your presentation. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed reading this passionate poem. I'm always concerned when physical descriptions are given, because it makes me wonder if it's really love or lust. There is so much more to a relationship that how somebody looks. Just me. I know. Your poem is beautiful as is your presentation. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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It's a fictional poem written from a man's point of view, I challenged myself. It's not how I feel about relationships.
Thank you very much, Barbara
Gypsy
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, this is poem that makes the reader say, ahh. Your poem has good sensory appeal. Of special note:
And the best part of being with you
is when you press your body
against mine
(Nice)
Beautiful presentation. Well done. Xo. Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi Gypsy, this is poem that makes the reader say, ahh. Your poem has good sensory appeal. Of special note:
And the best part of being with you
is when you press your body
against mine
(Nice)
Beautiful presentation. Well done. Xo. Margaret
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Margaret
Gypsy
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
firstly, how beautiful is the dress been worn by your chosen title character! Perfect within the seamless transition of hair to skirt... yes, I love that!
The Gogyohka suite lays out a Male's perspective, but the way I read the second verse, it could also be the Female's... so yes, love the ambiguity of it. To be able to read it both ways adds depth and volume. Clever lady!
You have a beautiful way of bringing words and actions alive within the magic of your delicious-descriptive language.
You are the 'Queen' of presentation Lobo Gitano. Always a true and complete pleasure to read your stunning poetic form.
With our thoughts we create,
the mental picture of perfection.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi MariVal,
firstly, how beautiful is the dress been worn by your chosen title character! Perfect within the seamless transition of hair to skirt... yes, I love that!
The Gogyohka suite lays out a Male's perspective, but the way I read the second verse, it could also be the Female's... so yes, love the ambiguity of it. To be able to read it both ways adds depth and volume. Clever lady!
You have a beautiful way of bringing words and actions alive within the magic of your delicious-descriptive language.
You are the 'Queen' of presentation Lobo Gitano. Always a true and complete pleasure to read your stunning poetic form.
With our thoughts we create,
the mental picture of perfection.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you, James,
You are very kind to me and I appreciate it. I am lucky to have a friend like you. I'm thankful for the constant positive reviews and encouragement. Your intuitive feedback is important to me.
Besitos y abrazos, amigo mio,
MariVal
Comment from GWHARGIS
It's definitely from a man's point of view. Very convincing. I like the full commitment you write with. The physical pleasures described and way the woman affected him. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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It's definitely from a man's point of view. Very convincing. I like the full commitment you write with. The physical pleasures described and way the woman affected him. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
As a man I can say, many of my male friends fell like this. They are a bit timid to express the way they really feel about someone with whom they are sometimes closer to than a friend.
I like the tone of your poem, and your presentation.
RJ
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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As a man I can say, many of my male friends fell like this. They are a bit timid to express the way they really feel about someone with whom they are sometimes closer to than a friend.
I like the tone of your poem, and your presentation.
RJ
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ. I feel bad for the pressure society put on men. It must be hard to put yourself out there and be rejected. Nowadays women ask men too. I am usually too shy to take the first step, but when I'm in a manic episode I don't have a problem. I am bipolar. Since I started taking medicine life is balanced.
Gypsy
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That?s great. You?re welcome
Comment from lyenochka
There is joy in this pair of lovers who admire each other. I guess the narrator is the man but it could even be a dialogue with the male addressing her in the first and the woman replying in the second stanza.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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There is joy in this pair of lovers who admire each other. I guess the narrator is the man but it could even be a dialogue with the male addressing her in the first and the woman replying in the second stanza.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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James shares your opinion. I didn't try to write the poem from man and woman POV but I guess it comes naturally. I challenge myself. I never know what my muse is going to come up with. LoL
Thank you big sister, I hope you are having a wonderful weekend.
love,
marival
Comment from royowen
I hope the relationship will last into the time, the body is little comely heh heh, beautifully written Gypsy, I think you might have become a romance novelist my friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I hope the relationship will last into the time, the body is little comely heh heh, beautifully written Gypsy, I think you might have become a romance novelist my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Roy, that is the nicest thing you told me. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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Well done