Not another hit and run!
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Wendy,
This is a well written story with a positive twist in the end. Until the last line the reader thinks it could be a dead body. Then it turns out to me only a sweater.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Hi Wendy,
This is a well written story with a positive twist in the end. Until the last line the reader thinks it could be a dead body. Then it turns out to me only a sweater.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 31-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Thank you Joan for your very kind review, and also for your congratulations. I?m glad you enjoyed the story.
Wendy
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You're very welcome on both accaounts, Wendy.
Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Wendy,
Isn't it something that all the drivers took such care to veer around the dead creature, but not one stopped and removed it to the side of the road? It turned out to be a black sweater, and not a dog. Jane folded the garment and placed it on a park bench. Fortunately, she didn't become the victim of a hit-and-run! That's how I thought you might be ending the Flash Fiction as my thoughts rambled ahead.
Nice entry for the contest! Good Luck with it. I counted exactly 150 words.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Hi Wendy,
Isn't it something that all the drivers took such care to veer around the dead creature, but not one stopped and removed it to the side of the road? It turned out to be a black sweater, and not a dog. Jane folded the garment and placed it on a park bench. Fortunately, she didn't become the victim of a hit-and-run! That's how I thought you might be ending the Flash Fiction as my thoughts rambled ahead.
Nice entry for the contest! Good Luck with it. I counted exactly 150 words.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you Kimbob! There was no safe stopping place for the cars just there as the road was quite narrow. Fortunately, a happy ending here!! Thanks so much for the review, and also for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from BethShelby
Nice flash. That's a relieve. Sometimes objects or items of clothing do look like a dead animal. Not too long I noticed what I thought was a dead animal liying on the side of my yard. I figured it would soon have an odor and drawing buzzards. I made up my mind to go out and and deal with it. I was surprized to find it was the gnarled heart of tree. It was actually shaped like a beutiful piece of driftwood but I not near water andr I have no idea how it got in my yard. It is in my den now. I need a flower arrangment around it.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Nice flash. That's a relieve. Sometimes objects or items of clothing do look like a dead animal. Not too long I noticed what I thought was a dead animal liying on the side of my yard. I figured it would soon have an odor and drawing buzzards. I made up my mind to go out and and deal with it. I was surprized to find it was the gnarled heart of tree. It was actually shaped like a beutiful piece of driftwood but I not near water andr I have no idea how it got in my yard. It is in my den now. I need a flower arrangment around it.
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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That?s a lovely idea to keep and decorate it! Another happy ending. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from Jill D
Your story caused a few lines on my brow while reading this;) I was thinking it has to be a cat. You got me! The clever twist at the end is brilliant.
All the best.
Jill:)
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Your story caused a few lines on my brow while reading this;) I was thinking it has to be a cat. You got me! The clever twist at the end is brilliant.
All the best.
Jill:)
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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That?s good! I am glad I got you! lol. But of course we all like a happy ending, don?t we? Thanks so much for a super review.
Wendy
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Your welcome Wendy:)
Comment from Thesis
Well, you had me fooled on this one. I thought a poor little puppy or kitten had been hit, run over, or killed. It struck me how you portrayed the cars seeing this object in the road all avoided hitting it, but none stopped to help. When you revealed it was a sweater, I understood why.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Well, you had me fooled on this one. I thought a poor little puppy or kitten had been hit, run over, or killed. It struck me how you portrayed the cars seeing this object in the road all avoided hitting it, but none stopped to help. When you revealed it was a sweater, I understood why.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much for a super review. I think they all thought it was an animal but there wasn?t a safe place to stop. The early morning sun was quite glary. Happy ending this time.
Wendy
Comment from jmdg1954
You trickster... I was expecting the worst and ended up finding my lost sweater!
Excellent flash fiction post for the contest, containing all required pieces.
I think I'm #26 reviewer making this an All Time Best! Woo-hoo...
Cheers and best of luck.
John
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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You trickster... I was expecting the worst and ended up finding my lost sweater!
Excellent flash fiction post for the contest, containing all required pieces.
I think I'm #26 reviewer making this an All Time Best! Woo-hoo...
Cheers and best of luck.
John
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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lol. Well, we all like a happy ending, don?t we? Your lost sweater has been found - it?s on a fence post about 400 metres from my place - in Australia! lol. (Actually it?s gone. The owner must have returned.) Thank you so much for a super review (and many thanks for being no. 26!) and many thanks too for the six stars! I am very appreciative.
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Not Another Hit and Run!, takes me all the way through until I am let off the hook finding that the "lifeless" form knit really dead.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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This one-hundred-fifty-word flash fiction story, Not Another Hit and Run!, takes me all the way through until I am let off the hook finding that the "lifeless" form knit really dead.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you very much Bill. Yes, a nicer than expected ending.
Wendy
Comment from jessizero
This was, as I am sure you know, quite misleading. You did a good job pulling off that ending! Thank you for sharing this piece of flash fiction, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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This was, as I am sure you know, quite misleading. You did a good job pulling off that ending! Thank you for sharing this piece of flash fiction, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thanks so much Jessi. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
You had me going with this one, Wendy. I thought sure it was the neighbor's dog. This piece should do very well in the contest. I'll bet Sunny liked this one.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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You had me going with this one, Wendy. I thought sure it was the neighbor's dog. This piece should do very well in the contest. I'll bet Sunny liked this one.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you Paul. I appreciate your review ? and I?m glad you understood that it was only a sweater!
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
That's so very sad. I guess it happens much more frequently. The news covers mostly the hit and run of people not pet. And then there are collisions with large animals at night like deer that is often deadly for both the animal and the driver.
I like the way you described the hand movements to shield from the sun and how quickly the dog sensed something was wrong.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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That's so very sad. I guess it happens much more frequently. The news covers mostly the hit and run of people not pet. And then there are collisions with large animals at night like deer that is often deadly for both the animal and the driver.
I like the way you described the hand movements to shield from the sun and how quickly the dog sensed something was wrong.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Oh dear. I?ll have to change my wording. No animal was hit - it was only a black sweater. She assumed as did the car drivers that it was a N animal, but the sun was in their eyes. Thank you for reviewing. Always appreciated.
Wendy