The Same Window
Narrative on the loneliness of ageing.9 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Wow the tone here in this poem for the contest on Free verse is deeply melancholic - alone and forgotten by a busy world - a worthy winner for the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Wow the tone here in this poem for the contest on Free verse is deeply melancholic - alone and forgotten by a busy world - a worthy winner for the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thank you Zanya. Your comment is much appreciated.
Comment from karenina
Congratulations on an impressive win.
Your free verse is vivid in detail, while engaging the reader's senses and drawing him/her into the forlorn "abyss of darkness" -- a perfect introductory quote for a poignant, powerful write!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Congratulations on an impressive win.
Your free verse is vivid in detail, while engaging the reader's senses and drawing him/her into the forlorn "abyss of darkness" -- a perfect introductory quote for a poignant, powerful write!
Karenina
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thanks Karenina for your wonderful comment.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I read very little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But I'm certainly glad that I ran across this fine blue-ribbon winning effort. Thanks so much for sharing and congratulations on your contest win! :-)
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Wow, I read very little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But I'm certainly glad that I ran across this fine blue-ribbon winning effort. Thanks so much for sharing and congratulations on your contest win! :-)
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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So happy you liked it.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lonna.
You chose your words and line breaks well to link with the picture well. It is such a sad poem. She is so alone and lonely. It is sad also that no one who sees her in the window seems to think of visiting her. It is even sadder that she can't remember the sound of her name. This shows how alone she has been for so long.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Hi Lonna.
You chose your words and line breaks well to link with the picture well. It is such a sad poem. She is so alone and lonely. It is sad also that no one who sees her in the window seems to think of visiting her. It is even sadder that she can't remember the sound of her name. This shows how alone she has been for so long.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for you expressing your appreciation.
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No problem, Ionna.
Joaon
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is incredibly beautiful, and incredibly sad Lonna. It certainly deserved to win the contest. Congratulations!!! I will take a look into your portfolio and see what other gems you've written!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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This is incredibly beautiful, and incredibly sad Lonna. It certainly deserved to win the contest. Congratulations!!! I will take a look into your portfolio and see what other gems you've written!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you for your consideration within your comment.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Congratulations on the contest win Ionna and well done with this poignant free verse about the loneliness of old age. Your words show the never ending sameness of her everyday.
Cheers
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Congratulations on the contest win Ionna and well done with this poignant free verse about the loneliness of old age. Your words show the never ending sameness of her everyday.
Cheers
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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I am humbled and truly appreciate your comment.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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I am so very excited to be new to Fan Story and humbled by winning this contest. Thank You.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ionna, the site hasn't milestoned this as your first post and yet it appears to be the only thing in your portfolio. Can that be right?
In any case it is heartbreakingly poignant in its portrayal of the old woman, marooned in her loneliness, mourning a world that has passed her by. Your free verse is confident and clear, the descriptive details piled up to complete the portrait.
i am sure this will fare well in the contest, but I wish you luck anyway.
Steve
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Ionna, the site hasn't milestoned this as your first post and yet it appears to be the only thing in your portfolio. Can that be right?
In any case it is heartbreakingly poignant in its portrayal of the old woman, marooned in her loneliness, mourning a world that has passed her by. Your free verse is confident and clear, the descriptive details piled up to complete the portrait.
i am sure this will fare well in the contest, but I wish you luck anyway.
Steve
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thanks ever so much Steve. I truly appreciated you comment.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
Oh my gosh! I got chills reading this! I could feel every second and every moment of this persons life. I really love your style of writing with the descriptive words you used. Six stars for you!
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Oh my gosh! I got chills reading this! I could feel every second and every moment of this persons life. I really love your style of writing with the descriptive words you used. Six stars for you!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-May-2024
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Thank you Jodi!
