When We Kissed
That first kiss changes the relationship.11 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
It is sad that you weren't qualified to enter that contest, because your poem is very good. I enjoyed reading it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing and hope to see more of your lovely work soon. Patricia .
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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It is sad that you weren't qualified to enter that contest, because your poem is very good. I enjoyed reading it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing and hope to see more of your lovely work soon. Patricia .
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Pat. I always appreciate your reviews. I love writing poetry but I know that I'm a better story writer. -Bill
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Why were you not qualified to participate in the love poem contest? It's a perfect love poem.
If one can feel the things you felt with that first kiss - looking to the now with confidence, looking forward to the adventure of this new love - then you know it's right. I loved the line "of a love that will never let me go". What a beautiful way to talk about commitment.
The only thing missing here is an image - it would enhance the overall presentation and I think often makes our work here look complete.
A lovely poem, William.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Why were you not qualified to participate in the love poem contest? It's a perfect love poem.
If one can feel the things you felt with that first kiss - looking to the now with confidence, looking forward to the adventure of this new love - then you know it's right. I loved the line "of a love that will never let me go". What a beautiful way to talk about commitment.
The only thing missing here is an image - it would enhance the overall presentation and I think often makes our work here look complete.
A lovely poem, William.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I just fixed it. I added a photo. You were right. I got lazy. Thanks for the "kick in the pants." -
I didn't qualify because if you've won a contest in the last 30 days then you couldn't enter this contest.
I just won the contest for a story with "Fishing with Bread."
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Yes, I know that you did - I enjoyed that story.
Comment from jessizero
I am glad you decided to share this poem despite not being qualified to participate in the love poem contest. This poem was beautiful. I like the repetition and format of the "When we kissed" line. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I am glad you decided to share this poem despite not being qualified to participate in the love poem contest. This poem was beautiful. I like the repetition and format of the "When we kissed" line. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Jessi, for your review. I'm surprised that it is getting such a response. Poetry is my first love but I'm better at story.
-Bill
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm curious why you weren't 'qualified' to participate in a love poem contest, unless this one happens to be for new members only, but there are other love poem contest. LOL I did enjoyed this poem. It was beautiful.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I'm curious why you weren't 'qualified' to participate in a love poem contest, unless this one happens to be for new members only, but there are other love poem contest. LOL I did enjoyed this poem. It was beautiful.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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It you've won a contest in the last 30 days you couldn't apply. I just won a contest with "Fishing With Bread." Thanks, Barbara, for your review. My wife has been beating herself up lately so handed this to her this morning. Then we sat and talked about that first kiss.-Bill
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I see. Ahhh, the first kiss.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A beautiful love poem that creates the feeling of when a love was new. It makes us think back and remember how we felt with that first kiss. Well-written and descriptive. Thanks for rekindling those memories.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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A beautiful love poem that creates the feeling of when a love was new. It makes us think back and remember how we felt with that first kiss. Well-written and descriptive. Thanks for rekindling those memories.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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It rekindled ours as well. Thanks for sharing yours and I'm glad to be to blame for it. -Bill
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is so much promise held in a kiss here William and the feeling we get when we kiss someone is like no other. I enjoyed the journey through this love affair, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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There is so much promise held in a kiss here William and the feeling we get when we kiss someone is like no other. I enjoyed the journey through this love affair, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I had a woman when I was much, much younger, who was my "buddie" since I was eight. And then, we kissed. We were never the same to each other again.-Bill
Comment from teafor2
William, a list poem with refrains extolling and espousing each virtue protagonist garnered "When we kissed." Unknown whether 'author' had
experienced any noteworthy emotions from anyone else, only in the newly
acquired/seemingly significant other...Every kiss registered another new found first and endearing trait worth noting and holding onto...So enthralled by sequence of events/progression, scribe leaves last refrain
opened ended... Excellent stand alone love poem. teafor2
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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William, a list poem with refrains extolling and espousing each virtue protagonist garnered "When we kissed." Unknown whether 'author' had
experienced any noteworthy emotions from anyone else, only in the newly
acquired/seemingly significant other...Every kiss registered another new found first and endearing trait worth noting and holding onto...So enthralled by sequence of events/progression, scribe leaves last refrain
opened ended... Excellent stand alone love poem. teafor2
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I'm out of breath! Your review took all the air out of my lungs! I've never had a review like this ever! Thank you!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a pretty poem. It is well written. I enjoyed reading it. I liked some of the words you used, like adventure of a love. Also, how you used when we kissed. Very good job
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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What a pretty poem. It is well written. I enjoyed reading it. I liked some of the words you used, like adventure of a love. Also, how you used when we kissed. Very good job
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Brenda, for your review. Poetry gives me more freedom than story-telling, which is what I do most. -Bill
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yes, that first kiss made a big difference in the relationship and where it was heading. I wish David and I would have kissed when we first got together but to be honest we never kissed at all not once.
Now he is gone and I miss him terribly. Maybe if we had exchanged lips kissing we might have had the hutspa to stay together.
Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Yes, that first kiss made a big difference in the relationship and where it was heading. I wish David and I would have kissed when we first got together but to be honest we never kissed at all not once.
Now he is gone and I miss him terribly. Maybe if we had exchanged lips kissing we might have had the hutspa to stay together.
Jesse
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Jesse, for sharing in this review. I hope you will embrace the time you were together. We get so few quality relationships in our lives. -Bill
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I will. It hurts too much right now to embrace the best parts of the relationship.
Jesse
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Jesse, it's the hurt you need to feel. That's where you are close to the deepest part of your relationship. The hurt in the relationship is where youc will find peace. -Bill
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My coping skills are such that I can only handle a little bit of pain at a time. I am doing the best I can.
Thanks for caring, Bill.
Jesse
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, When We Kissed, collects all the emotions which are evident when two people find the necessity of lip contact a communication portal like no other.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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This poem, When We Kissed, collects all the emotions which are evident when two people find the necessity of lip contact a communication portal like no other.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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That first kiss changes everything in the relationship and it can rarely go back to the way it was before that kiiss. Thanks for the review. -Bill