Fallen Angels, part III
What was once honored is now disenchanted14 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Another most evocative part of this suite of poems. Empires crumble and their heroes are forgotten, except in fragments gleaned from ancient ruins and writings. It seems, however, that you have the same problem as we do, with the woke generation defacing and destroying monuments glorifying the early European settlers of Australia. There's a growing number of people here who now call Australia Day 'Invasion Day', with Captain Cooke cast as the ultimate villain. A case of history being re-written.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Another most evocative part of this suite of poems. Empires crumble and their heroes are forgotten, except in fragments gleaned from ancient ruins and writings. It seems, however, that you have the same problem as we do, with the woke generation defacing and destroying monuments glorifying the early European settlers of Australia. There's a growing number of people here who now call Australia Day 'Invasion Day', with Captain Cooke cast as the ultimate villain. A case of history being re-written.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thanks again for the sixer and your astute comments on the theme of this poem. As long as I can get people thinking, I have succeeded. estory
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed your poem. Our society and really changed in the last ten years. It seems as though it is getting worse. This poem is well written. Very good job
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed your poem. Our society and really changed in the last ten years. It seems as though it is getting worse. This poem is well written. Very good job
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem. It is an age of iconoclasts. estory
Comment from Aussie
heroes? English spelling.) I agree with you. Many heroes that our young have forgotten, many a man gave his life for his country. Heroes of the past are just found in dusty books. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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heroes? English spelling.) I agree with you. Many heroes that our young have forgotten, many a man gave his life for his country. Heroes of the past are just found in dusty books. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and your words of support for my poem. I appreciate it estory
Comment from Jasmine Girl
"Fallen Angels, part III" is a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant poem that invites readers to contemplate the fragility of human achievement and the enduring power of memory. With its lyrical prose and poignant imagery, the poem leaves a lasting impression, prompting reflection on the cyclical nature of time and the impermanence of human endeavor.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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"Fallen Angels, part III" is a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant poem that invites readers to contemplate the fragility of human achievement and the enduring power of memory. With its lyrical prose and poignant imagery, the poem leaves a lasting impression, prompting reflection on the cyclical nature of time and the impermanence of human endeavor.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your continued support of my work. I like that; the fragility of human achievement. I think that is a big part of this poem. In many ways, it is about the fragility of human perception of heroes. What was once honored is not, and now there are new heroes. But my point is that in the future, they too will fall by the wayside. estory
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You are right.
Comment from Nicki Hayes
YES! Your poem touched the part of me that has begun looking around and wondering WHY we believe all the stories from sources who were not a part of the lives of the statues, gurus, gods and goddesses that we read about and revere. The blinders are off for even holidays. It's everywhere, all the time, and yet, as you mentioned, we are the same ole same ole. Seeing certain historical things replay themselves again now to the SAME behaviors as the last time shows this to be true.
Here's to each person doing their best, whatever that may look like! Great piece of writing!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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YES! Your poem touched the part of me that has begun looking around and wondering WHY we believe all the stories from sources who were not a part of the lives of the statues, gurus, gods and goddesses that we read about and revere. The blinders are off for even holidays. It's everywhere, all the time, and yet, as you mentioned, we are the same ole same ole. Seeing certain historical things replay themselves again now to the SAME behaviors as the last time shows this to be true.
Here's to each person doing their best, whatever that may look like! Great piece of writing!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad the poem illicited such an emotional response from you. That is maybe the greatest tribute to the writing. I like to make people think. estory
Comment from royowen
Yes, the wonders of the past have passed into the sea of nothingness, I remember stepping onto the shores of Rhodes and remembering they once had a colossus astride the harbour, but it's gone from sight now, beautifully written, blessings my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Dismembered hero(e)s
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Yes, the wonders of the past have passed into the sea of nothingness, I remember stepping onto the shores of Rhodes and remembering they once had a colossus astride the harbour, but it's gone from sight now, beautifully written, blessings my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Dismembered hero(e)s
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on my little poem. How the mighty have fallen. Hubris is perhaps our greatest sin. But when we believe we have become gods ourselves, then comes that moment when pride goes before the fall. All manner of great civilizations and cultures have come and gone. But the Lord still remains. estory
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Yes, we never learn, fools all.
Comment from SimianSavant
Heros is actually spelled "heroes" FYI. I noticed this both in your poem and notes.
You have a talent for how to make words flow musically, and if you ever have the chance, you might try applying your talent to song lyrics.
Lying across the floor of the Acropolis, <= with all the infinitive/progressive verbs, this stanza seems to be missing an action verb. You have poetic license to do this. You could also change it from "lying" to "lies". The latter effect will make the piece more immediately readable, though perhaps less poetic.
This is an excellent piece, strong enough that you might not need the author notes to back it up -- sometimes less is more. Thanks for a great read,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Heros is actually spelled "heroes" FYI. I noticed this both in your poem and notes.
You have a talent for how to make words flow musically, and if you ever have the chance, you might try applying your talent to song lyrics.
Lying across the floor of the Acropolis, <= with all the infinitive/progressive verbs, this stanza seems to be missing an action verb. You have poetic license to do this. You could also change it from "lying" to "lies". The latter effect will make the piece more immediately readable, though perhaps less poetic.
This is an excellent piece, strong enough that you might not need the author notes to back it up -- sometimes less is more. Thanks for a great read,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and the suggestions. I will take a look at it at some point. Sometimes you need perspective on things. Song lyrics takes a special talent. You have to fit the meter into the rhythm of the music. I haven't done lyrics in 40 years. estory
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Holding onto good values can be difficult in a changing world and this when our history is important, as the heroes of the past have shaped our life. A poignant and deeply moving poem, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Holding onto good values can be difficult in a changing world and this when our history is important, as the heroes of the past have shaped our life. A poignant and deeply moving poem, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the piece. Glad you found it so moving. Values change. Heroes change. But in the end it we seem to be moving in circles. estory
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It's all very sad and an unhappy reality that a Second Coming seems to be upon us in which all the good that we once knew is reversed and replaced by bad. There is this iconoclastic need to tear down statues and destroy the past without, in my view, appreciating the value of history and its role in our present. It affords us the ability to look at ourselves in a context rather than a vacuum. As usual, you create a very thought-provoking and well crafted verse complemented by explanatory notes. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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It's all very sad and an unhappy reality that a Second Coming seems to be upon us in which all the good that we once knew is reversed and replaced by bad. There is this iconoclastic need to tear down statues and destroy the past without, in my view, appreciating the value of history and its role in our present. It affords us the ability to look at ourselves in a context rather than a vacuum. As usual, you create a very thought-provoking and well crafted verse complemented by explanatory notes. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your comments and perspective. I would rather see new monuments put up than the old ones torn down. We are rewriting history, and that is a dangerous thing. estory
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Sometimes when I walk in downtown is exactly the image of despair and poverty that comes over me with dark wings:"
They are the disinherited,
The homeless vagrants
Wild as animals,
Banshees in the night" Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Sometimes when I walk in downtown is exactly the image of despair and poverty that comes over me with dark wings:"
They are the disinherited,
The homeless vagrants
Wild as animals,
Banshees in the night" Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review and for mentioning that specific part of the poem. It's always great to hear from readers what works and what doesn't. estory