The Bus Stop
a horror story12 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
What a grim story. It sounds very vivid, though, as if it could have happened. The spectacle of the passengers running into traffic, etc. is scary. This is great as a horror story. Gail seems unaware of what has happened. Maybe she's too absorbed in her own complaints. Really sounds like a disaster story. Good luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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What a grim story. It sounds very vivid, though, as if it could have happened. The spectacle of the passengers running into traffic, etc. is scary. This is great as a horror story. Gail seems unaware of what has happened. Maybe she's too absorbed in her own complaints. Really sounds like a disaster story. Good luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Judi
Comment from Dawn Munro
spelling error -- "lerched" should be "lurched"
Well, that was horrific -- I hope it was a dream someone had. (Lol) Best of luck in the contest with this most unusual and highly imaginative story.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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spelling error -- "lerched" should be "lurched"
Well, that was horrific -- I hope it was a dream someone had. (Lol) Best of luck in the contest with this most unusual and highly imaginative story.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Dawn
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You're very welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I will never look at a bus ride the same again. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
as she sat with a plop next to a woman, who hurriedly scooted to avoid having the new person in her lap. (plop beside a woman)
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I will never look at a bus ride the same again. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
as she sat with a plop next to a woman, who hurriedly scooted to avoid having the new person in her lap. (plop beside a woman)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Got it. Thank you.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Bill, you got a good one here. I was not sure where you were going. I knew the subtitle said horror story, but with your creative mind, that could mean a lot of different things. The conversation with 'director' was a nicely done touch and detail. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Bill, you got a good one here. I was not sure where you were going. I knew the subtitle said horror story, but with your creative mind, that could mean a lot of different things. The conversation with 'director' was a nicely done touch and detail. Terry.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Terry.
Comment from kahpot
So that bus had already been hit by the bomb or plunged to its end before they picked up poor Gail, an excellent read of a ghost bus trip, very well writen and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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So that bus had already been hit by the bomb or plunged to its end before they picked up poor Gail, an excellent read of a ghost bus trip, very well writen and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Thanks, kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
That met the rquirements for a horror story. She may have been better off missing the bus! Written with imagination. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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That met the rquirements for a horror story. She may have been better off missing the bus! Written with imagination. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from jim vecchio
And I thought this was a Marilyn Monroe movie! This was the best bus wreck story since that day in 1957 when The Deadly Mantis demolished a bus after the woman got out. A great entry for the Horror Writing contest!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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And I thought this was a Marilyn Monroe movie! This was the best bus wreck story since that day in 1957 when The Deadly Mantis demolished a bus after the woman got out. A great entry for the Horror Writing contest!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Jim
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They don't make bus crash stories like they used to.
Comment from nomi338
Over the years I had some issues with busses. Once transit trains became available, I was finished with travelling by bus. This frightening tale has quickly convinced me that this bus is one worthy of missing. Sometimes missing a bus can be a blessing rather than being a bother.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Over the years I had some issues with busses. Once transit trains became available, I was finished with travelling by bus. This frightening tale has quickly convinced me that this bus is one worthy of missing. Sometimes missing a bus can be a blessing rather than being a bother.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This bus especially.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Didn't see that coming at all. You clever clogs. Very, very good. Sorry, no sixes left, or I would have given you one. We are in competition, you know. I wish you well anyway. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Didn't see that coming at all. You clever clogs. Very, very good. Sorry, no sixes left, or I would have given you one. We are in competition, you know. I wish you well anyway. Karen :-)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Karen
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Comment from BethShelby
I guess the ghost bus didn't want to leave its last passanger behind even though crossing the river wasn't part of her route. This is cool story for the horror contest.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I guess the ghost bus didn't want to leave its last passanger behind even though crossing the river wasn't part of her route. This is cool story for the horror contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Beth
