2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "If One Day".
11 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Aw, Marival, how beautiful and sensual is this poem for your book of free verse poems. I absolutely adored it. It's one of your best poems.in my humble opinion. Un abrazo de Tu Amiga, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Aw, Marival, how beautiful and sensual is this poem for your book of free verse poems. I absolutely adored it. It's one of your best poems.in my humble opinion. Un abrazo de Tu Amiga, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
besitos y abrazos,
MariVal
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an erotic and sensual post full of lustful thoughts and intimate satisfaction all subtly delivered in in your poem, much enjoyed, a steamy write, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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This is an erotic and sensual post full of lustful thoughts and intimate satisfaction all subtly delivered in in your poem, much enjoyed, a steamy write, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I can remember when I was in mortal combat with my hormonal condition, but never got on top of it, your passionate language reminded me of those days, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I can remember when I was in mortal combat with my hormonal condition, but never got on top of it, your passionate language reminded me of those days, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Well done
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This reminds me of when I was first married. There was so much magic and spark there. You used very good descriptive words that made me think of newly weds! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Gypsy, This reminds me of when I was first married. There was so much magic and spark there. You used very good descriptive words that made me think of newly weds! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
oh, goodness, gypsy! A little intimate for sure. Sometimes we read between the lines, but this poem shows that life is not modest between this couple.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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oh, goodness, gypsy! A little intimate for sure. Sometimes we read between the lines, but this poem shows that life is not modest between this couple.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Beautiful poem. I could feel the intense emotions running through this. It was highly erotic yet not over the line. A beautiful and sensual poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Beautiful poem. I could feel the intense emotions running through this. It was highly erotic yet not over the line. A beautiful and sensual poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. I hope you have a wonderful day, Gretchen. I changed it a little by the reviews I was getting. I hope is better now.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Wow, this is enough to make our temperature rise.
And, your two pictures are very racy too. I assume, since you did not mention them in you author's notes that must be yours. Good eye. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Wow, this is enough to make our temperature rise.
And, your two pictures are very racy too. I assume, since you did not mention them in you author's notes that must be yours. Good eye. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I changed it a little
Thank you very much, my friend. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! I think you might need a warning for your poem or at least the picture! ð???
I think you describe the passion well and if the lovers were that intimate, I'm sure they would miss each other.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Oh my! I think you might need a warning for your poem or at least the picture! ð???
I think you describe the passion well and if the lovers were that intimate, I'm sure they would miss each other.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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LoL Barbara told me about the stanza with girl on the sand. She said she didn't want sand in her butt hahaha I didn't think that one all way through. I changed the picture and line. To me it dosen't need a sex warning... I don't say anything crude... is all about mental images but I want to respect reviewers and I added a warning. Can you check it?
Thank you big sister. I appreciate you guys who help me.
love,
marival
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Your words were fine. I agree with Barbara - better water than sand...😊
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LoL yes
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering about the sand getting between the butt cheeks. Maybe it's just me, but sand tends to get everywhere and it's very uncomfortable. I love walking barefoot in the sand, but not invading other parts of my body. LOL However, your poem is beautifully romantic and I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing this presentation.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I'm wondering about the sand getting between the butt cheeks. Maybe it's just me, but sand tends to get everywhere and it's very uncomfortable. I love walking barefoot in the sand, but not invading other parts of my body. LOL However, your poem is beautifully romantic and I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing this presentation.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hahaha.... I see your point. I changed the picture and that line. I hope is better now.
Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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I checked it out. Much better.
Comment from shelley kaye
aw sweet... except for the sandy beach part lol
a nice free verse with good imagery and smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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aw sweet... except for the sandy beach part lol
a nice free verse with good imagery and smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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LoL Barbara brought that up to my attention... I was looking for a mental picture but didn't think it through. I changed it.
Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs