Stories and Poems for the Holidays
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Personal Goals for the New Year"Holiday musings.
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Comment from mermaids
I like your advice of putting a timeline on the wall. It is a good idea, we can see progress or lack of. Your poetic form is smooth and I like how you mention fears, fears do keep us from goals. Congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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I like your advice of putting a timeline on the wall. It is a good idea, we can see progress or lack of. Your poetic form is smooth and I like how you mention fears, fears do keep us from goals. Congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much for reviewing this one. I was surprised to win.
Beth
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you. It is a honor to be awarded seven stars.
Beth
Comment from Geelbooi Mosiuoa Motaung
The poem does not hook attention of the reader. It doesn't flow nor creating image. It carries good message but don't deliver. Is very quiet and need reconstruction. The good thing that the last word of a sentence open the next sentence. Words order don't rises a spark to give a sentence the shape of a poem. The poem is in a style that lacks energy. It doesn't play with words but has a vision.
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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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The poem does not hook attention of the reader. It doesn't flow nor creating image. It carries good message but don't deliver. Is very quiet and need reconstruction. The good thing that the last word of a sentence open the next sentence. Words order don't rises a spark to give a sentence the shape of a poem. The poem is in a style that lacks energy. It doesn't play with words but has a vision.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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I see you are new. Welcome to fanstory, If you are going review on this site before you rate anyone you need to read the rating other people have written. Otherwise you will end up with eveyone blocking you and you want have a good experience on this site. A loop poem is different from other kinds of poems. You apparently don't understand the rules. Hardly anyone ever gives less than five stars to a writer.
Comment from Spitfire
An excellent loop poem with great ideas to help one achieve New Year Resolutions. I especially like the idea of nailing a timeline to the wall. Now to do my list.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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An excellent loop poem with great ideas to help one achieve New Year Resolutions. I especially like the idea of nailing a timeline to the wall. Now to do my list.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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T;thank you for great review with six star attached. I hope you have a wonderful new year and we can both make some plans for 2024 that we might be able to keep.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Beth,
This is a nicely done loop poem for the contest. It provides pointers and encouragement on how to actually keep your resolutions.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Beth,
This is a nicely done loop poem for the contest. It provides pointers and encouragement on how to actually keep your resolutions.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Joan, I appreciate this review especially because it was the number 26. I'm always pleased with that one.
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You're very welcome, Beth. Aren't we all.
Joan
Comment from Ric Myworld
We must cherish every minute of every day and night before they are gone. Time passes so quickly, even more so than we realize before it's too late and it's gone. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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We must cherish every minute of every day and night before they are gone. Time passes so quickly, even more so than we realize before it's too late and it's gone. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Yes, this past year flew by before I realized it. I don't know how many more I can expect. I really appreciate you.
Comment from Lisasview
Fabulous loop poem dear Beth. Really well thought out and clever!!
I feel this is a great contest entry for the Loop Poetry Contest,
Lisa, afternoon in Spain..reading and reviewing
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Fabulous loop poem dear Beth. Really well thought out and clever!!
I feel this is a great contest entry for the Loop Poetry Contest,
Lisa, afternoon in Spain..reading and reviewing
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lisa. I didn't think it out before I started. I just gave some thought to next line as I wrote it. I'm not that organized to plan ahead. LOL
Beth
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Well, it worked Beth!!
And, that is great,
Lisa
Comment from karenina
Awesome loop poem. They are so hard to write smoothly, and you've made each swing to the next line seamlessly, which is most impressive! My one resolution is not to make any resolutions anymore. I'll do my best one day at a time. I'm way tired of "failing" by week two!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Awesome loop poem. They are so hard to write smoothly, and you've made each swing to the next line seamlessly, which is most impressive! My one resolution is not to make any resolutions anymore. I'll do my best one day at a time. I'm way tired of "failing" by week two!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Karenina. I know the feeling but once or twice I managed to keep a few of the ones I've made. This year I'd like to stop putting things off that need to be completed. I won't do them all, but some of maybe. At least, last year I managed to get two books in print.
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I'm so glad it works for you! Delighted for you!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What an interesting loop poem about your New Year resolutions. The Loop Poem structure made it assertive so it's a great one to make sure that you are serious this time but what's your New Year's goal?
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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What an interesting loop poem about your New Year resolutions. The Loop Poem structure made it assertive so it's a great one to make sure that you are serious this time but what's your New Year's goal?
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you so for a great review. My main resolution is to overcome my tendancy to put off the things I dread doing and get them out of way so they aren't hanging over my head.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A wonderful poem about the expectations for the coming year. We always want the bad experiences to not be repeated. It's difficult to tolerate the constant repeating, repeating. It's good to have new beginnings.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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A wonderful poem about the expectations for the coming year. We always want the bad experiences to not be repeated. It's difficult to tolerate the constant repeating, repeating. It's good to have new beginnings.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the review, Rosemary. Repeating words is what I dislike most about loop poems. I do appreciate you nice review.
Beth