Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Searcher "This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
17 total reviews
Comment from Kahlani
You say this story is from your autobiography so the events that have taken place are real? It is an intriguing read and I was looking forward to reading more especially about B! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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You say this story is from your autobiography so the events that have taken place are real? It is an intriguing read and I was looking forward to reading more especially about B! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Yes, it's book two in a three book series.The quarter is already published.It's called "Ghost" this is book two called "Spectre". They're both in my portfolio.You're welcome to look and read. Ghost in my profile, you see unedited version.You're welcome to read it. Thank you for stopping in and having a read. And offering your comments and you're great radio I thank you for that and for your time, most of all! I hope you have the best night. Thank you again!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hey Lea(((((((,
The free verse placed me in a suspended animation 'of what the?' And not in a bad way... it was certainty dark, but had a real depth that had to be applauded... I loved it!
I had to read through this chapter a couple of times to truly grasp the technique you have used to bring forth this level of candour and story... which I also applaud!
What it has done in reading this particular chapter, is to make me want to go and read where, how and when this journey may have started twelve chapters ago.
Very creative, very real... yeah, it's not all about smelling the roses Lea, but it definitely is about asking the questions of oneself for sure... and it looks as though that has got you to this point in time.
Well done, I'll be reading you soon!
With our thoughts we create...
a plan of attack.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Hey Lea(((((((,
The free verse placed me in a suspended animation 'of what the?' And not in a bad way... it was certainty dark, but had a real depth that had to be applauded... I loved it!
I had to read through this chapter a couple of times to truly grasp the technique you have used to bring forth this level of candour and story... which I also applaud!
What it has done in reading this particular chapter, is to make me want to go and read where, how and when this journey may have started twelve chapters ago.
Very creative, very real... yeah, it's not all about smelling the roses Lea, but it definitely is about asking the questions of oneself for sure... and it looks as though that has got you to this point in time.
Well done, I'll be reading you soon!
With our thoughts we create...
a plan of attack.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Hi James, what an awesome review! Thank you so much for your great rating Wow! I'm truly glad that you like this. This is book 2 of a trilogy. It's called the spirit series. Book 1 is currently published.It's called "Ghost". You can find the unedited version in my portfolio, if you wish to look at it. Were on book two called "Spectre" . Thank you again for your wonderful review.Gave me a bright smile! I hope you have the greatest evening!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Life is never easy. That's why it's called the Cycle of life. A circuit, like electricity that flows in a circle. When times are bad, they will most likely get better, all but once. But when times are good, get ready, everything is about to blow all to hell. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Life is never easy. That's why it's called the Cycle of life. A circuit, like electricity that flows in a circle. When times are bad, they will most likely get better, all but once. But when times are good, get ready, everything is about to blow all to hell. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Hi, Rick. I know exactly what you're saying. Yes, it's almost like the bubble's gonna burst at anytime. When the bubble finally forms, I, uh, i'm a, uh, hope for the best.Prepare for the worst kind of gal. As that's what life has taught me. Wonderful to see you here again. Yes, I was away for a while, but I come back for book 2 feel free to catch up if you like in my portfolio. I've written many chapters, but I'm currently in a little. Rewrite stage so the first dozen chapters I've been rewritten. Editing, it takes longer than the actual book itself. Which really doesn't surprise me. So great to see you here! Thank you for your great review if you're fine rating and for your insight, which has always been keen.!" thank you again.Great to see you here!
Comment from Tim Margetts
Hey there again, Lea.
Well a bit less of a totally traumatic episode, which is good as it allows a breather in your story. I enjoyed this chapter.
I enjoy the way you tell it through flashbacks. It helps to understand the you of now by throwing a light onto the events that have created the person you are today.
The only advice I might make would be the early 'present' section was really soul searching, maybe find a few other ways to express soul, unless of course, the repetitive use was deliberate.
Also, I think you missed a word
"I snapped of it." Should that be 'snapped OUT of it'?
Looking forward to the next chapter
Tim x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Hey there again, Lea.
Well a bit less of a totally traumatic episode, which is good as it allows a breather in your story. I enjoyed this chapter.
I enjoy the way you tell it through flashbacks. It helps to understand the you of now by throwing a light onto the events that have created the person you are today.
The only advice I might make would be the early 'present' section was really soul searching, maybe find a few other ways to express soul, unless of course, the repetitive use was deliberate.
Also, I think you missed a word
"I snapped of it." Should that be 'snapped OUT of it'?
Looking forward to the next chapter
Tim x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Good morning, Tim. Thank you again, by the way, for your support. Kindness, your suggestions for correction.You have an eagle eye which I can appreciate. Punctuations are sometimes not my strong suit. I might miss it. How do you try to edit? But some things get by which is why there are you my friend. And I thank you for it.And your interest really flatters me. I appreciate you so much thank you! Your kindness in your insight are not matched by many.I'll tell you that! I have another 40 chapters ready to come out. But of course, I can only bring them out a bit of time, so I take that time.Read them over.Maybe flesh it out as I need too. Thank you again.I hope you have the best day!
Comment from royowen
I guess sometimes to deal with the past one has to bury those horror times, and convince oneself that those situations aren't normal conditions, most of us don't experience those things, just a different set of circumstances, beautifully written Lea, blessings Roy
Typo : warrior(')s souls.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I guess sometimes to deal with the past one has to bury those horror times, and convince oneself that those situations aren't normal conditions, most of us don't experience those things, just a different set of circumstances, beautifully written Lea, blessings Roy
Typo : warrior(')s souls.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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For me to write all this, it's fine. After all these years, I can speak and say, no, they're the liars, they're the ones that did this. Hopefully, it will affect change within our social service system. Butt heads are rolling. And could have been all avoided, if only she would have just stopped. Thank you, wife, so appreciate your fine comments. Your kindness and your insight as always. Are special to me?I'm glad you enjoyed the writing! Hope you have an awesome day!
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You too Lea
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay...a nice little reprieve, but always with that undertow. What horror lurks for this sweet and wonderful girl who just wants a normal, peaceful life? First, the grouch Mr. D, now the handsome dark-haired, blue-eyed interested seemingly okay boy. But you've taught us not to trust anything.
The poem at the beginning is so dark but excellent. Very eye-opening to your soul. Well done.
In the first sentence of the small font, two steps forward, one step....'back' was omitted by mistake.
Another interest-piquing chapter. You have the best knack for building blocks so gradually that we don't realize how quickly we're being swept along. That takes writing chops. xo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Okay...a nice little reprieve, but always with that undertow. What horror lurks for this sweet and wonderful girl who just wants a normal, peaceful life? First, the grouch Mr. D, now the handsome dark-haired, blue-eyed interested seemingly okay boy. But you've taught us not to trust anything.
The poem at the beginning is so dark but excellent. Very eye-opening to your soul. Well done.
In the first sentence of the small font, two steps forward, one step....'back' was omitted by mistake.
Another interest-piquing chapter. You have the best knack for building blocks so gradually that we don't realize how quickly we're being swept along. That takes writing chops. xo
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hello, my friend, I certainly did make that correction. Thank you so much. I want to thank you again for being my friend for being so helpful. For being the being the stand up candid person that you are thanks again!
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Lea, Sweetie, you do not have to thank me for being your friend. You're a really wonderful person. Only a moron wouldn't want to be friends with you. xoxo
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your memory is serving you well. You're beginning to recall even the smallest details, like the conversation between you and the dark haired guy. Even though you've lived a tough life, it has been a life filled with all sorts of adventures and horrors.
Your final author note should be edited. A new reader will not understand what you are trying to say.
"The story is from an autobile (autobiography)
Should you wish to read, please note sun. Chapters (Please note some chapters)
Chapters are difficult to digest reader the question is advised. (Some chapters are difficult to digest (the remainder of the sentence is unclear).
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Your memory is serving you well. You're beginning to recall even the smallest details, like the conversation between you and the dark haired guy. Even though you've lived a tough life, it has been a life filled with all sorts of adventures and horrors.
Your final author note should be edited. A new reader will not understand what you are trying to say.
"The story is from an autobile (autobiography)
Should you wish to read, please note sun. Chapters (Please note some chapters)
Chapters are difficult to digest reader the question is advised. (Some chapters are difficult to digest (the remainder of the sentence is unclear).
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much. Yes, I did see that and make the corrections. I appreciate you pointing them out. Because these things are gold to me as you may know. Thank you too for your kind Remarks and comments and suggestions. They are gold. And I hope that you're having the best day thanks again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Even though you were working hard at applying for jobs, this feels like a relief or a rest stop at the end, with a young man who was more friendly than aggressive. It seems to serve as reminder that life is normal more often than not. I liked this nearly last paragraph a lot, but I was going to point out a few little fixes in a minor rewrite to make it stand out.
I gazed out the window as we drove along, watching the sunset tease the horizon with golds, pinks, orange and finally red. Succumbing to the drop, the sun made one last blast of color, shining under the clouds before slipping into slumber. It was tranquil...not a feeling I'm used to, but it brought me a smile just the same.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Even though you were working hard at applying for jobs, this feels like a relief or a rest stop at the end, with a young man who was more friendly than aggressive. It seems to serve as reminder that life is normal more often than not. I liked this nearly last paragraph a lot, but I was going to point out a few little fixes in a minor rewrite to make it stand out.
I gazed out the window as we drove along, watching the sunset tease the horizon with golds, pinks, orange and finally red. Succumbing to the drop, the sun made one last blast of color, shining under the clouds before slipping into slumber. It was tranquil...not a feeling I'm used to, but it brought me a smile just the same.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Wonderful, thank you so much. I appreciate your suggestions. They're like gold to me. Well. Implement them for sure. I hope that you're having a great evening and I thank you again for reading and offering your thoughts and you're fine rating too!
Comment from JSD
I can see in your head here. You must be wary of trusting anyone. Which is so sad when he might be a perfectly innocent person who has no ulterior motive. Fingers crossed. x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I can see in your head here. You must be wary of trusting anyone. Which is so sad when he might be a perfectly innocent person who has no ulterior motive. Fingers crossed. x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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You do see that clearly i'm sure! Thank you so much again i'm so happy to receive your Reviews always glad to see you here. Your support is gold to me. Thank you again!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I almost feel like I may have missed a chapter, but I don't know how. I know that you met an Oriental woman and she offered you a place to stay. I guess I didn't realize you were going to be sleeping on a concrete bed-the other option being the floor. I think it would be trying to be staying at the home of someone of a completely different culture. I'm not sure I could do it, but as the saying goes, any port in a storm. I hope that things continue to improve, as you seem to be making some progress in getting a handle on your life.
I think if we're honest with ourselves, most of us question our sanity at times. We've been led to believe, through TV or books or movies that life can be perfect and without challenges, and when we discover that it's not true, we wonder if we're the problem. You've had an enormous amount to deal with in your life, problems that most of us have never encountered. Every day that you awaken and take a breath is a good day. I don't think a life without problems exists, but how we view and deal with those problems can make or break us. You're a survivor gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I almost feel like I may have missed a chapter, but I don't know how. I know that you met an Oriental woman and she offered you a place to stay. I guess I didn't realize you were going to be sleeping on a concrete bed-the other option being the floor. I think it would be trying to be staying at the home of someone of a completely different culture. I'm not sure I could do it, but as the saying goes, any port in a storm. I hope that things continue to improve, as you seem to be making some progress in getting a handle on your life.
I think if we're honest with ourselves, most of us question our sanity at times. We've been led to believe, through TV or books or movies that life can be perfect and without challenges, and when we discover that it's not true, we wonder if we're the problem. You've had an enormous amount to deal with in your life, problems that most of us have never encountered. Every day that you awaken and take a breath is a good day. I don't think a life without problems exists, but how we view and deal with those problems can make or break us. You're a survivor gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Tom, thank you so much.
Bruce apart and kind words really mean a lot to me! Thank you again For all your reboot for reading and for being here with Me. It is gold!