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Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about the beautiful cat in the picture. The poem about the dog is written very well too! I enjoyed reading and reviewing these two poems. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This is a very well written poem about the beautiful cat in the picture. The poem about the dog is written very well too! I enjoyed reading and reviewing these two poems. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from Paul McFarland
That was a clever idea, Darla, when you gave the cat and dog personalities. Wendy and I do that with our pets. I am going to wait until after the poem a day contest gets over before our next meter lesson.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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That was a clever idea, Darla, when you gave the cat and dog personalities. Wendy and I do that with our pets. I am going to wait until after the poem a day contest gets over before our next meter lesson.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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I don't want a meter lesson.
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Okay.
Comment from Julie Lau
This is cute and it's fun. Please let me suggest some small changes:
1) Cat: You have repeated the 2nd line. Did you mean to?
verse 1 last line scans better if you delete 'some'.
3 line 3 I think you meant it to start at 'I love ... '
2) Dog: 1 3 I love (being) scratched ...
2 1 I will 'lie' by his feet (not 'lay')
2 2 .... 'well' fed (not 'real')
2 3 ... and play." close speech
Tonight my cat was eating left-over rice from my plate! He probably wouldn't touch it in his bowl, but he thinks anything humans eat must be good. :) All the best, Julie Lau
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This is cute and it's fun. Please let me suggest some small changes:
1) Cat: You have repeated the 2nd line. Did you mean to?
verse 1 last line scans better if you delete 'some'.
3 line 3 I think you meant it to start at 'I love ... '
2) Dog: 1 3 I love (being) scratched ...
2 1 I will 'lie' by his feet (not 'lay')
2 2 .... 'well' fed (not 'real')
2 3 ... and play." close speech
Tonight my cat was eating left-over rice from my plate! He probably wouldn't touch it in his bowl, but he thinks anything humans eat must be good. :) All the best, Julie Lau
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
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No some in last line, line 3 I meant enjoy in cat poem.
Comment from papa55mike
Dogs and Cats have been fighting for out attention for thousands of years and nobody has won yet. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Dogs and Cats have been fighting for out attention for thousands of years and nobody has won yet. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
These two poems are both very creative cite and interesting.i could relate to each as we've always had a couple cats and a dog. At first I thou :))ght the title expressed that the dog was writing a poem about the cat, then I realized. Good work! :))
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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These two poems are both very creative cite and interesting.i could relate to each as we've always had a couple cats and a dog. At first I thou :))ght the title expressed that the dog was writing a poem about the cat, then I realized. Good work! :))
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks!