Secret
Flash fiction15 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Gretchen, LOL, a great story and very well told. I think you need to add a picture of a bear or change it to a beagle and add that picture post it as nonfiction biographical, and your daughter would...(never talk to you again). On second thought, just leave it a bear. A very fun write. Terry.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
Gretchen, LOL, a great story and very well told. I think you need to add a picture of a bear or change it to a beagle and add that picture post it as nonfiction biographical, and your daughter would...(never talk to you again). On second thought, just leave it a bear. A very fun write. Terry.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for this. The suggestion about the picture probably wouldn't fly. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Of course, he was the bestest bear in the world. I enjoyed your fun
story, Gretchen. Everyone, no matter their age, needs that on special
friend, real or imaginary, to confide in. Your words were descriptive
in a way I could see everything a I read. I enjoyed your story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
Of course, he was the bestest bear in the world. I enjoyed your fun
story, Gretchen. Everyone, no matter their age, needs that on special
friend, real or imaginary, to confide in. Your words were descriptive
in a way I could see everything a I read. I enjoyed your story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan. I appreciate your kind review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Don't you just love it? The thought that one can still tell secrets to and know they'll never betray you or turn their back on you, is amazing, I never had a Teddy, that's probably what's wrong with me. Beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
Don't you just love it? The thought that one can still tell secrets to and know they'll never betray you or turn their back on you, is amazing, I never had a Teddy, that's probably what's wrong with me. Beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I still have my imaginary friend. Lol. Some days it's the best conversation I have. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
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My wife and granddaughter have/had imaginary friends, Wife Elaine?s Tilly Fitzgibbons, and Indah?s Phyllis. Heh heh
Comment from w.j.debi
A true friend can be counted on no matter what your age.
The story is delightful. It feels sincere and the love between the girl and her stuffed bear are precious. The dialog is fun.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
A true friend can be counted on no matter what your age.
The story is delightful. It feels sincere and the love between the girl and her stuffed bear are precious. The dialog is fun.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for this. I appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
Good for your daughter! I have a similar loved one. A rag doll I've had since I was three months old. We mustn't forget those special things in our life. Remember The Velveteen Rabbit! I love your story. It's a love me, love my bear thing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
Good for your daughter! I have a similar loved one. A rag doll I've had since I was three months old. We mustn't forget those special things in our life. Remember The Velveteen Rabbit! I love your story. It's a love me, love my bear thing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much. Honored to be mentioned in the same sentence as The Velveteen Rabbit. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this. My youngest son is 6'5" and has a huge Scooby Do. Steven will be 30 tomorrow. We came down to Victoria to visit with him. Scooby is still front and center. LOL
She hugged the bear tightly. (adverb need to be as close to verb as possible since it doesn't sound right just after the verb, then before the verb, 'tightly hugged the bear.')
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
I enjoyed reading this. My youngest son is 6'5" and has a huge Scooby Do. Steven will be 30 tomorrow. We came down to Victoria to visit with him. Scooby is still front and center. LOL
She hugged the bear tightly. (adverb need to be as close to verb as possible since it doesn't sound right just after the verb, then before the verb, 'tightly hugged the bear.')
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for teaching me the verb and adverb rule. I love your reviews because you not only correct grammar but explain why. Thank you so much for this . Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
At twenty-five be glad your daughter has her beagle as a bed mate. I wish I'd kept my monkey with the banana in his hand, it would have been tons cheaper and less traumatic. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
At twenty-five be glad your daughter has her beagle as a bed mate. I wish I'd kept my monkey with the banana in his hand, it would have been tons cheaper and less traumatic. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I had a monkey with a banana when I was little. His name was Jocko. He went on vacation and never returned. Though I did get a letter from him explaining that he had found a girlfriend. He had really nice handwriting like my mom's. LOL. Thank you so much for this fun review. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Ha, I'm 72 in just over a week and I recently found my old bear. He needs some work on his coat and his music box needs replacing. I have to decided what tune to replace "Twinkle, Twinkle Little Star" with, as it was run by a spring which broke and the music systems are probably different now.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
Ha, I'm 72 in just over a week and I recently found my old bear. He needs some work on his coat and his music box needs replacing. I have to decided what tune to replace "Twinkle, Twinkle Little Star" with, as it was run by a spring which broke and the music systems are probably different now.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Happy birthday. I appreciate your nice review. Good luck with the reworking of your bear. Gretchen
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Mine is 27th and Louise 25th with 9 years between us.
Comment from Wendy G
A sweet and fun short story. Where I taught, the thirteen year olds (first year of high school) had to take a favourite teddy or stuffed animal to camp. This was so that the ones who needed that comfort during their time away from home would not be embarrassed, because they all had a soft toy or teddy. Lovely story, and I bet the teddy knew many secrets.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
A sweet and fun short story. Where I taught, the thirteen year olds (first year of high school) had to take a favourite teddy or stuffed animal to camp. This was so that the ones who needed that comfort during their time away from home would not be embarrassed, because they all had a soft toy or teddy. Lovely story, and I bet the teddy knew many secrets.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks, Wendy. I appreciate your review. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
That's so cute! I'm glad that people, no matter how old, have a special stuffed confidant who will always listen nonjudgmentally and keep every secret! Well told!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
That's so cute! I'm glad that people, no matter how old, have a special stuffed confidant who will always listen nonjudgmentally and keep every secret! Well told!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you could relate. Gretchen