Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Death By Murder - Chap 17"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
17 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I see you've filled int he blanks from the previous chapter... I cannot write prose so who am I to suggest... but it seems Fenton's observations are pivotal, and he had only the slightest of mention, the man with birth defect, previously so I'm befuddled on how he put the rest of this all together and ended up on Cooper's doorstep. With a frightening package delivered no less! It all fits together, but the loose threads are tenuous!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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I see you've filled int he blanks from the previous chapter... I cannot write prose so who am I to suggest... but it seems Fenton's observations are pivotal, and he had only the slightest of mention, the man with birth defect, previously so I'm befuddled on how he put the rest of this all together and ended up on Cooper's doorstep. With a frightening package delivered no less! It all fits together, but the loose threads are tenuous!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Maybe I am too subtle. I didn't want Sandy to reveal who Fenton was so I downplayed him in that chapter. Maybe too much?
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Actually, like any avid reader, I was too anxious and YOU were smart... Making me think and revealing more as you go.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, those surprise packages aren't always a gift to look forward to getting. Sometimes, they're open with a bang. LOL. Thanks for sharing another outstanding chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Yes, those surprise packages aren't always a gift to look forward to getting. Sometimes, they're open with a bang. LOL. Thanks for sharing another outstanding chapter.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Surprise packages... fireworks of some kind, but what? Thank you as always, my dear. I so enjoy seeing your smile as I wade through these reviews, thankful that I have them and ashamed it takes me so long o respond.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Zue65
Well, the suspense is intensifying in this post and the mystery is slowly getting demystified. The introduction of a package from an unknown sender is another conflict that the readers will follow for sure.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Well, the suspense is intensifying in this post and the mystery is slowly getting demystified. The introduction of a package from an unknown sender is another conflict that the readers will follow for sure.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Good morning and please accept my apologies for the delay in responding with a heartfelt thank you. Been traveling to care for my grandchildren and the old bones can't seem to go as fast as they use to do. I appreciate your time and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Cooper seems to be a nice man, and genuinely wanted to help Fenton. I'm now left wondering if that packet has something not very nice in it. I can quite understand Fenton being nervous about talking and about staying. Not being treated so nice before, I'd not trust him either. But I think he's proved he's one of the goodies! Another wonderful chapter, my friend, a virtual six! Love and hugs. Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Cooper seems to be a nice man, and genuinely wanted to help Fenton. I'm now left wondering if that packet has something not very nice in it. I can quite understand Fenton being nervous about talking and about staying. Not being treated so nice before, I'd not trust him either. But I think he's proved he's one of the goodies! Another wonderful chapter, my friend, a virtual six! Love and hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the virtual six. Knowing that you enjoyed it is well worth it. I am grateful for your time and knowing that I haven't lost all my ability to write and please the reader.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, so you left us on a cliff hanger. How could I resist to reading on. I can't wait for the next instalment. This is a great story. I'm so glad you're back. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Hi Carol, so you left us on a cliff hanger. How could I resist to reading on. I can't wait for the next instalment. This is a great story. I'm so glad you're back. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Sorry for another delay but life threw me a curve and I ended up on a plane to North Carolina and my grandchildren. Surgery for one and Nana's care for the others. Settling down now for a few days so I wanted to make sure I thanked everyone for reading and commenting on the stories. I truly appreciate your time and comments... Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I'm sorry you keep on having problems. I hope everything is better now. Ulla:)))
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Thank you, Ulla. 10 yr old had surgery but home now and recovering. 14 yr old has birthday on Sunday and then we will celebrate Christmas before I go back home. I was happy to be able to help amidst the other struggles going on. Have a great day! Hugs, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. The hook at the end, and the package, make me want to keep reading. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. The hook at the end, and the package, make me want to keep reading. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2022
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Thank you as always my dear friend. May I assume the three stars was by accident or is there a reason you were unhappy with the chapter?
smiles and hugs as always, Carol
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How do I change that?
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LOL You go back in and register the number of stars as if you were doing it the first time. It should change. Thank you so much... I hoped I didn't deserve a three. Have a great day!
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I did that let me know if it worked.
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It's all good. Thank you my dear. Happy Thanksgiving and a great day to you.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh-oh. Did someone send a bomb? It's good that Cooper is looking out for Fenton's safety. Glad that Fenton was alert and able to record all that he overheard and saw.
Suggestion: - completely up to you!
Her heart ached to see the strained look (this makes it feel like she longed to see the strained look)
Maybe: Her heart ached when she saw the strained look
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Oh-oh. Did someone send a bomb? It's good that Cooper is looking out for Fenton's safety. Glad that Fenton was alert and able to record all that he overheard and saw.
Suggestion: - completely up to you!
Her heart ached to see the strained look (this makes it feel like she longed to see the strained look)
Maybe: Her heart ached when she saw the strained look
Comment Written 21-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Here I am going crazy as usual. LOL Thank you for taking the time to respond to my story. Hopefully I will find a moment or two to get back to writing soon. Thanks for the suggestion and I will check it out as soon as I can. Appreciate you always!
Hugs Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Oh my, this is very interesting. He has an idea of someone to help him find the jewels, he is kind enough to protect Fenton, and he has a guest house apparently full of bodyguards! Then his mother carries a mysterious package into the library.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Oh my, this is very interesting. He has an idea of someone to help him find the jewels, he is kind enough to protect Fenton, and he has a guest house apparently full of bodyguards! Then his mother carries a mysterious package into the library.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Sorry for another delay but life threw me a curve and I ended up on a plane to North Carolina and my grandchildren. Surgery for one and Nana's care for the others. Settling down now for a few days so I wanted to make sure I thanked everyone for reading and commenting on the stories. I truly appreciate your time and comments... Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
A good cliff-hanger! Wondering what's in the box and who sent it. There's so much happening in this book, and it's all very interesting. I'm glad you're writing again. Have a blessed Thanksgiving.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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A good cliff-hanger! Wondering what's in the box and who sent it. There's so much happening in this book, and it's all very interesting. I'm glad you're writing again. Have a blessed Thanksgiving.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Hi, Carol
Been traveling and caring for grandchildren so I apologize for my delay in thanking you for your generosity with the stars and for enjoying the story. I am so blessed to be in the writing groove again and having others appreciate it. Thank you!
Hugs, Carol
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I'm glad you're able to travel, and hope you go safely. Blessings. Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This chapter is short but intriguing. You need to write fast so I can find out what is in the box that was delivered to Cooper. I will be waiting and looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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This chapter is short but intriguing. You need to write fast so I can find out what is in the box that was delivered to Cooper. I will be waiting and looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Sorry for another delay but life threw me a curve and I ended up on a plane to North Carolina and my grandchildren. Surgery for one and Nana's care for the others. Settling down now for a few days so I wanted to make sure I thanked everyone for reading and commenting on the stories. I truly appreciate your time and comments... Smiles and hugs, Carol
