Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

Geoff,

I really enjoyed the opening lines. I think you could work this into a country song. I'm hearing Johny Cash's voice. Great job with early poetry!

Sue

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

This is a great poem. Not all houses are homes. And a house that has happy people and loved lives in homes. The house is much bigger than the first house my grandparents lived in, but it looks like the house. The tin roof. When it rained, it sounded great coming from that tin roof. Thank you for sharing and waking up memories from my past.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was impressive from an 11-year-old! I like the way you describe the way you describe your house in a state of disrepair, then say you love it just as is. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig

Excellent

For an 11-year-old this is a good poem. One can see the rhyme scheme wasn't carried consistently out, but it shows you had promise as a poet. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022

I don't even think our teacher knew what rhyme scheme was lol

reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 13-Jul-2022

Lord, then you did a spectacular job! lol

Comment from moonsunrise

Excellent

Thanks for sharing your "Home Sweet Home" poem. Great image selected of a really old, deteriorating home with lots of memories.
Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

Oh, I love this! You've conveyed that untouchable affection we hold form the places dear to us as youngsters. Indeed, if it's home, then who cares if it creaks a little?

Mike

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2022