Revenge
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Comment from dmt1967
This is the best chapter ever. I was really drawn in and loved the end hook as it makes me want to find out what happens next. I thought it was very showing as well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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This is the best chapter ever. I was really drawn in and loved the end hook as it makes me want to find out what happens next. I thought it was very showing as well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest into the plot.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Of COURSE she's not senile. hahahahaha Yet another wrench in your wicked, wicked, multi-level, crazy, unexpected plots! Wow. Who woulda thunk THAT!????
Loving it! And moving on -->
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Carol,
Of COURSE she's not senile. hahahahaha Yet another wrench in your wicked, wicked, multi-level, crazy, unexpected plots! Wow. Who woulda thunk THAT!????
Loving it! And moving on -->
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest into the plot.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
So how much dementia does Marion really have? Or should I say, how advanced is it? Because it sounds like it's not as bad as the people around her think it is. And who is she calling on that cell phone?
Some suggestions for revisions:
It surprised me by how well she did."
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She surprised me by how well she did."
... with cleansers, brushes, capes, every other necessity one would need.
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... with cleansers, brushes, capes, and every other necessity one would need.
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Is the real Jaz the one sleeping in their mansion? What a tangled web this is! And I wonder whether Marion realizes that Vito is not her real James?
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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So how much dementia does Marion really have? Or should I say, how advanced is it? Because it sounds like it's not as bad as the people around her think it is. And who is she calling on that cell phone?
Some suggestions for revisions:
It surprised me by how well she did."
-->
She surprised me by how well she did."
... with cleansers, brushes, capes, every other necessity one would need.
-->
... with cleansers, brushes, capes, and every other necessity one would need.
***
Is the real Jaz the one sleeping in their mansion? What a tangled web this is! And I wonder whether Marion realizes that Vito is not her real James?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
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I know you have to juggle a lot of responsibilities, but I appreciate how you are writing this amazing story, and answering reviews, etc. It certainly isn?t easy! I'm not going to answer all of your copied replies, as that's less work for you, anyway -- I appreciate your efforts. Much love. May God bless you and your family, and keep you all safe!
Comment from LJbutterfly
There are plots and sub-plots, and every character seems to have an angle. Who will outsmart who? I'm keeping an eye on Lady Marion because I can't tell whether on not she knows James is not her real husband. This is early in the story. We are still learning who the characters really are. Hope to learn a little more in the next episode.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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There are plots and sub-plots, and every character seems to have an angle. Who will outsmart who? I'm keeping an eye on Lady Marion because I can't tell whether on not she knows James is not her real husband. This is early in the story. We are still learning who the characters really are. Hope to learn a little more in the next episode.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
Another great chapter in your book, Revenge. I get so lost in what's going on in each chapter. It's a very enjoyable reading. I'll see you in the next chapter!
xxoo
Patty
p.s. I hope things are going better for you than it was the past week or so. I still have you in my prayers.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Another great chapter in your book, Revenge. I get so lost in what's going on in each chapter. It's a very enjoyable reading. I'll see you in the next chapter!
xxoo
Patty
p.s. I hope things are going better for you than it was the past week or so. I still have you in my prayers.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I like this story more and more as the plot thickens.
"Did you check if she's breathing?" James knew she was, but he enjoyed playing this game. "She's not dead, is she?"
"Dead?" Cheryl gulped, and her eyes widened. "You don't think--" (Two people speaking, each person deserves their own paragraph.)
"I think you might have something there, Cheryl." James laughed. "Charles, I believe she's saved your job."
Charles grabbed Cheryl, lifted her from the chair, and hugged her. "Thank you." (Two people speaking, each person deserves their own paragraph.)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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I like this story more and more as the plot thickens.
"Did you check if she's breathing?" James knew she was, but he enjoyed playing this game. "She's not dead, is she?"
"Dead?" Cheryl gulped, and her eyes widened. "You don't think--" (Two people speaking, each person deserves their own paragraph.)
"I think you might have something there, Cheryl." James laughed. "Charles, I believe she's saved your job."
Charles grabbed Cheryl, lifted her from the chair, and hugged her. "Thank you." (Two people speaking, each person deserves their own paragraph.)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
The plot is getting thicker with intrigues and counter plats. I like the twist at the end. I tip my hat to you for keeping track of the complex characters and making them dance to your tune. I am enjoying it. Cheers!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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The plot is getting thicker with intrigues and counter plats. I like the twist at the end. I tip my hat to you for keeping track of the complex characters and making them dance to your tune. I am enjoying it. Cheers!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
This sure is becoming a more and more tangled web, Carol! I think your imagination is on overdrive, but it's sure drawing your readers in. So many questions to be answered, but at least one has been, I think. Excellent writing.
I found one little slip:
"I'm sure we can (be) do something."
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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This sure is becoming a more and more tangled web, Carol! I think your imagination is on overdrive, but it's sure drawing your readers in. So many questions to be answered, but at least one has been, I think. Excellent writing.
I found one little slip:
"I'm sure we can (be) do something."
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much for the review and for enjoying my story. I hope it continues to draw your interest. It's tough to be able to read, review, answer, and write...but I am trying to do my best. Thank you for understanding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an unexpected twist at the end! I wonder if she realises that the man acting as her husband really isn't. She doesn't sound like she has dementia because she has her own secrets that she's sworn Cheryl to keep. But another great twist, who was the man Marian spoke to on the phone?? She has her own plot going on, and I can't wait to learn more about it, and Marian.
I'm glad that the body Allie had to identify wasn't her sister, but now she wants to know where her sister is, and that will be where this story really starts to grow. You've set the ground work beautifully, everyone is in place now the search and investigation will begin in earnest. Very well done, my friend! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021
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That was an unexpected twist at the end! I wonder if she realises that the man acting as her husband really isn't. She doesn't sound like she has dementia because she has her own secrets that she's sworn Cheryl to keep. But another great twist, who was the man Marian spoke to on the phone?? She has her own plot going on, and I can't wait to learn more about it, and Marian.
I'm glad that the body Allie had to identify wasn't her sister, but now she wants to know where her sister is, and that will be where this story really starts to grow. You've set the ground work beautifully, everyone is in place now the search and investigation will begin in earnest. Very well done, my friend! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021
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My thoughts and prayers are with you and I know that you understand how deeply your problems and my own are troubling me. I apologize for the cut-and-paste response, but I am 200 behind and can't imagine any way to at least extend a thank you. Just know how appreciative I am for your time, your comments and how much you enjoy my story.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Already it is getting quite complex with intrigues and plots and counter plots. Why did they want Allie to realise that it wasn't her sister who was dead? To lure her into looking for her sister?
A couple of typos I noticed:
"Edged away FROM Charles" (not FOR) and "he now chooses what..." not "choices".
Enjoyable read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Already it is getting quite complex with intrigues and plots and counter plots. Why did they want Allie to realise that it wasn't her sister who was dead? To lure her into looking for her sister?
A couple of typos I noticed:
"Edged away FROM Charles" (not FOR) and "he now chooses what..." not "choices".
Enjoyable read.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much. Wendy. Writing keeps me sane, but it doesn't stop me from making stupid errors. My brain isn't focusing as it should. The rocky road turned into something much worse again. I apologize for my sloppiness.
I thank you for reading and bearing with me as I try to mend the mistakes.... I appreciate it very much.
Always, Carol
