In Kneed of Freedom
Prisoner Prose7 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
LOL I didn't see that ending coming. It certainly was a surprise but makes a lot of sense. I'm sure the prisoners do get restless. They put a cast on my arm when I broke my wrist. It drove me so crazy that I was back at the hospital having then take it back off. They finally just put a splint on it that I could adjust to let some air in. That was only three years ago when I was 62. LOL
Patty
LOL I didn't see that ending coming. It certainly was a surprise but makes a lot of sense. I'm sure the prisoners do get restless. They put a cast on my arm when I broke my wrist. It drove me so crazy that I was back at the hospital having then take it back off. They finally just put a splint on it that I could adjust to let some air in. That was only three years ago when I was 62. LOL
Patty
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this flash in which you allowed us to believe in a literal prison but the surprise was it wasn't the kind we were thinking off. It is probably almost as real. I've had my leg encased in a plaster cast before and my own feeling ere a lot like the ones you expressed her. Nice contest entry.
I enjoyed this flash in which you allowed us to believe in a literal prison but the surprise was it wasn't the kind we were thinking off. It is probably almost as real. I've had my leg encased in a plaster cast before and my own feeling ere a lot like the ones you expressed her. Nice contest entry.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is very interesting. If you can give voice to objects, animals and emotions why not to legs. I think the short story is well written but I do have small suggestion. I think the payoff or the twist is a bit long. The surprise should be quick and at the very end. IMO
Good entry and good luck.
Hmm, this is very interesting. If you can give voice to objects, animals and emotions why not to legs. I think the short story is well written but I do have small suggestion. I think the payoff or the twist is a bit long. The surprise should be quick and at the very end. IMO
Good entry and good luck.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from Wendy G
This is clever and imaginative, and quite original. Your story has been well written, and I like the last few words as a fitting climax. Best wishes for the contest.
This is clever and imaginative, and quite original. Your story has been well written, and I like the last few words as a fitting climax. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, you have discarded your plaster cast, glad your leg is now free. Your title should read (Need) not (KNeed) ? A fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
Ha ha ha, you have discarded your plaster cast, glad your leg is now free. Your title should read (Need) not (KNeed) ? A fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. I purposely spelled the title as kneed as a reference to the leg that has become free
Geoff
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How clever, I bought that might be the case x x x
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant play on KNEED/need ingenious take on the theme--this may be a winner! (I was expecting this to be about the trial of Derek Chauvin for kneeing Floyd yo death.)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
Brilliant play on KNEED/need ingenious take on the theme--this may be a winner! (I was expecting this to be about the trial of Derek Chauvin for kneeing Floyd yo death.)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. Too much Floyd stuff around, no need for me to add to the pile.
Geoff
Comment from LisaMay
You wrote a suspenseful story with a lovely feeling of anticipation at being free at last. (And now you'll have all those rehabilitation exercises to do before you have a leg to stand on securely.)
You wrote a suspenseful story with a lovely feeling of anticipation at being free at last. (And now you'll have all those rehabilitation exercises to do before you have a leg to stand on securely.)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021