After the Gathering
Favorite time after the gathering, the two us by the fire.7 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Merry Christmas Mystery Author,
What a wonderful holiday tradition to have....kids , grandkids and cocoa.
Nothing could be better than that for the holidays.
Loved the passion and sentiment.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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Merry Christmas Mystery Author,
What a wonderful holiday tradition to have....kids , grandkids and cocoa.
Nothing could be better than that for the holidays.
Loved the passion and sentiment.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the read and the review. We have to forego for this year and hope we can do this in 2021. Happy holidays for you and your family.
Comment from kmoss
This is a wonderful entry for the Christmas contest. The picture is perfect. I love how the day unfolds through the poem. All sweet, but the ending is the sweetest. The sigh of exhaustion coupled with a heart filled with love and joy. This is what Christmas is about. Good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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This is a wonderful entry for the Christmas contest. The picture is perfect. I love how the day unfolds through the poem. All sweet, but the ending is the sweetest. The sigh of exhaustion coupled with a heart filled with love and joy. This is what Christmas is about. Good luck!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the read and the comments.
Comment from Leann DS
I am not an expert, but here is what I noticed.
Rhymes were pleasant but the rhythm was choppy. By that, I mean that the lines had differing numbers of syllables which made it a little difficult to read. But I love the sentiment and storyline.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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I am not an expert, but here is what I noticed.
Rhymes were pleasant but the rhythm was choppy. By that, I mean that the lines had differing numbers of syllables which made it a little difficult to read. But I love the sentiment and storyline.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Actually, each line has 14 syllables even though the lines are of different lengths. Syllables were checked on two syllable counters.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Dad,
Man! I get it. *smile* I get my two grandgirls every day and I ADORE them, but rests are good in between. Shhh....
That picture is perfect for your poem! I think it should be 'leftover(s)' though. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Dear Mystery Dad,
Man! I get it. *smile* I get my two grandgirls every day and I ADORE them, but rests are good in between. Shhh....
That picture is perfect for your poem! I think it should be 'leftover(s)' though. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the read and the comments.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love this. You tell the complete story of Christmas day==down to the Oreck cleaner. There's energy in your story and then there's the blessed relief from the excitement. That's so true.
I will miss such Christmases this year. It will be much simpler and quieter. I will have to enjoy the quiet aspect of the holidays.
Your rhymes are excellent. I think that I would make the font red. There's not enough contrast between the background and the words.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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I love this. You tell the complete story of Christmas day==down to the Oreck cleaner. There's energy in your story and then there's the blessed relief from the excitement. That's so true.
I will miss such Christmases this year. It will be much simpler and quieter. I will have to enjoy the quiet aspect of the holidays.
Your rhymes are excellent. I think that I would make the font red. There's not enough contrast between the background and the words.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the read and the suggestion. I will consider the question of contrast. Very helpful.
Comment from Wendy G
What a beautiful image, and it is easy to imagine, because of the eloquence of your words and the their fluency. It is warm and loving, and the picture is perfect, love and harmony and peace, and satisfaction with a life well lived. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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What a beautiful image, and it is easy to imagine, because of the eloquence of your words and the their fluency. It is warm and loving, and the picture is perfect, love and harmony and peace, and satisfaction with a life well lived. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Have a wonderful holiday season, even if it will be different.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ha! So your favourite thing about Christmas is when it's over! I suspect many people will agree with your view as presented in this lovely poem.
Good description of a warm family Christmas with good rhyme and rhythm.
hub bub should be one word, I think.
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Ha! So your favourite thing about Christmas is when it's over! I suspect many people will agree with your view as presented in this lovely poem.
Good description of a warm family Christmas with good rhyme and rhythm.
hub bub should be one word, I think.
Steve
Comment Written 10-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the read, comments and the tip. I will check it out.
You are correct - hubbub one word. Thanks.