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A Queriet
A chapter in the book Little Poems
Jesus Has Risen
by Treischel
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I couldn't get all the meter right, so I am open to any suggestions.
I tried here to blend all four versions of Christ's Resurrection into this one poem. There are interesting differences between Matthew, Mark, Luke, and John.
Mathew has the guards posted on Saturday morning and they were temple guards. He also has Mary Magdalene and one "other Mary" come to the tomb, at dawn. The guards were there with them. and faint when the Angel comes to move the stone. He tells them Jesus has risen and will meet them in Galilee. They run and encounter Jesus on the road home. Jesus also asks to meet Him in Galilee.
Mark has the women listed as: Mary Magdalene, Salome, and Mary, mother of James. The stone was already removed with the angel inside. The Galilee statement is made here too. He also describes Jesus meeting with Magdalene as the first to see him alive, but not the other women. Mark in the first one to mention the two on the road to Emmaus.
Now Luke has two angels greet the women at the tomb. He identifies them as: Mary Magdalene, Joanna, and Mary mother of James. No mention of the Jesus meeting on the road. He has Peter alone running to the tomb. He goes into more detail on the Emmaus encounter, and how they report back to the Apostles.
John only cites Mary Magdalene as going to the tomb, while it was still dark, before dawn. No mention of any angels or guards. John races Peter to the tomb, beats him, but won't go in. Peter comes up and goes right in. John also writes a detailed account of Jesus' meeting with Mary Magdalene, after Peter and John left for home, and she had returned to the tomb and was crying there. That's when she saw the two Angels, who asked her why she was crying. Then Jesus appeared behind her, in the tomb. A very interesting thing happened. She went to hug Him, and He yelled "Don't touch Me, for I haven't ascended to my Father. But go find my brothers and tell them that I ascend to my Father and your Father, my God and your God." John 20: 17.
So he hadn't ascended yet, even though He had risen. That is why I added that in my poem.
A final interesting point is that, even though the angels said to go to Galilee, and Jesus Himself asked them to go there, the Apostles never went, but stayed hidden in Jerusalem. No wonder Mark commented on their admonishment. Even though he didn't write specifically about Thomas' doubting the resurrection until he could examine and touch the wounds. Mark 16:14 states that: "Still later He appeared to the eleven as they were eating together. He rebuked them for their unbelief - their stubborn refusal to believe those who had seen him alive."
This poem is a Queriet.
The Queriet is a newly created format by our very own Pantytgynt. It is a very complex form, that is useful with question/answer dialogue, which I learned from his poem, Beltane Sacrifice.
"Feeling the need for another poem in which the Q & A form would be appropriate, I thought I would try to write to a similar form which I now christen the "Queriet" from the queries or questions that are an essential feature of what has here become the first eight line stanza. You can have as many questions and answers as you wish but this first stanza of each cycle must contain at least one. This stanza is syllabic to the syllable count of 8,8,13,8,8,8,13,8 and the rhyme scheme for this stanza is abbcabbc.
If appropriate both question and response may come from one and the same person, as in a soliloquy. I have not found this necessary here.
The second part of the cycle contributes more detail and covers 10 lines of metered rhyming couplets. Any meter consistent over the 10 lines can be used. Here I have gone for Heptameter (14 syllables).
The whole poem concludes in the manner of a Sonnet with a rhyming couplet of iambic pentameter."
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and 2 member cents. I tried here to blend all four versions of Christ's Resurrection into this one poem. There are interesting differences between Matthew, Mark, Luke, and John.
Mathew has the guards posted on Saturday morning and they were temple guards. He also has Mary Magdalene and one "other Mary" come to the tomb, at dawn. The guards were there with them. and faint when the Angel comes to move the stone. He tells them Jesus has risen and will meet them in Galilee. They run and encounter Jesus on the road home. Jesus also asks to meet Him in Galilee.
Mark has the women listed as: Mary Magdalene, Salome, and Mary, mother of James. The stone was already removed with the angel inside. The Galilee statement is made here too. He also describes Jesus meeting with Magdalene as the first to see him alive, but not the other women. Mark in the first one to mention the two on the road to Emmaus.
Now Luke has two angels greet the women at the tomb. He identifies them as: Mary Magdalene, Joanna, and Mary mother of James. No mention of the Jesus meeting on the road. He has Peter alone running to the tomb. He goes into more detail on the Emmaus encounter, and how they report back to the Apostles.
John only cites Mary Magdalene as going to the tomb, while it was still dark, before dawn. No mention of any angels or guards. John races Peter to the tomb, beats him, but won't go in. Peter comes up and goes right in. John also writes a detailed account of Jesus' meeting with Mary Magdalene, after Peter and John left for home, and she had returned to the tomb and was crying there. That's when she saw the two Angels, who asked her why she was crying. Then Jesus appeared behind her, in the tomb. A very interesting thing happened. She went to hug Him, and He yelled "Don't touch Me, for I haven't ascended to my Father. But go find my brothers and tell them that I ascend to my Father and your Father, my God and your God." John 20: 17.
So he hadn't ascended yet, even though He had risen. That is why I added that in my poem.
A final interesting point is that, even though the angels said to go to Galilee, and Jesus Himself asked them to go there, the Apostles never went, but stayed hidden in Jerusalem. No wonder Mark commented on their admonishment. Even though he didn't write specifically about Thomas' doubting the resurrection until he could examine and touch the wounds. Mark 16:14 states that: "Still later He appeared to the eleven as they were eating together. He rebuked them for their unbelief - their stubborn refusal to believe those who had seen him alive."
This poem is a Queriet.
The Queriet is a newly created format by our very own Pantytgynt. It is a very complex form, that is useful with question/answer dialogue, which I learned from his poem, Beltane Sacrifice.
"Feeling the need for another poem in which the Q & A form would be appropriate, I thought I would try to write to a similar form which I now christen the "Queriet" from the queries or questions that are an essential feature of what has here become the first eight line stanza. You can have as many questions and answers as you wish but this first stanza of each cycle must contain at least one. This stanza is syllabic to the syllable count of 8,8,13,8,8,8,13,8 and the rhyme scheme for this stanza is abbcabbc.
If appropriate both question and response may come from one and the same person, as in a soliloquy. I have not found this necessary here.
The second part of the cycle contributes more detail and covers 10 lines of metered rhyming couplets. Any meter consistent over the 10 lines can be used. Here I have gone for Heptameter (14 syllables).
The whole poem concludes in the manner of a Sonnet with a rhyming couplet of iambic pentameter."
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