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An Ends Edge Poem
A chapter in the book Little Poems

River Shimmers

by Treischel



I stand on these river flats, observing the scene,
Keen to focus on the sights, soon to be revealed,
Concealed by bustling town that's amazingly clean,
Seen through these eyes, local river sights unsealed,
Peeled from sunlit spots, and everything in between.

The Mississippi River shimmers in the light,
Bright business building glimmers, its reflection glows,
Shows in silver ripples, a shining late day sight,
Right upon the river, where water channel flows,
Those shimmers on the river, flashing pure delight.

Where barges bear the burden of their heavy load,
Towed to destinations along the water ways,
Days or months consigned while they're floating Nature's road,
Stowed away in cargo holds held by ropes and stays,
Trays of coal, or iron ore, even new commodes.

Under bridges built to span mighty river banks,
Thanks to civil engineer's skill at construction,
Production moves across that gap along its flanks.
Tanks or cars may swiftly move without obstruction,
Introduction to the other shore among the driving ranks.

And all these things I viewed, to my utter delight,
Were just simple river scenes bathed in bright sunlight.




Along the flats of the Mississippi, just below downtown ST. Paul, Minnesota, is where I took this photograph. It was about an hour before sundown, and sun was reflecting off the Comcast building. The bridge in the background is the Robert Street bridge. I wanted this poem to sketch the images captured here.

This poem is an Ends Edge Poem.
The Ends Edge was created by the poet Vroom. I was introduced to it by Gungalo. It consists of the first word of each line of the poem rhyming with the last word of the previous line. Typically, when you rhyme these connecting lines, you don't need to to rhyme the end lines. There is no requirement for line length or syllable count. I imagine that short lines work best for this format, as then the connection becomes most apparent, but feel free to experiment.

For this poem I chose to use rhyme on the end line as well as the connecting rhymes, which adds difficulty. I also closed it with a set of rhyming couplets, but that's not a requirement of the format. So, the rhyme scheme of this poem is: ababa cdcdc efefe aa.
I did experiment here with longer, 12 syllable lines.

This picture was taken by the author himself in April, 2012.

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