I will dissect your chosen words
apparently all written by nerds
how is a smile like lace?
lace has holes
is he missing teeth in his face?
a strange metaphor in this case
takes me nowhere so I move on in haste

second verse
as bad as the first
"eyes of fire"
his situation is dire
or does it mean he is a liar?
sounds like the devil
is this guy evil?

and the confusion continues
with controversial cues
why would you give the liar
YOUR prayers and desires?
line six says, ". . .life goes on. . ."
line eight says, ". . .time stands still. . ."
the confusion gave me a chill

without examining the ole' luc bat
this pretense of a poem is not all that
sounds like it's written by a 13 year old girl
attempting to sound like a woman of the world
give it a three so maybe you'll grow
much work is needed to make it flow
as it is now it really blows