Romance Poetry posted June 18, 2023


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Be With Me

by CD Richards

 
Walk with me
to the dam on the hill
where the scent of the pine trees is strong
 
Dance with me
on a crystal clear night
in the starlight and sing a soft song

Stay with me
while I'm still drawing breath
then instead of "goodbye" say "so long"



3-6-9 Poem contest entry


I'm not sure there's a technical difference, but to my mind, "goodbye" has a finality about it that "so long" doesn't. The latter conveys a sense of "until we meet again".

Minimal punctuation is intentional.
Pays one point and 2 member cents.


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