Slo' Joe
A race horse that wasn't.36 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Your delightful story poem just goes to show that we have to find the right niche to excel. This might mean finding it for ourselves, or being 'talent spotted', or learning as we go in another line of work, as ol' Slo Joe did.
Your rhythm and rhyme carry the tale along nicely.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Your delightful story poem just goes to show that we have to find the right niche to excel. This might mean finding it for ourselves, or being 'talent spotted', or learning as we go in another line of work, as ol' Slo Joe did.
Your rhythm and rhyme carry the tale along nicely.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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slo' Joe thanks you, for the review and stars.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Such a happy story in a poem how Slo Joe found happiness after years of misery on the track, with a cowboy who got him. Great descriptive imagery and visuals, excellent artistic presentation and artwork. I also liked your rhymes and flow.
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Such a happy story in a poem how Slo Joe found happiness after years of misery on the track, with a cowboy who got him. Great descriptive imagery and visuals, excellent artistic presentation and artwork. I also liked your rhymes and flow.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' Joe thanks you, for your very nice review and stars. By the way,
you have my thanks also.
Comment from Vanna1
This is really great. Like a little story in a poem. The presentation is good. I was really routin' for Joe. What a refreshing piece from all the plain ol' Janes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This is really great. Like a little story in a poem. The presentation is good. I was really routin' for Joe. What a refreshing piece from all the plain ol' Janes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' Joe appreciates your very nice review and stars. So do I.
Comment from Janet Foor
A wonderful story in this sweet rhyming poem Willie. How great it would be if we, like Joe, could all find our niche in this crazy world.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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A wonderful story in this sweet rhyming poem Willie. How great it would be if we, like Joe, could all find our niche in this crazy world.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' Joe appreciates your review and stars, so do I
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, descriptive, and creative. The poem
flows and connects well. I found the poem enjoyable as it told a sweet
story. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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The author's words are interesting, descriptive, and creative. The poem
flows and connects well. I found the poem enjoyable as it told a sweet
story. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' Joe appreciates your very nice review and stars, so do I.
Comment from dragonpoet
These abcb quatrains have a happy ending for Slo Joe and the rancher who bought him. He loves his new life and does it well. By the way I would never bet on a horse named, Slo Joe. Maybe his race track troubles was a self fulfilling prophecy for his name.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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These abcb quatrains have a happy ending for Slo Joe and the rancher who bought him. He loves his new life and does it well. By the way I would never bet on a horse named, Slo Joe. Maybe his race track troubles was a self fulfilling prophecy for his name.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' thanks you, Joan, for the very nice review and stars, so do I.
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You're very weclome, to both of you.
Joan
Comment from lightink
Hi,
This is a heart warming story about poor Joe finding his place after failing as a race horse - and turning into the best farm horse ever!
Lovely writing and great message! This could be a perfect candidate for children's poetry, as well.
I have just one thing I'd like to suggest in further poems -
consider sticking with a consistent syllable count
8/8/8/8 or 8/6/8/6 or 10/10/10/10 etc -
Just think about keeping it steady for better flow (if it's a rhymed poem).
For example:
"Slo' Joe was a race horse (6)
(so many seasons) back.(6)
He was the slowest horse (6)
to ever run the track. (6)
(Well,) everyone could see (6)
he had a big(-big) heart (6)
But, he was always the last(6)
to make a speedy start. (6)
and so on...
Otherwise, wonderful, imaginative poem!
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Hi,
This is a heart warming story about poor Joe finding his place after failing as a race horse - and turning into the best farm horse ever!
Lovely writing and great message! This could be a perfect candidate for children's poetry, as well.
I have just one thing I'd like to suggest in further poems -
consider sticking with a consistent syllable count
8/8/8/8 or 8/6/8/6 or 10/10/10/10 etc -
Just think about keeping it steady for better flow (if it's a rhymed poem).
For example:
"Slo' Joe was a race horse (6)
(so many seasons) back.(6)
He was the slowest horse (6)
to ever run the track. (6)
(Well,) everyone could see (6)
he had a big(-big) heart (6)
But, he was always the last(6)
to make a speedy start. (6)
and so on...
Otherwise, wonderful, imaginative poem!
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and stars, they are appreciated.
Comment from gramalot8
I love Western and Cowboy poetry. Your words brought ol' Joe alive for this reader. I'm glad someone realized his great potential! Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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I love Western and Cowboy poetry. Your words brought ol' Joe alive for this reader. I'm glad someone realized his great potential! Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your nice review and stars. Slo' Joe also
says thanks.
Comment from RShipp
What a wonderful poem about each of us needing to find 'just the perfect place' to use our many talents.
I am so glad that someone took a chance on Slo' Joe!
Loved It!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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What a wonderful poem about each of us needing to find 'just the perfect place' to use our many talents.
I am so glad that someone took a chance on Slo' Joe!
Loved It!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Slo' Joe really appreciates the beautiful six stars. So do I.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Ol' Slo' Joe wasn't cut out to be a race horse. He did his best to show his owner that by doing everything wrong during a race. It's a wonder he didn't try going the wrong way on the the track during a race. The first time my mother ever bet on a horse, it ran the wrong way and she never bet on another horse in her life! LOL Great job, Willie!
Patty
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Ol' Slo' Joe wasn't cut out to be a race horse. He did his best to show his owner that by doing everything wrong during a race. It's a wonder he didn't try going the wrong way on the the track during a race. The first time my mother ever bet on a horse, it ran the wrong way and she never bet on another horse in her life! LOL Great job, Willie!
Patty
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Patty for the very nice, comical review nd stars. Like your mother, if I bet on a horse, it would probably run off the track. Slo' Joe also says thanks.