Trapped Amidst Terror
A 5-7-5 Poem18 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Astounding visual imagery in such a short poem. Good accompanying artwork, but not necessary. Good alliterations with trapped-terror and fragile-fears. Good resonance with m words and vowels. Nicely done.Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Astounding visual imagery in such a short poem. Good accompanying artwork, but not necessary. Good alliterations with trapped-terror and fragile-fears. Good resonance with m words and vowels. Nicely done.Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you for your very encouraging review, I like that you pointed out what made this worthy of your great six stars, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Wow the picture was scary enough, the poem followed imparting more scary thoughts. I know I've felt like my brain was ready to explode more than once during the seclusion of this pandemic. You have aptly described the terror that fear can induce.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Wow the picture was scary enough, the poem followed imparting more scary thoughts. I know I've felt like my brain was ready to explode more than once during the seclusion of this pandemic. You have aptly described the terror that fear can induce.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for these very encouraging comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about feeling trapped in our own homes, and unable to venture outside if it is not essential can drive us to craziness. I keep myself busy as much as I can not to be urged to go outside if it is not needed.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about feeling trapped in our own homes, and unable to venture outside if it is not essential can drive us to craziness. I keep myself busy as much as I can not to be urged to go outside if it is not needed.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you very much, and yes trying to keep busy is the best way, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Willosa
Your poem conveys the fear of being trapped within a persons own head very well. I have a friend who is finding our current situation extremely frightening, she suffers from bipolar disorder. Your words though few powerfully capture what many must be felling right now.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Your poem conveys the fear of being trapped within a persons own head very well. I have a friend who is finding our current situation extremely frightening, she suffers from bipolar disorder. Your words though few powerfully capture what many must be felling right now.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This evokes images, mostly of psychological torent. Not sure that was your meaning for it, but poetry has a way of meaning different things to different people. I really liked this one for it's expressiveness.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This evokes images, mostly of psychological torent. Not sure that was your meaning for it, but poetry has a way of meaning different things to different people. I really liked this one for it's expressiveness.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank very much, and yes poetry can be read many different ways, but you read this as I meant it, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Trapped Amidst Terror
by kahpot
Hello my friend
Great 5/7/5 poem about the covid19 pandemic. Cool presentation. Good syllable count.
It's okay to go for a walk as long as you keep safe distance. You can also go to the store with a mask on. But I know what you mean.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Trapped Amidst Terror
by kahpot
Hello my friend
Great 5/7/5 poem about the covid19 pandemic. Cool presentation. Good syllable count.
It's okay to go for a walk as long as you keep safe distance. You can also go to the store with a mask on. But I know what you mean.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you my friend, I thought I would try a horror one, after reading so many wonderful ones of yours, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very sad 'fallout' of all this craziness is those that DO NOT do well in isolation... I dare say the number is much higher than many may imagine... :( ;( Thanx for sharing that truth that many do not realize... Take care! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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A very sad 'fallout' of all this craziness is those that DO NOT do well in isolation... I dare say the number is much higher than many may imagine... :( ;( Thanx for sharing that truth that many do not realize... Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you friend for you wonderful comments and review, stay safe and as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
You captured the intense feeling of isolation and fear that too many people have sadly been left to experience during this pandemic. I truly wish there had been a more thoughtful and expansive approach with how it burst into the open with so much politics surrounding it--like a fire as your artwork so aptly illustrates. Some folks are truly oblivious to how close to tragedy many people live.
Great job K and something that I hope politicians consider before fanning the flames for personal gain.
Thank you for sharing the facts.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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You captured the intense feeling of isolation and fear that too many people have sadly been left to experience during this pandemic. I truly wish there had been a more thoughtful and expansive approach with how it burst into the open with so much politics surrounding it--like a fire as your artwork so aptly illustrates. Some folks are truly oblivious to how close to tragedy many people live.
Great job K and something that I hope politicians consider before fanning the flames for personal gain.
Thank you for sharing the facts.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for these wonderful and encouraging comments, and yes the politicians do need to look at this, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
You described the situation well -- "lonely, fragile minds implode" captures the feeling. I think the loneliness multiplies the fear as there isn't someone else to talk things out with. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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You described the situation well -- "lonely, fragile minds implode" captures the feeling. I think the loneliness multiplies the fear as there isn't someone else to talk things out with. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your excellent review, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a really excellent 5-7-5 poem.
To be grammatically correct, (and even stronger), the first line I think should be either 'trapped amidst terrors' or 'trapped within terror'. Personally I prefer the first, because it is the better match for the last line.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is a really excellent 5-7-5 poem.
To be grammatically correct, (and even stronger), the first line I think should be either 'trapped amidst terrors' or 'trapped within terror'. Personally I prefer the first, because it is the better match for the last line.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and help, very much appreciated****kahpot