Wonder Lust
A poem in abab quatrains65 total reviews
Comment from qinluo
White birds and white words , soothing my intranquil heart , lavation my heart blanked .Writing sent seeds with you , suppressing the turmoiled air for me , pulling out the long neck of truth which may being the way or appreance like egrets , sketching the portrait for absurdity , whipping the stature to adjust posture , warming my heart .
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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White birds and white words , soothing my intranquil heart , lavation my heart blanked .Writing sent seeds with you , suppressing the turmoiled air for me , pulling out the long neck of truth which may being the way or appreance like egrets , sketching the portrait for absurdity , whipping the stature to adjust posture , warming my heart .
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Many thanks for this wonderful review and for the sixth star. Much appreciated, Tony.
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You earned that .
Comment from Puzzle
I actually think your poem should have won. This is absolutely beautiful and way more creative than the one that one. But I'm not the judge! Lol. Great job. This piece is mastery.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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I actually think your poem should have won. This is absolutely beautiful and way more creative than the one that one. But I'm not the judge! Lol. Great job. This piece is mastery.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thanks, Puzzle. The results of these contests are sometimes a bit of a puzzle, but I don't take them too seriously! I appreciate your very kind comment. All the best, Tony
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Yeah it?s personal preference too. I definitely admire the way you write and your choice of subject. This poem inspired me to write something today. I?m posting it tomorrow! Thanks :)
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I'll look out for it.
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It?s called ?on the verge?
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Wonder Lust", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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"Wonder Lust", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Duchess, and suggestion of six-worthiness. Most affirming. All good wishes, Tony
Tony,
you're more than welcome. I wish I'd had a TRUE six.
God bless and stay safe,
the Duchess
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent, Tony. I think we've all been in this spot with our words/birds taking off for more desirable climes. However, no one else expresses it as you do. Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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This is excellent, Tony. I think we've all been in this spot with our words/birds taking off for more desirable climes. However, no one else expresses it as you do. Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Marilyn, for your review and supportive comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Halfree
Just liked this poem ....The last verse was a great closing verse. Read your poem three times and with each reading the poem got better, very enjoyable. This has to be one of your best...Good work here. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Just liked this poem ....The last verse was a great closing verse. Read your poem three times and with each reading the poem got better, very enjoyable. This has to be one of your best...Good work here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Halfree, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from DeboraDyess
Your 'seeds' scattered just beautifully, sir! This is a lovely navigation through a thought, meandering around your head and heart.
In other words, well done! I enjoyed it.
thank you for sharing!
Be safe and blessed,
Deb
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Your 'seeds' scattered just beautifully, sir! This is a lovely navigation through a thought, meandering around your head and heart.
In other words, well done! I enjoyed it.
thank you for sharing!
Be safe and blessed,
Deb
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Deb, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Tfawcus,
This is a lovely poem with some beautiful words of a beautiful creature. It's a beautiful opening to your descriptive poem. Your imaergy is so lovely of this awesome egret. Also, There's beautiful rhymes and flow of your words in this piece. An unforunate death for the fish, but birds have to eat to survive. So sad, the egret was captured after killing the fish. Such is life. You win some and you lose some. Their wings have been clipped forever. A great writing for this amazing poem, "Wonder Lust." Great job! Thanks. Stay safe. Happy writing:-)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Hello Tfawcus,
This is a lovely poem with some beautiful words of a beautiful creature. It's a beautiful opening to your descriptive poem. Your imaergy is so lovely of this awesome egret. Also, There's beautiful rhymes and flow of your words in this piece. An unforunate death for the fish, but birds have to eat to survive. So sad, the egret was captured after killing the fish. Such is life. You win some and you lose some. Their wings have been clipped forever. A great writing for this amazing poem, "Wonder Lust." Great job! Thanks. Stay safe. Happy writing:-)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Joyce, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and thought it worth a sixth star. Most affirming. All good wishes, Tony
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you are welcome.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Tony. Excellent poem and one reason is because of your wonderful use of strong verbs. As you know verbs are "King" and you proved it here
"Whose splash plinked in the pool a rippled wave of lace."
Best of luck with this write my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Hi Tony. Excellent poem and one reason is because of your wonderful use of strong verbs. As you know verbs are "King" and you proved it here
"Whose splash plinked in the pool a rippled wave of lace."
Best of luck with this write my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Bob, for your review and comments about verb usage. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and thought it worth a sixth star. Most affirming. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Badger_29
Simply outstanding.
What a wonderful tribute to such majestic and beautiful creatures.
I am very pleased with the way that you presented this. Great rhyme, meter and flow.
I see no errors or room for improvement.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Simply outstanding.
What a wonderful tribute to such majestic and beautiful creatures.
I am very pleased with the way that you presented this. Great rhyme, meter and flow.
I see no errors or room for improvement.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Darren, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and judged it worth a sixth star. Most affirming. All good wishes, Tony
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Glad to oblige Tony, you're one of the longest friends have had here. I appreciate your continued support and fellowship here also.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
If only words were not solid and finite, but like pigment on an artist's palette,
capable of being blended into infinite possibilities.
I sometimes create new words when the existing choices are inadequate or my ability to use them insufficient to the task.
Excellent alternating rhymes and iambic hexameter.
You must have exceptional stealth to net two egrets.
Words are much like seeds, some require attention, some bloom wild,
some are eaten.
You've cultivated well.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Hello Tony,
If only words were not solid and finite, but like pigment on an artist's palette,
capable of being blended into infinite possibilities.
I sometimes create new words when the existing choices are inadequate or my ability to use them insufficient to the task.
Excellent alternating rhymes and iambic hexameter.
You must have exceptional stealth to net two egrets.
Words are much like seeds, some require attention, some bloom wild,
some are eaten.
You've cultivated well.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Robert, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and thought it worth a sixth star. It would certainly have been hard to net two egrets! The lovebirds were much easier. All good wishes, Tony