The Ritual
A Sevenelle for the Potlatch Challenge20 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A beautiful, sad Sevenelle about her one night of the year when
her eyes won't shed a single tear, as she still waits for her love to return to her, as she lives on, in hope. Well told tale, really enjoyed it,
cheers
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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A beautiful, sad Sevenelle about her one night of the year when
her eyes won't shed a single tear, as she still waits for her love to return to her, as she lives on, in hope. Well told tale, really enjoyed it,
cheers
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback. I really appreciate your insights.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Nicely done. A true heart breaking saga of unrequited love that never ends. Living the day year after year and never doubting the dream will come true. How very sad. The message is definitely and artfully portrayed in your poem.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Nicely done. A true heart breaking saga of unrequited love that never ends. Living the day year after year and never doubting the dream will come true. How very sad. The message is definitely and artfully portrayed in your poem.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights on this piece. I really appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Joy Graham
That is a beautiful picture. Stunning, really. I rather enjoyed this poetry form. Seven line stanzas with the last two lines repeating in every stanza. I like the rhyme scheme too. It's so sad when brides get stood up at the altar. I enjoyed reading your poem today. Well done.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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That is a beautiful picture. Stunning, really. I rather enjoyed this poetry form. Seven line stanzas with the last two lines repeating in every stanza. I like the rhyme scheme too. It's so sad when brides get stood up at the altar. I enjoyed reading your poem today. Well done.
Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your sympathetic and insightful review.
Comment from Irish Rain
Well this is just beautiful Miss June.
I love this form, and your repeating
lines were skillfully and wonderfully
chosen.
A resplendent rhapsody!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Well this is just beautiful Miss June.
I love this form, and your repeating
lines were skillfully and wonderfully
chosen.
A resplendent rhapsody!
Blessings...
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I appreciate your dropping by to read and share your insights. It?s always nice to hear from you.
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You're welcome!
Comment from BeasPeas
Wow! Talk about carrying a torch ~ this lady does it. Your Sevenelle poem is excellent, worded and rhymed well. The image is very interesting and perfect for your piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Wow! Talk about carrying a torch ~ this lady does it. Your Sevenelle poem is excellent, worded and rhymed well. The image is very interesting and perfect for your piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging comments!
Comment from Aussie
Well done and your story/poem evoked sympathy and longing for a happy ending to the jilted lady. In some ways, your poem reminds me of a famous writer who wrote about a woman who left the table set for a wedding breakfast until cobwebs overtook every thing. Ah, yes, her name was Miss Haversham. Well, your writing touched me. Thanks for sharing. XXK.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Well done and your story/poem evoked sympathy and longing for a happy ending to the jilted lady. In some ways, your poem reminds me of a famous writer who wrote about a woman who left the table set for a wedding breakfast until cobwebs overtook every thing. Ah, yes, her name was Miss Haversham. Well, your writing touched me. Thanks for sharing. XXK.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this piece. I always appreciate your stopping by to read and share your insights.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Ritual", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet has told it as it is. This heart-rending piece was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to reading your next post.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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"The Ritual", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet has told it as it is. This heart-rending piece was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to reading your next post.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and sharing your insights! I appreciate the encouraging and positive feedback on this piece.
Comment from damommy
You've written a beautiful, though sad, sevenelle. I guess one's mind does what it needs to stave off hurtful thoughts. This reminded me of Cinderella is the prince hadn't shown interest in her.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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You've written a beautiful, though sad, sevenelle. I guess one's mind does what it needs to stave off hurtful thoughts. This reminded me of Cinderella is the prince hadn't shown interest in her.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights.
Comment from bob cullen
"When the mind chooses to believe what the heart knows is no longer true.'
Surely that must be the perfect phrase chosen for parenthood. That truly is a beautiful poem and one I can so easily relate to. I guess the most powerful message in this poem is it shows the amazing ability parents, and lovers too I suppose have in issuing forgiveness. Your phrase says it all
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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"When the mind chooses to believe what the heart knows is no longer true.'
Surely that must be the perfect phrase chosen for parenthood. That truly is a beautiful poem and one I can so easily relate to. I guess the most powerful message in this poem is it shows the amazing ability parents, and lovers too I suppose have in issuing forgiveness. Your phrase says it all
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insightful comments. I appreciate very much the feedback.
Comment from Joan E.
You wove a touching story--like a reverse Cinderella in this Sevenella with its pure rhymes and repeats. Because of the parallel title and artwork, I knew where the tale was heading in the opening stanza. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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You wove a touching story--like a reverse Cinderella in this Sevenella with its pure rhymes and repeats. Because of the parallel title and artwork, I knew where the tale was heading in the opening stanza. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights on this sevenelle. I really appreciate the feedback.