I See Her
Let the words speak for themselves36 total reviews
Comment from Santiago2
This is quite stark--bare and honest. You pull the reader into the victim's world. In third person you describe how she processes the "event," personalizing her reaction, thereby making it more relatable.
Your focus on the victim's struggle for normalcy post-assault accentuates the absolute evil of the crime of rape.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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This is quite stark--bare and honest. You pull the reader into the victim's world. In third person you describe how she processes the "event," personalizing her reaction, thereby making it more relatable.
Your focus on the victim's struggle for normalcy post-assault accentuates the absolute evil of the crime of rape.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Santiago, what an honor and a pleasure. How did you find this? I?m humbled by your gracious review and even more appreciative you took the time to review a work not promoted. Thank you ever so much!
Jimi
Comment from Derrick Payton
This is a wonderful piece of work. I absolutely love it. The way you made it simple but constantly intriguing and leading the reader into the journey. I definitely enjoyed reading this and thank you for sharing this part of you. Sometimes what we think is vulnerability, others may see as strength.
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This is a wonderful piece of work. I absolutely love it. The way you made it simple but constantly intriguing and leading the reader into the journey. I definitely enjoyed reading this and thank you for sharing this part of you. Sometimes what we think is vulnerability, others may see as strength.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2019
Comment from Jo.G
Wow, how powerful is this message. I have a loved one who has experienced this same thing as this woman in the writing. You have certainly reminded me that we are all, everyone of us, carrying our own burdens, even though we may portray as something/one else. It is something that we should never forget. Thank you for this..
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Wow, how powerful is this message. I have a loved one who has experienced this same thing as this woman in the writing. You have certainly reminded me that we are all, everyone of us, carrying our own burdens, even though we may portray as something/one else. It is something that we should never forget. Thank you for this..
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
Comment from Breda Lunniss
Really Beautifully written, It had me connected from the start.
I love the way you describe her so intricately and the way it ends, its a mirror of thyself..Simply Beautiful
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Really Beautifully written, It had me connected from the start.
I love the way you describe her so intricately and the way it ends, its a mirror of thyself..Simply Beautiful
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a poignant poem about rape and its effect on its victim. It shows us the strength that is needed to get through the day and to get back to a semblance of what you were before the rape. It shows the lack of self confidence too.
Congrats on coming in second in the contest.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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This is a poignant poem about rape and its effect on its victim. It shows us the strength that is needed to get through the day and to get back to a semblance of what you were before the rape. It shows the lack of self confidence too.
Congrats on coming in second in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Good morning Dragonpoet!
Wow, the response for this poem is overwhelming. I never thought it would go anywhere much less be nominated for POM. I am truly honored. I rarely write and post here anymore, so this was an even bigger surprise. I don?t know who the other nominees were except for the ones who placed. I had been on a much needed vacation last week and made a pact with myself and my family, we wouldn?t use the internet while away. It was very hard the first two days, but we did it! However, I never knew till early this week.
Again, a huge thank you. I am very honored.
jlsavell
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You are most kindly welcome.
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Comment from Ms. Snyder
Outstanding write! This is something that I have to say hit the very core of my existence. Ms. JLSavell, you have certainly deserved to be amongst the poem of the month winners! I know that sometimes more words get overlooked for 1st place finishes as well as these types of poems where it is a personal experience that maybe not everyone has experienced for themselves. I will say that the way this was written was gripping and I feel has drawn me to make sure you are on my reading radar over and over again. I will be sure to read you within the first few hours next week if there are any new offerings. That is usually when all my 6's fly. I give it my virtual Six. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Outstanding write! This is something that I have to say hit the very core of my existence. Ms. JLSavell, you have certainly deserved to be amongst the poem of the month winners! I know that sometimes more words get overlooked for 1st place finishes as well as these types of poems where it is a personal experience that maybe not everyone has experienced for themselves. I will say that the way this was written was gripping and I feel has drawn me to make sure you are on my reading radar over and over again. I will be sure to read you within the first few hours next week if there are any new offerings. That is usually when all my 6's fly. I give it my virtual Six. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Fonda,
Thank you so very much for taking your valuable time to read and review my work. I am very honored and quite humbled. Thank you, also, for becoming my fan and bookcasing this work. Again a huge thank you!
Jimi
Comment from shaffer40
I hadn't seen this or I would have given it a vote. Such a beautiful, insightful revelation about the effects of this crime against women. I especially like the way you describe the self-consciousness of adjusting the collar, etc., gazing into the windows without feeling ugly, and the personal items as dignity, power, and grace. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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I hadn't seen this or I would have given it a vote. Such a beautiful, insightful revelation about the effects of this crime against women. I especially like the way you describe the self-consciousness of adjusting the collar, etc., gazing into the windows without feeling ugly, and the personal items as dignity, power, and grace. Well done.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Shaffer40, thank you so very much for your humbling review and gracious stars. I am honored. Your words mean a great deal to me. Again thank you
Jlsavell
Comment from Richard J
Ah, goodness-ME, Jimi!
How can one's very heart help but feel ripped from their breast, with the sinking sensation that one so beautiful as You are, in all your sweet, giving, caring ways, should ever have experienced such life bending moments of sheer dread, knowing what's happening is not only hurting you physically, but spiritually, mentally, and emotionally -- stealing your innocence, your sense of security, and that naturally bright inner glow of happiness.
I can only place myself empathetically in your being to try and grasp, not only what it was doing to you in the moment, but afterward, and for a lifetime of remembering.
Having said all that, the fact that you can even think of writing this amazingly vivid, eye and heart-opening piece is undoubtable evidence your indomitable character's inner-strength has faced this almost unsurmountable challenge head-on and overcome (at least) the most debilitating and controlling aspects of this thoughtless, callous act of violence perpetrated upon the eloquently blessed person you surely were and are.
Ever-so humbly and adoringly, Dear Jimi, I bow to your amazing spirit and fortitude. You are my own true-life heroine ... not to mention the marvelous forethought, skill, insight, compassionate caring, effort, amazing metaphorical imagery, and poetic creativity put into composing this stellar Free Verse poem in master form; and, that picture ... whew, I'm completely gobsmacked!
Knowing Lady Jimi Savell, as I do (though, not about the incident), I knew full-well this was about You ... still, when you said, "Me, that is!" I felt you inside so very-very deeply and painfully, the tears just brimmed-over ... I know guys are supposed to be strong and not do this, but I want you to know I'm not one bit ashamed, because I'm sooo wonderfully proud of You! :D
Loads of love and joy to thee, our lovely lady faire ... thanks, Dear Jimi! ~ Richard : )
"She's the woman I want to have a glass of wine with,
celebrate her successes with a shopping spree,
or just hold her in a tight embrace" Ya got THAT right, Ma'am!!!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Ah, goodness-ME, Jimi!
How can one's very heart help but feel ripped from their breast, with the sinking sensation that one so beautiful as You are, in all your sweet, giving, caring ways, should ever have experienced such life bending moments of sheer dread, knowing what's happening is not only hurting you physically, but spiritually, mentally, and emotionally -- stealing your innocence, your sense of security, and that naturally bright inner glow of happiness.
I can only place myself empathetically in your being to try and grasp, not only what it was doing to you in the moment, but afterward, and for a lifetime of remembering.
Having said all that, the fact that you can even think of writing this amazingly vivid, eye and heart-opening piece is undoubtable evidence your indomitable character's inner-strength has faced this almost unsurmountable challenge head-on and overcome (at least) the most debilitating and controlling aspects of this thoughtless, callous act of violence perpetrated upon the eloquently blessed person you surely were and are.
Ever-so humbly and adoringly, Dear Jimi, I bow to your amazing spirit and fortitude. You are my own true-life heroine ... not to mention the marvelous forethought, skill, insight, compassionate caring, effort, amazing metaphorical imagery, and poetic creativity put into composing this stellar Free Verse poem in master form; and, that picture ... whew, I'm completely gobsmacked!
Knowing Lady Jimi Savell, as I do (though, not about the incident), I knew full-well this was about You ... still, when you said, "Me, that is!" I felt you inside so very-very deeply and painfully, the tears just brimmed-over ... I know guys are supposed to be strong and not do this, but I want you to know I'm not one bit ashamed, because I'm sooo wonderfully proud of You! :D
Loads of love and joy to thee, our lovely lady faire ... thanks, Dear Jimi! ~ Richard : )
"She's the woman I want to have a glass of wine with,
celebrate her successes with a shopping spree,
or just hold her in a tight embrace" Ya got THAT right, Ma'am!!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Richard,
My dearest and sweetest friend, your visit has left me with a happy heart. This was a pleasant unexpected surprise. Thank you so very much. This review brought me to tears...
your friend always...
jimi
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is gripping and heart-wrenching, conveying the thoughts many rape victims surely have. In addition to the pain and shame, they realize
there are "silent assumptions" whirling all around.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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This poem is gripping and heart-wrenching, conveying the thoughts many rape victims surely have. In addition to the pain and shame, they realize
there are "silent assumptions" whirling all around.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Janice Canerdy,
thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. I am honored..
jlsavell
Comment from mancub
You have very strong emotions throughout and tell a story that many can relate to, there is a strong sense of feeling locked inside and the desire to feel needed and accepted without condition, you express your feelings with strength and your emotions are felt from beginning to end, there is so much to bee seen within this and so much to be heard as well. In life we often see someone that holds great potential and longs for acceptance but has been mislead, tattered and torn down, often a sincere act of kindness, a simple genuine hello, a smile or a polite nod of the head can bring a glimpse of light into ones day, you have a wonderful write here and it is strong and emotional, nice job, Thank you for sharing,Mancub
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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You have very strong emotions throughout and tell a story that many can relate to, there is a strong sense of feeling locked inside and the desire to feel needed and accepted without condition, you express your feelings with strength and your emotions are felt from beginning to end, there is so much to bee seen within this and so much to be heard as well. In life we often see someone that holds great potential and longs for acceptance but has been mislead, tattered and torn down, often a sincere act of kindness, a simple genuine hello, a smile or a polite nod of the head can bring a glimpse of light into ones day, you have a wonderful write here and it is strong and emotional, nice job, Thank you for sharing,Mancub
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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mancub,
Your review moves me greatly. I am extremely appreciative of the time you took to digest and dissect this very personal work. thank you so very much..
jlsavell