Anything for Their Penelope
She hadn't come back to stay...18 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
Like I said a few minutes ago, you could write 7 books of limericks. How do you write such intricate stories while teaching and writing a novel as well? Ideas must be floating in your head prepackaged for the page. It's amazing how much you write and how good each post is.
This one is such a pleasant depiction of death. I like the name of your story. When the cute and handsome death reapers called Penelope by her first name, it changed the tone of the story. It became more gentle and clearer as to what was going on. I also like your choice of Nurse Ratched's name and the juxtaposition of the Ratched earthly care giver and the gentle death reaper.
This is a winner for sure. Have I ever mentioned that before?
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Like I said a few minutes ago, you could write 7 books of limericks. How do you write such intricate stories while teaching and writing a novel as well? Ideas must be floating in your head prepackaged for the page. It's amazing how much you write and how good each post is.
This one is such a pleasant depiction of death. I like the name of your story. When the cute and handsome death reapers called Penelope by her first name, it changed the tone of the story. It became more gentle and clearer as to what was going on. I also like your choice of Nurse Ratched's name and the juxtaposition of the Ratched earthly care giver and the gentle death reaper.
This is a winner for sure. Have I ever mentioned that before?
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Oh, you are right about one thing: there are not enough hours in a day to capture everything that my crazy brain thinks up! :) ;) Thank you for these WONDERFUL stars, MQ, they have made my day!! ;) ;) I know I've told you that I get attached to my characters no matter how short or long the story and this one just flowed out once I put that 'sentence' on the page.... Like I said, lots of crazy stuff the brain comes up with.... just put the train on the tracks and press 'GO' - LOL! :) ;) You have mentioned it before...and I thank you honestly from my heart every time... your belief means more than a ribbon (okay, so a ribbon is nice, but YOU are golden!). Take care down there! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from diamondbogle
Yo this was really cool. I like the way this was written. It had imagery but yet I kinda went off with it. I also liked how it flowed really nicely. Overall really well done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Yo this was really cool. I like the way this was written. It had imagery but yet I kinda went off with it. I also liked how it flowed really nicely. Overall really well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thanx for the review, ma'am -- always good to hear from you! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Yvette, that was so beautiful. I was enchanted, eating up the words. I know of people who have spent years in a coma and often wondered what it must be like to come out of it and find out you have 'slept' your life away. This was lovely in that she was able to say goodbye to her daughter. I wondered if Ronan was her husband. That would have been nice. Who knows? Beautiful story and a winner most definitely. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Oh, Yvette, that was so beautiful. I was enchanted, eating up the words. I know of people who have spent years in a coma and often wondered what it must be like to come out of it and find out you have 'slept' your life away. This was lovely in that she was able to say goodbye to her daughter. I wondered if Ronan was her husband. That would have been nice. Who knows? Beautiful story and a winner most definitely. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Sandra, for the wonderful comments -- and I'm so glad my story enticed your mind to go further...that is certainly a writer's dream come true!! :) ;) Your review was very appreciated -- thank you! :) ;)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Geeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeezzzzzzzz!!! I am CRYING. Fantasy is NOT my favorite genre. But I think you might have changed that... I think I will undoubtedly read ANY fantasy you write.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Geeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeezzzzzzzz!!! I am CRYING. Fantasy is NOT my favorite genre. But I think you might have changed that... I think I will undoubtedly read ANY fantasy you write.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Oh, Dawn, thank you so very much -- your review REALLY made my evening! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoy my writing.....you know, I've been told there's a conflict with being a Christian and writing Science Fiction/Fantasy - that I can't be both even though I am - and it's just good to hear that you being who you are liked what I wrote!! :) ;) Take care, O Lady of the North and have a great remainder of the week! :) Yvette
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Wow, people have the strangest ideas. Being a Christian conflicts with writing Sci Fi? Good grief.
You're very welcome. I'm glad you're pleased. :)
Comment from Kierra Bailey
I really enjoyed this piece. I love the cute little things that only she saw, and how they had more of a personality and more of the focus that the not so nice nurses.
I found myself longing to know about how she got there, and wanting her to be able to have more time with her daughter. I guess I just really connected. Nice one!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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I really enjoyed this piece. I love the cute little things that only she saw, and how they had more of a personality and more of the focus that the not so nice nurses.
I found myself longing to know about how she got there, and wanting her to be able to have more time with her daughter. I guess I just really connected. Nice one!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanx for stopping by for the read and review, Kierra -- and I'm glad you enjoyed! :) ;) And if you wanted to know more 'cuz you got connected, then I did pretty good, yeah?! :) ;) LOL! :) LOL! :) You take good care out there, ma'am -- and have a great week ahead! :) Yvette
Comment from Nanny 6
The way you tell the story puts the reader in a tight relationship with Penelope. And gives a very clear picture of what's going on as she begins to pass away. I enjoyed the suspense and wondering throughout. Good luck in the contest!
Judy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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The way you tell the story puts the reader in a tight relationship with Penelope. And gives a very clear picture of what's going on as she begins to pass away. I enjoyed the suspense and wondering throughout. Good luck in the contest!
Judy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping in for the review, Judy -- your comments and your review are so very appreciated! :) ;) Have a wonderful day, ma'am! :) Yvette
Comment from 24chas
This was a great read, Yvette. It transfixed me right from the beginning and the smooth style lasted the whole length of the piece. Great characters and descriptions and the dialogue was realistic. Nice job.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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This was a great read, Yvette. It transfixed me right from the beginning and the smooth style lasted the whole length of the piece. Great characters and descriptions and the dialogue was realistic. Nice job.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanx for the review, Chas -- I'm glad you enjoyed! :) ;) I always enjoy these short writes as they allow the imagination to really stretch its legs! :) Take care! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Pinder
Amazing creativity in this short story about a death experience involving imps and the dreaded nurse ratchet. I'm so glad I never met a nurse ratchet in real life.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Amazing creativity in this short story about a death experience involving imps and the dreaded nurse ratchet. I'm so glad I never met a nurse ratchet in real life.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Oh, Bill, you have made my week, sir!! :) :) I'm so glad you enjoyed the imps -- they were a fun visual as I wrote it! :) ;) You know me, always gonna come up with 'something different' ... LOL! ;) :) Thank you for the great comments and for those lovely stars.... thank you! :) ;) Yvette :)
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You?re very welcome and very deserving!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very interesting. She woke up from a long coma only to say goodby to her family and die. Kind of sad. Satisfying ending though, since she's not sad about it... but I am. I wanted her to be back to her normal self. Well, I seldom gdt what I ask for, but this is still a good story. :)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Very interesting. She woke up from a long coma only to say goodby to her family and die. Kind of sad. Satisfying ending though, since she's not sad about it... but I am. I wanted her to be back to her normal self. Well, I seldom gdt what I ask for, but this is still a good story. :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thanx for your review on this one, Phyllis -- I appreciate your taking time out of your busy editing ma'am -- you rock!! :) ;) Take care and hope things are going along well! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from royowen
At our home group on Sunday we were talking about what death looked like, it was spurred by a book I was reading about s four year old boy who had ascended to heaven during a near death experience. You are a very unique writer Yvette, bold and imaginitve, creative to the point of "left field" writing, I'm never quite prepared for the stories you write, most others are predictable, but not you. Well done, I was challenged with this one, bless you, Roy
Typo : And I laced our (fingered) together as one. Fingers?
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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At our home group on Sunday we were talking about what death looked like, it was spurred by a book I was reading about s four year old boy who had ascended to heaven during a near death experience. You are a very unique writer Yvette, bold and imaginitve, creative to the point of "left field" writing, I'm never quite prepared for the stories you write, most others are predictable, but not you. Well done, I was challenged with this one, bless you, Roy
Typo : And I laced our (fingered) together as one. Fingers?
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Oh, Roy, you have just given me the best compliment I think you or anyone ever has: that I'm unpredictable!! :) ;) I am so very glad and I promise you that I will always endeavor to be that way....I have always been an 'out-of-the-box' person....if fact, I'm not really sure what a 'box' is - LOL! :) ;) So glad you enjoyed Penelope and the imps! :) ;) Take care, my friend! :) ;) Yvette
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Well done, I hate boxes too Yvette. Roy