Injustice
naani8 total reviews
Comment from Teresa Alford
So very true. Such an interesting thought. I had not looked at the worm and apple in that way. This is a thought provoking poem. I appreciate your writing it. Now I am going to comtemplate it.
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So very true. Such an interesting thought. I had not looked at the worm and apple in that way. This is a thought provoking poem. I appreciate your writing it. Now I am going to comtemplate it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Injustice, uses the four lines and twenty-two syllables to have the reader infer that people are damaged from little things that may not be obvious to the casual onlooker. This truism is related well here.
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This naani, Injustice, uses the four lines and twenty-two syllables to have the reader infer that people are damaged from little things that may not be obvious to the casual onlooker. This truism is related well here.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a great metaphor. The reader can see this as the imagery of insidiousness of their own governments. That's where my mind automatically goes. This is excellent. I am voting for it.
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This is a great metaphor. The reader can see this as the imagery of insidiousness of their own governments. That's where my mind automatically goes. This is excellent. I am voting for it.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
Comment from Six-Star Writer
I think this is how serial killer thoughts sometimes enter serial killers. Or maybe not a worm, but a may fly that lays eggs in someone's brain. And when the larvae hatch, they eat a person's good thoughts.
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I think this is how serial killer thoughts sometimes enter serial killers. Or maybe not a worm, but a may fly that lays eggs in someone's brain. And when the larvae hatch, they eat a person's good thoughts.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is genius.
This is eye appealing. Perfect illustration, font, like the black/red.
Love this. I perceive this as a double message, in that it could be taken literally or be describing what we allow to enter our soul and thoughts that could destroy us, turning us into a 'bad apple', which is not visible to the human appearance, but is something deep within us.
This is definitely a winner!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gale
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This is genius.
This is eye appealing. Perfect illustration, font, like the black/red.
Love this. I perceive this as a double message, in that it could be taken literally or be describing what we allow to enter our soul and thoughts that could destroy us, turning us into a 'bad apple', which is not visible to the human appearance, but is something deep within us.
This is definitely a winner!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gale
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
Comment from phill doran
Yo! Anon...
This is a brilliant piece in this form. Clear, crisp and compact It is very accomplished and has such a subtle 'meaning' that the reader cannot help but pause and interpret it in their own frame of reference.
"Le ver est dans le fruit." as the French would have it.
You MUST do well with this and I for one will keep an eye out at the booth for it.
I wish you well
cheers
phill
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Yo! Anon...
This is a brilliant piece in this form. Clear, crisp and compact It is very accomplished and has such a subtle 'meaning' that the reader cannot help but pause and interpret it in their own frame of reference.
"Le ver est dans le fruit." as the French would have it.
You MUST do well with this and I for one will keep an eye out at the booth for it.
I wish you well
cheers
phill
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very thought-provoking naani--concise (as all naanis are)
and conveying a powerful theme. Something evil can enter our being
during a fleeting opportunity and, over time, do great damage to
who we ARE. The change may not show outwardly.
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This is a very thought-provoking naani--concise (as all naanis are)
and conveying a powerful theme. Something evil can enter our being
during a fleeting opportunity and, over time, do great damage to
who we ARE. The change may not show outwardly.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
Comment from nordicgirl
This practically knocks me over. How beautifully put. So very true. Nothing eats away at someone like being treated unfairly, nothing. Amazing piece. NG
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This practically knocks me over. How beautifully put. So very true. Nothing eats away at someone like being treated unfairly, nothing. Amazing piece. NG
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019