The Groom
A groom jumps to conclusions16 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Pam, I am such this story has played over many times...jealousy is a strong emotion sweet girl...and one with so much anger...quick to ignite...your story is very well told my sweet friend...has great rhythm and rhyme...and a good smooth read...I love your poem...and a perfect picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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HI Pam, I am such this story has played over many times...jealousy is a strong emotion sweet girl...and one with so much anger...quick to ignite...your story is very well told my sweet friend...has great rhythm and rhyme...and a good smooth read...I love your poem...and a perfect picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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Thank you Linda for a wonderful review and such kind words
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soooooo welcome Pam...always you...love you...xxoo
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Pam. This is a dark story poem that moves along all the way through with good rhyming and story line. Quite a place we have here in this barroom brawl. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Hi Pam. This is a dark story poem that moves along all the way through with good rhyming and story line. Quite a place we have here in this barroom brawl. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Thank you Marilyn for taking the time to review this with such lovely words
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Wow Pam you have that peculiar way of pulling the reader into your stories abd this one had me all the way in. You know this is a teagic situation and in the end pain and confusion is the end results
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Wow Pam you have that peculiar way of pulling the reader into your stories abd this one had me all the way in. You know this is a teagic situation and in the end pain and confusion is the end results
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you Mary for your awesome review
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My pleasure
Comment from kahpot
Well this one has got me truly intrigued when you met up with the lovesick groom on the way to the ladies room and another man is not fully dressed, and telltale semen stains I was expecting that maybe the groom was gay, What a wonderful and very interesting poem this is very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Well this one has got me truly intrigued when you met up with the lovesick groom on the way to the ladies room and another man is not fully dressed, and telltale semen stains I was expecting that maybe the groom was gay, What a wonderful and very interesting poem this is very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you kahpot for a truly wonderful review
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. That is so very sad about what happened to the groom. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. That is so very sad about what happened to the groom. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thank you Teri for such a wonderful review
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you are so welcome!
Comment from kiwijenny
I'm hearing Elvis sing Suspicious Minds. You can't go on that way...oh and in this case they didn't...stupid stupid stupid,,....you know with out pure idiocy we'd not have one single movie or television show...without our foibles we'd have no gun shots shooting the wrong person for all the wrong reasons..
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I'm hearing Elvis sing Suspicious Minds. You can't go on that way...oh and in this case they didn't...stupid stupid stupid,,....you know with out pure idiocy we'd not have one single movie or television show...without our foibles we'd have no gun shots shooting the wrong person for all the wrong reasons..
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thank you kiwi for a really lovely review
Comment from lyenochka
Another story well told in verse form! I like how you put the narrator at the scene of the crime and help the reader take an objective view of what happened. So sad that guns are used instead of words!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Another story well told in verse form! I like how you put the narrator at the scene of the crime and help the reader take an objective view of what happened. So sad that guns are used instead of words!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thank you lyenochka for a lovely review
Comment from jenintorre
Well Pam you have certainly written a saga of a poem here. Very unlike your usual writing. Very adventurous. 'Cigarettes' remains'. Did you mean cigarette remains? I was a bit surprised that it all took place in the Ladies room.
I was hoping that you would review my story in 50 words that came first in the contest.
Do they not notify you of the poems etc. after they have been judged as they are not blind then? Hugs. Jen x
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Well Pam you have certainly written a saga of a poem here. Very unlike your usual writing. Very adventurous. 'Cigarettes' remains'. Did you mean cigarette remains? I was a bit surprised that it all took place in the Ladies room.
I was hoping that you would review my story in 50 words that came first in the contest.
Do they not notify you of the poems etc. after they have been judged as they are not blind then? Hugs. Jen x
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Hi Jen. She was not in the lqdies? room when she say the men. She was running to the bathroom not yet in the bathroom
?I'm running to the ladies' room,
and meet up with a lovesick groom. ?. She has not gotten there until she hides behind the bathroom door. I wanted multiple cigarettes in the hallway. It is a seedy bar. Thank you for your lovely review
Comment from Hitcher
A very good, well crafted, rhyming story in poem friend. I do enjoy reading lengthy poems when they are done well. The visuals played out perfectly in the minds eye, the seedy bar came alive and that green'eyed monster took him down.
Your story hits the nail on the head as far as the darker side Jealousy goes. I'm sure many a man or woman would have lashed out at an innocent party and got themselves into all kinds of trouble.
I love poets who take the time and make the effort to write Quality poems of length... just checked I six have a six. Yea~ it's yours now : ) Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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A very good, well crafted, rhyming story in poem friend. I do enjoy reading lengthy poems when they are done well. The visuals played out perfectly in the minds eye, the seedy bar came alive and that green'eyed monster took him down.
Your story hits the nail on the head as far as the darker side Jealousy goes. I'm sure many a man or woman would have lashed out at an innocent party and got themselves into all kinds of trouble.
I love poets who take the time and make the effort to write Quality poems of length... just checked I six have a six. Yea~ it's yours now : ) Well done!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Wow. Thank you Hitcher for the extra star. I used my last one yesterday. I am glad you had one left. Thank you for the awesome review
Comment from WriterHeather
A very tragic story that I am sure has been played out time and again, all over the world. This rhymes so nicely, flows well and is interesting. There is a lesson here to be learned. Don't jump to conclusions until all the facts are in...and don't' marry someone who carries a gun around. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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A very tragic story that I am sure has been played out time and again, all over the world. This rhymes so nicely, flows well and is interesting. There is a lesson here to be learned. Don't jump to conclusions until all the facts are in...and don't' marry someone who carries a gun around. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Good advice WroterHeather not to be with a man who carries a gun. But maybe she didn?t know and maybe he followed her. Thank you for your really lovely review